we gettin theived

[master theisis]

this government is nothin but a luciferian game
claimin we free but we get our income taxed all the same
lendin a hand to rich, but a blind eye to the poor
if we cant feed the fucked up, then aint it fucked up were at war?

if ya intellectual you see what i mean is we gettin theived
we live under some radiowaves all so big brother can read
the book of our lives too discover what we do every night
while the c.i.a. resarches ways to toss away all of our rights

the patriot act was never intended as an act of patriotism
and the war on drugs brainwashes the youth with loads of false wisdom
a land of the free was never what our founding fathers created
and the home of the brave is a metaphore thats highly mistaken

[master theisis]

quick spit juss wanted some feedback..............

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u need to leave links b4 the mods are gonna close this

peace

[master theisis]

what do u mean leave links........................

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u need to get 2 links from OM's that u gave feed on , or the mods will close this

jus lookin out 4 u homie

[master theisis]

thanks dog...ima sound like a big ass newb here but what the fuck is an OM

[Mic D]

someone elses open mic post,,,,,,give feedback to receive it

[master theisis]

ah i get it now...thanks homie....................

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yea a OM is a open mic but people on this site are too lazy to type that shit up
fl-frontlines

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u can fugure it out from there
and get those links up iiight

[master theisis]

ight heres those links

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post3251471

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=237476&page=3

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iight
so im gonna evaluate this now

dope spit
u had Ill flow , nice rhyme , good vocab
u need to work on ur structure and better topics as well as getting imagery
well hope u use my advice

[master theisis]

thanks for the advice kid....ill definitly take the advice of usin imagery

[quills b]

two words need multies

[master theisis]

ight ill remember to use more...