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    16 bars

    aight, my brother A-C-E wrote this a couple months ago, b4 he got shot... and i started workin b4 he died, then i kinda got sidetracked and decided ta finish it... its bout tha 3 years we spent in prison for assault and drug posession... lets go

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    16 Bars

    (Intro A-C-E)

    Yeah niggaz!
    3 years o life wasted,
    locked up!
    A-C-E
    Fo life niggaz,
    Fuck the po’s
    Fuck tha pen,
    Fuck y’all niggaz…
    Styles P, Ta2_Tears
    Blood, even behind bars

    (Verse 1 Styles P)

    Locked up, they won't let me out
    And I had a long day in court, shit stress me out
    Won't give me a bill, they can't get me out
    Now I'm heading to the counter and, gotta do a bit here
    I used to live in lugubrious, I don't want to live here
    The walls is gray, the clothes is orange
    The phones is broke and the food is garbage
    A lotta niggaz is living with these circumstances
    S.P.'s insane I still work ya mans'
    Drug money to rap money, work ya Benz's
    Niggaz ran and told them I should've work the cans'
    Got popped for a murder attempt
    Knock me on D-block, when I was burning the hemp
    Had a brick and a stash hope they don't take me 'em to a versa extend
    Locked up and they won't let me out
    When I hit my cellblock niggaz will know to dread me out,

    (chorus A-C-E then Ta2_Tears)

    16 bars, 16 bars,
    On the road to the pen alone,
    16 bars, 16 bars,
    This is the new place that I call home


    (verse 2 A-C-E)

    Locked up they wont let me out,
    And I had a long day in court, shit stress me out,
    I sit in my cell as my sweat seep out,
    Livin this black hell, wonderin if they gon get me out,
    One question in mind, why’d they arrest me now?
    I neva thought the cops would eva fig me out,
    Now I’m in here wit rusty spoons tryin to dig me out,
    It smells of sweat and rotten sheets,
    Been here so long, almost forgotten the streets,
    Forgotten my beats, Wit
    No mo’ guncotton or heats,
    Nigga
    Locked on cellblock D, wit murderers and rapists,
    Niggaz aint very friendly, man I gotz ta escape this,
    I hate this,
    Up for arson, for assault, aggression
    Armed robbery, and gun possession,
    If they put me on tha stand, im not confessin,
    Court givin my mind oppression,
    It’s depressin,
    I know I’m not innocent, but I hope I’m not guilty,
    Racism, they thinking I’m dirty, that I’m filthy,
    All cause I’m black,
    Déjà-vu, looks like KKK is back,

    (chorus A-C-E then Ta2_Tears)

    16 bars, 16 bars,
    On the road to the pen alone,
    16 bars, 16 bars,
    This is the new place that I call home

    (verse 3 Ta2_tears)

    As I sit in my prison, imprisoned,
    I see visions of my old free life,
    My intuition was right,
    Reminisce on my old life decisions,
    Reminded by the scars and incisions,
    Now I have bars as divisions,
    between me and my exemption,
    Trying to find a source of redemption,
    I lost all sense of colour, all I see now is orange and grey,
    Trying to appreciate the pathetic life I lead, day by day,
    I’m here fo’ three mo’ years but still I show no remorse or compunction,
    On tha streets, my gat was tha source fo’ niggaz dysfunction,
    Plan malfunction, now I cant function,
    I have a conjunction on my hands,
    Now bearin chains, consumed by the power of fate,
    Now doomed with the power of hate,
    Livin with strange, deranged muthafuckas like Hannibal,
    Exchange, arrange ideas ta pop the cannibals,
    Behind bars, caged like an animal,
    Enraged, raging like animal,
    Now I’m here till I’m old and aged,
    All cuz I engaged, waged,
    In the daily struggle, In the daily juggle,
    Livin in tha urban jungle, niggaz,
    Growin up,
    I was told, goin to the pen was the only way to be a man,
    Now dat I’m grown up,
    I’m tryin to get out, any way that I can,
    When you get locked up, there no paper to write your rhymes,
    No bitches ta knock up, ya gotz ta read books ta pass the time
    This place is depressing,
    My life repressing, with
    16 bars in front of me, a toilet in the corner,
    Up in hurr, its black house, whities is foreigners,
    I’m secluded, excluded from the rest of society,
    Niggaz hate bein denuded, brooded with castration anxiety,
    My notoriety, impropriety being transformed to propriety,
    Security and camera’s eyen me, cell mate’s tryin me,
    Fuck that shit, damn I had enough,
    I’m getting tha hell outta here, even if I gots ta play rough,
    I.J.L Reppin
    Tatt And Blue Perhaps You Knew

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    yo niggaz lets get sum feed
    uppin fools...
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    Not everyone here is black...

    This piece was alright, lots of rugged emotions poured into this, i think ACE came the hardest of you 3, no jokes. ALthout ta2 you gotta elevate on flowing your verse better.
    Styles P, that shit was off the hook! jks
    Keep elevatin'
    Pz.

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    haha man styles p. is a pro dude! u ever heard tha song locked up? by STYLES P and akon? haha thats his verse, it just fit 2 tha track so i edited it in yanoe
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    yo common homies lets get sum feed bitches
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    aye that shit was killin i liked it. loved the read, you gotta watch and follow your flow a bit more, i kinda lost you towards the end but then i picked it back up, A C E came harder and his flow was a bit better, keep elevatin your shit though, thanks fer the read

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    Tha shit's hot, but A-C-E dropped it best. I can feel the aggression and shit, see the cell. Your vocab was fuckin great, nice use of words and shit, but some stuff didn't seem to fit. That shit would be cool as hell if you put it over the Locked Up track. Keep it up.
    Diamond in the rough...

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    uppin... leave feed bitches
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    i think that dude ace went off the hardest but ta2 u gotta tite name tho i like that shit. anyways this reminds me of some pac shit. i like the verses by ace and ta2 better than styles p. that dude ace had some tite rhymes in this, i ain't gonna go over em cuz there's alot in there that i liked. the best lines were by ace and i thought they were
    "Locked on cellblock D, wit murderers and rapists,
    Niggaz aint very friendly, man I gotz ta escape this,"

    that shyt was pretty tite i think. anyways from readin' this it seem like both y'all done some time cuz it sound pretty deep. i like how ta2 spits a long azz verse, u get props for that. i think it'd be even better without styles p

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    thanx fo dat homie good feed man... yo uppin... leave feed bitches
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    common sum1 drop feed up in hurr... uppin dudes...
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    ace came the hardest but i dont think u should of put styles p in there thats kinda bittin u good but u need just a lil work on ya structure to me but all in all that shit iz bangin

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    should have put that shit out 3 years ago, styles p already drop that shit, come on now you heard that shit!

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    im no bitch but this wasnt what i expected you said 16 bars and this was a open mic piece but it still was good but too far off the topic

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    ha dat aint bitin, his verse is etided in on my wax shit homie so thats y i popped it in thurr..
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