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  1. September 12th, 2005, 11:47 AM #1
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    Too Bold of a Taste

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231051
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231573


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    Too Bold of a Taste


    Heading to the Dark Continent

    ‘The Fountain of Knowledge’, a legend clouded in myth
    Located in darkest Africa, and shrouded in mist
    So now I admit, to being intrigued by this tale
    And I made my expedition, from England I set sail
    A harsh voyage plagued by scurvy, rickets and heat
    The Sun’s rays were relentless, never missing a beat
    The whispered words of my crewmates informed with a warning
    No-one had ever returned… “Fairytales!” , I yawned, it was boring
    Months past and we arrived at this sun kissed continent
    Promises fulfilled, it was bliss without consequence
    I embraced the beach with a sigh, blown away by this beauty
    It moved me, regained my senses and stood up loosely
    No time to rest, Carpe Diem, and equipped with a month of supplies
    I set my eyes on the jungle where the fountain resides


    A Dense Jungle

    Mosquitoes swarm, an insect presence, spreading disease
    I cut of swathe through the foliage heading through trees
    Alien sounds surround me, animals scream under a blanket of stars
    Am I standing on mars? This is their planet, not ours
    My compass marks the destination with its accusatory angle
    I trudge, bathed in perspiration, almost swooning and fragile
    Advancing by agonising yards to the object of my quest
    The source of all wisdom, I wonder what project will be next?


    The Clearing

    The tree’s whip apart like stage curtains, a twisted perversion
    I collapse from my exertions, the right location for certain
    I lift my trembling head and am greeted with a dazzling sight
    A marble white, ornate fountain, its maddening delight
    I crawl forward, unbearably parched, a tongue like sandpaper
    This terrain swallowed up my rations, should’ve made my plan greater
    But success is mine, and my body stood the test of time
    I’m at the basin, with greed in my eyes, stressed with grime
    I cup the water to my mouth, it tastes like liquid gold
    Electrodes are firing in my brain that could split my soul
    “More.” The urgency increases, I draw in great mouthfuls
    Suddenly I understand how to, gather and lead the doubtful
    What’s God’s address? Got it! I hysterically laugh
    How did life begin? It’s answered in another big draft
    The mysteries of the past, revealed, I’m seeing the light
    But it’s not enough; I still have to know the meaning of life
    Headfirst I tumble into the fountain, a watery embrace
    Open my mouth to saturate every pore on my face
    The final answer is coming, my brain is raging energy
    I should come up for air, but I’m bathed in the remedy
    Of ignorance, I’m almost there! But my vision is shrouded in mist
    Through my greed I understand why the fountain is clouded in myth

    My thirst for knowledge was insatiable, now it’s over, the chase
    Because I satisfied my craving with too bold of a taste

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  2. September 12th, 2005, 05:32 PM #2
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    lyrically i found it sufficient, but it doesn't sound hip hop, it sounds very sunday morning educational cartoon if you will (the way it had sections and felt very rated PG). not saying i could do any better of course.
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  3. September 12th, 2005, 05:39 PM #3
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    agree with nugs.... it was sik but no hip hoppy
    the multies were in every line almost and vocab. DAYUM!!

    8.7/10

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  4. September 13th, 2005, 10:54 AM #4
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    Dope piece, as usual the concept was very original.
    It was cool doing a piece about an explorer and you described your mind state and situation in three different scenarios so it really grabbed the attention. The flow was as usual tight as hell, the imagery and vocab complemented each other extremely well, there was good emotion in the piece too about how you felt in these different places, really dope.
    I couldnt hate on nothing in this piece, structure, vocab, wordplay, flow, concept were all dope.

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  5. September 13th, 2005, 10:57 AM #5
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    yo, i still like your style Johnny, really dope, the set up once again was spectacular, topics always interesting, great flow, nice and smooth, structure, even lines and also great...... vocab and complexity was definatley here ,man, dope drop, keep it up,man

    o yea and check out my new drop counting the days
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  6. September 14th, 2005, 07:06 AM #6
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    Thanks for the feed fella's, lol at NugDroHayz's reply. Sunday morning educational cartoon, my arse. This had death in it for a start.

    ^^Uppin this fucker^^

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  7. September 14th, 2005, 08:57 AM #7
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    Man i luv every piece u do, they never seem to lack in anything. The flow on this was on point, the rhymes were sick and usual as were all the multis. Your imagery was mental, how u go thru wat ur seein and all that is crazy. The wordplay was very good, again. Theres nothing i culd pick out bad with this.

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  8. September 14th, 2005, 09:31 AM #8
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    Wassup John that link i left for my last post was shut down can you reply to this id appreciate it.

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  9. September 15th, 2005, 10:56 AM #9
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    Up-up-uppity-uppin^^

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  10. September 15th, 2005, 10:58 AM #10
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    yet another good piece from you..comcept's were orignal i like the way you discribe your situation and mind state..i loved some off the line's in this piece i could tell it was guna be good from the opener

    ‘The Fountain of Knowledge’, a legend clouded in myth
    Located in darkest Africa, and shrouded in mist

    ^^i loved that..one off many decent line's in this piece..very nicely done..


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  11. September 15th, 2005, 11:10 AM #11
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    Woh jonny

    This piece had alot init lol,which was good. In every verse you wrote in this piece you was precise. The vocab stood out aswel very nicely it was strong, and as always your structure was perfect. keep it up the dope rhymes homie.
    written voices makes hidden noises
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  12. September 15th, 2005, 02:02 PM #12
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    Tha 1st stanza set this piece up very well with tha imagery being on point and the scene was set perfectly...

    |Mosquitoes swarm, an insect presence, spreading disease|
    |I cut of swathe through the foliage heading through trees|
    ^^ These two lines in the second stanza also had great imagery

    Tha only flaw i can find in this piece is that i couldnt pick up tha flow of this until half way through tha second stamza...otherwise this was a great read

    Could you help me out with feed on tha link in my sig, would be apreciated
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  13. September 15th, 2005, 05:52 PM #13
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    dope peice bro, I noticed one cat said it doesnt seem hip hop but meh fuck that. This drop is solid. thats what potry/rap is about.. being creative with concepts and coming original. Thats exactly what you have done here.
    Imagery in this is dope! This is a good read even thopugh the its very lengthy.
    good solid peice bro.
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