Denied Truth vs. yo boy D
6 bars/12 lines
I'll drop First
No hating
No DykRydin
No BullShyttin/Bitin/Recylin
No Flypin
Ball..Check'd
I'll Drop To-Morrow Cuz I Need Sleep
Denied Truth vs. yo boy D
6 bars/12 lines
I'll drop First
No hating
No DykRydin
No BullShyttin/Bitin/Recylin
No Flypin
Ball..Check'd
I'll Drop To-Morrow Cuz I Need Sleep
Damn truth why u all ways talkin all dat weak shit
da punches hit cha teeth, it'll look like u eat bricks
u say i suck? but i just key it up its nothin to rhyme
gotta shove my dick in yo head just to fuck wit yo mind
tuckin a 9, yea u know dat dis'll leave yo face gone
when im spittin, is da only way you'll get yo blaz-on
look kid im killin u slowly wit each one of deez bars
u have to put an .I.P. after or an E. in front of da R
shit where u from dawg ??? i know u heard of deez goons
of da illest in da chi, da kid sicker than emergency rooms
u certaintly doomed, cuz i gotta get rid of da haters fast
kid u put more threads to waste then a tailors trash
Thank Yu...
Quite frankly...
Man you dont stand a chance against RB's wackest rhymes
So against me you might as well leave the pollz wit my name two times...
you aint nobody's boy..no one wants to be in ur assosciation..
You aint got no skillz so voting against you..dont resemble hatin..
Da only way you cud win iz if i was disqualified on line limit...
Cuz i cud add a lose by droppin not 12 but havin 6 lines in it...
In other words i dont need all my linez for u 2 be killed...
Cuz if you dubled ur talent..you cudn't have half my skillz..
Kalikoze already hurt you...i'm just addin a bruise..
U drop wack shit so simply..u make it seem easy to lose...
U like gunz..hear some..i'ma put some *metal* to yo *head*...
Da *safety Lock* wud *steel* be on ur linez cuz dey never *red*
--Last Bar--- He be talkin bout gunz all da time...if i put da metal to ur head..den ders a gun on ur head...if da safety lock iz on ur steel..ur gun..den u caint shoot which mean u cant see da red--blood...
yoboyd yo shit was gd im fellin it u get my vote.. truth ur shit was good its js i feel yoboyd's more
boooooo @ this.
yo boy D came played as fuck, matter fact I think your more played than chess games at geek gatherings. Anyway you suck ass so blahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
Truth came pretty much what I expected from a beginner. He had the idea and will eventually form that into something good in the future. Keep trying and youll be good in about 3 months and a half if you try your hardest.
v/ - Truth
^no poll vote...
But eh appreciate feedback..and ima make a impact in less den 3 months u can count on dat...But um big upz...
Damn truth why u all ways talkin all dat weak shit
da punches hit cha teeth, it'll look like u eat bricks
poor punch
u say i suck? but i just key it up its nothin to rhyme
gotta shove my dick in yo head just to fuck wit yo mind
satisfactory, played. ixnay on the gay jokes
tuckin a 9, yea u know dat dis'll leave yo face gone
when im spittin, is da only way you'll get yo blaz-on
no..
look kid im killin u slowly wit each one of deez bars
u have to put an .I.P. after or an E. in front of da R
i dont get it but ok..
shit where u from dawg ??? i know u heard of deez goons
of da illest in da chi, da kid sicker than emergency rooms
haha alright
u certaintly doomed, cuz i gotta get rid of da haters fast
kid u put more threads to waste then a tailors trash
lol
you sucked up until your last 2 bars. keep working on those punches, if you could make all lines look like your last and stay consistent you would be much better, overall a good structure and alright flow.
Man you dont stand a chance against RB's wackest rhymes
So against me you might as well leave the pollz wit my name two times...
coulda been worded better..
you aint nobody's boy..no one wants to be in ur assosciation..
You aint got no skillz so voting against you..dont resemble hatin..
work on wordplay, nice vocab decent punch
Da only way you cud win iz if i was disqualified on line limit...
Cuz i cud add a lose by droppin not 12 but havin 6 lines in it...
no.
In other words i dont need all my linez for u 2 be killed...
Cuz if you dubled ur talent..you cudn't have half my skillz..
nuh uh
Kalikoze already hurt you...i'm just addin a bruise..
U drop wack shit so simply..u make it seem easy to lose...
far too basic
U like gunz..hear some..i'ma put some *metal* to yo *head*...
Da *safety Lock* wud *steel* be on ur linez cuz dey never *red*
*fake metas*
--Last Bar--- He be talkin bout gunz all da time...if i put da metal to ur head..den ders a gun on ur head...if da safety lock iz on ur steel..ur gun..den u caint shoot which mean u cant see da red--blood...
