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Thread: Gettin it out my system

  1. October 27th, 2005, 05:56 PM #1
    TheCrunkKing
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    Gettin it out my system

    J-we$t dissed me when he pm'ed me so....

    yea i kno i was a little off key
    but to get back 2 the top i do watever it cost me
    taken niggas down like the dc sniper
    i can change my style like a dirty diaper
    now back to the killa shit y i rap
    leave holes in yo mouth like a bad ass gap
    J-We$t u wanna battle then step 2 the plate
    chew u up and spit u out cuz i already ate
    J-we$st u aint do shit i hav my off days
    u the main reason my pops told me that crime pays
    i'm not even comin hard so niggas raise yo game a notch
    cut off 1 of yo legs and it look like u playin hop scotch
    i beat niggas like they did jesus of the movie passion
    steppin up 2 me is like u want to get a thrashin
    cuz if its you or somebody new
    i diss u so bad u wouldnt no wat to do
    i go 4 as long as i want and my name still get mentioned
    yall niggas try me jus to get attention
    ya, u spit hot but i will make u quit
    u would probably choke and b 2 scared 2 spit
    i dont need any back up i do it on my own
    treat niggas like a child even if they grown
    i put niggas 2 rest cuz they think raps a joke
    i done right now if u real then poke
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  2. October 27th, 2005, 06:06 PM #2
    Jas Il
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    This gonna get closed 'cause you ain't drop 2 links and diss verses not allowed in OM. Check the rules, cuz.

    I'll comment the piece 'cause I'm kinda bored, though. It was pretty mediocre. No wordplay or multis, really. You had some weak ass punches and no personals. Look at some of the tutorials, maybe.
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  3. October 27th, 2005, 06:19 PM #3
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    i know, but i made it up in like 10 mins, and i just felt like postin
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  4. October 27th, 2005, 06:23 PM #4
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    not bad at all execept up ya Vocab a bit and same with strcuutre..flow was pretty smooth choppy sum places but still pretty good man...i like the top[ic..it was a crunk.... rhymes were pretty good same with multeis, very impressed..this is the best i';ve seen from you, nicely done..overall..8.6/10..keep it up
  5. October 27th, 2005, 06:50 PM #5
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    ight, thanks skribble, keep uppin people, before it gets closed
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  6. October 27th, 2005, 07:07 PM #6
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    upin yall, before it close
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  7. October 27th, 2005, 07:28 PM #7
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  8. October 27th, 2005, 08:26 PM #8
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  9. October 27th, 2005, 09:12 PM #9
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    Shit this was alright man... It was mad basic, everything about it was basic really. The flow was a little off so you should work on that. The message was clear that you were pissed off about somethin but you may have mentioned the dude who pissed you off ONCE in the whole verse. If your gonna go at him go at him. Anyways, it was alright I think you could probably do better because I saw some clean lines in there like 2 maybe.

    J-We$t u wanna battle then step 2 the plate
    chew u up and spit u out cuz i already ate

    and

    i beat niggas like they did jesus of the movie passion
    steppin up 2 me is like u want to get a thrashin

    So you got some potential, you just need to bring it out more with some added complexity nahmean?

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  10. October 27th, 2005, 09:42 PM #10
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    lmao.......this is far from 'aight' ......AHHH....people need to stop sugar coating their fuckin replies......... This was horrid....horrible.....simple.....basic....boring. .... and WEAK.... everything about it is BLAH......no nothing........ A couple basic punches and alot of filler....Blah........
    And there was only ONE aight line...the spit you out line...Blah... Thats it.... Muthafuckas need to learn there is a hell of alot more then just rhymin wordz...BLAH







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  11. October 27th, 2005, 09:47 PM #11
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    ight, thanks def, keep uppin
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  12. October 27th, 2005, 10:07 PM #12
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