Periodic Table

[Facts Machine]

Translate my name and you get Hip-Hop, remember
I tick-talk to twats who can't realize my tempers
Thugs have hated me from January to December
Cuz my music defines harsh reality's blender
The food melts into a hot drink, they will not blink
Because they're starving like when robot's think
I had a talk with death & told him to meet me later
But these greedy haters stole my CD player
Three years later, I start losing faith in my God
After overcoming being shy, they stole my ipod
My mother cleaned ya house, my father cooked ya food
In return, you give us the projects with crooks who rude
Scrutinize my eyes and utilize no contacts
I told ya'll before, i'm a lonewolf who bombs cats
With a wu tang mentality, Phat like calories
My nigga's a base balla, we stay batter, B
Keep the reciept and the one dollar battery
Get the picture, nigga, no, fuck that, get the whole gallery
It's ova hoe, my pain has a baking soda flow
Every mothafucking line I spit is a quotable
I put the win in winter, I put the sum in summer
You put the dumb in dumber, you put the bum in bummer
I absorb Hip-Hop elements, the ironic fable
You'll never break the legs off my periodic table


This is meant for audio, but I felt like showing the lyrics first.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...18#post2599118
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...50#post2599150

[Jawn Raw]

this was more like a seriosu type om um the stucture was pretty good flow was pretty good the creativty was pretty good. the imagery was cool not really an imagery type om the om was good though complexity was on a high nice emotional statements i was feeling it man.

rtf links in the sig

[Dan Dare]

It's hard for me to say much. I haven't heard your music, so I can't really say whether this would sound nice as audio. Because you might be wack as fuck, lol. But as a piece of writing, a piece of poetry ... I thought it was flawed. A bit to much self-glorification for a text OM drop, and although I kind of liked the message from a musical point of view ... As text, it wasn't really my style. So yeah. I think you understand what I'm saying. Keep dropping though. Peace.

[MonStar]

Nice piece...Structure was good throughout...So was the flow...I'm sure it would sound nice on audio...Vocab wasn't bad, a little on the simple side at times though...Content was pretty good although I felt a few of the things you said were hit and miss...Since this was meant for audio though I think it all works out and will sound better in that form than just being a text piece...Still a good drop though...Keep dropping...

Translate my name and you get Hip-Hop, remember
I tick-talk to twats who can't realize my tempers
Thugs have hated me from January to December
Cuz my music defines harsh reality's blender

...I really liked the way you opened this...Grabbed my attention and made me want to continue on...