^You shouldnt have to explain this. really need to simplify.. is you used this in a battle people would look at you and go "wtf" then youd try explaining it and they be like "ah hell naw get his wackass outta here."
overall, your first couple of bars were nice and then you fell off. you also had a nice flow, structure and vocab.
however, i feel as tho d came harder with punches and closed off the battle better. keep it simple gentlemen.
v/ d
keep it up
we need some votes
yo boy d ur shit was hot mayne im feeling ur you got my vote better everything than the other cat
^WTF KINDA VOTE IZ THAT..da hell wit dat vote yung...
Oh by the way from now on so ya'll know!! IMA FEMALE!!!!!!!!
Damn truth why u all ways talkin all dat weak shit
da punches hit cha teeth, it'll look like u eat bricks
poor punch
u say i suck? but i just key it up its nothin to rhyme
gotta shove my dick in yo head just to fuck wit yo mind
satisfactory, played. ixnay on the gay jokes
tuckin a 9, yea u know dat dis'll leave yo face gone
when im spittin, is da only way you'll get yo blaz-on
no..
look kid im killin u slowly wit each one of deez bars
u have to put an .I.P. after or an E. in front of da R
i dont get it but ok..
shit where u from dawg ??? i know u heard of deez goons
of da illest in da chi, da kid sicker than emergency rooms
haha alright
u certaintly doomed, cuz i gotta get rid of da haters fast
kid u put more threads to waste then a tailors trash
lol
you sucked up until your last 2 bars. keep working on those punches, if you could make all lines look like your last and stay consistent you would be much better, overall a good structure and alright flow.
Man you dont stand a chance against RB's wackest rhymes
So against me you might as well leave the pollz wit my name two times...
coulda been worded better..
you aint nobody's boy..no one wants to be in ur assosciation..
You aint got no skillz so voting against you..dont resemble hatin..
work on wordplay, nice vocab decent punch
Da only way you cud win iz if i was disqualified on line limit...
Cuz i cud add a lose by droppin not 12 but havin 6 lines in it...
no.
In other words i dont need all my linez for u 2 be killed...
Cuz if you dubled ur talent..you cudn't have half my skillz..
nuh uh
Kalikoze already hurt you...i'm just addin a bruise..
U drop wack shit so simply..u make it seem easy to lose...
far too basic
U like gunz..hear some..i'ma put some *metal* to yo *head*...
Da *safety Lock* wud *steel* be on ur linez cuz dey never *red*
*fake metas*
--Last Bar--- He be talkin bout gunz all da time...if i put da metal to ur head..den ders a gun on ur head...if da safety lock iz on ur steel..ur gun..den u caint shoot which mean u cant see da red--blood...
^You shouldnt have to explain this. really need to simplify.. is you used this in a battle people would look at you and go "wtf" then youd try explaining it and they be like "ah hell naw get his wackass outta here."
overall, your first couple of bars were nice and then you fell off. you also had a nice flow, structure and vocab.
however, i feel as tho d came harder with punches and closed off the battle better. keep it simple gentlemen.
v/ d
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im going with d on dis one, better punchlines
hit me up on my battle with genesis
Yo Boy D....
alright here is what i liked from your verse....
look kid im killin u slowly wit each one of deez bars
u have to put an .I.P. after or an E. in front of da R
shit where u from dawg ??? i know u heard of deez goons
of da illest in da chi, da kid sicker than emergency rooms
u certaintly doomed, cuz i gotta get rid of da haters fast
kid u put more threads to waste then a tailors trash
alright nice line's.....i like the punchline's....wasnt no wordplay...at all....but overall you had a good verse....but the forum...need's work...an wordplay...good job..
Denied Truth....
alright here's what i liked from your verse...
In other words i dont need all my linez for u 2 be killed...
Cuz if you dubled ur talent..you cudn't have half my skillz..
Kalikoze already hurt you...i'm just addin a bruise..
U drop wack shit so simply..u make it seem easy to lose...
U like gunz..hear some..i'ma put some *metal* to yo *head*...
Da *safety Lock* wud *steel* be on ur linez cuz dey never *red*
alright....the punchline's could of been better....but the wordplay was better thats what i was feelin...just work on the Punches.....pz
Vote=DT
Hey man people hit this shit up we need smoe votes
ey yo boy d dogg you jus know your shit better and you know its not quanity but quality i mean truth tried killin it in every line and i wasnt feelin that on tha other hand yo had some good punches so elevate and
V.Yo boy do
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