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Thread: Runnin' From The Law

  1. January 6th, 2006, 07:14 PM #1
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    Runnin' From The Law

    I was drivin' over 100 MPH from the cops i was nervous indeed
    By the way i was drivin' it felt like playing Need for Speed
    The cops were getting closer and closer i knew it
    I thought of pulling over, but then i thought "Screw it"
    Going to jail was now the last thing in my mind
    I ran outta gas, but that didnt matter, they were way behind
    Suddenly I saw helicopters hovering above me, now im done
    Now I knew that I had no choice but to run
    I went in the woods, away from the hood
    Theyd find me somehow I know it, that was understood
    I felt like cryin, betta yet, i felt like dyin'
    This shit wasnt fun nigga I aint lyin
    If i knew they were gonna find me, whyd a bother tryin?
    This was it, I came out of the woods tired and gave up
    If my friends or family wanna to bail me out they betta save up
    When i stepped onto the sidewalk those cops went right past
    I was amazed escape this crime but this was the last
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  2. January 6th, 2006, 07:18 PM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262034
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=261473
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  3. January 6th, 2006, 07:20 PM #3
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    aight uppin...c'mon i actually need feed on this one since hardly anyone left feed on my last thread
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  4. January 6th, 2006, 07:42 PM #4
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    uppin..cmon dont sleep i need some feed
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  5. January 6th, 2006, 07:51 PM #5
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    wow.....uppin AGAIN
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  6. January 6th, 2006, 08:27 PM #6
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    omg wtf...uppin
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  7. January 6th, 2006, 09:38 PM #7
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    not bad.....topic was iight..rhymes were pretty good..multeis too....flow as descent......vocab was simple..elevate on the complexity and imagery.....maybe a lil bit complexer rhymes.......overall this was ok..keep elevating..peace---
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  8. January 6th, 2006, 10:11 PM #8
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    Nice verse, good imagery and your rhyme scheme was good. I think you had a lot going for this verse, but near the end, I just wasn't really feeling the way it ended. It seemed a bit abrupt. If you made it longer and got into more of the detail of the situations, I think you would've had a much better verse. But other than that, this was a straight piece.

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262818

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  9. January 7th, 2006, 10:13 AM #9
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    aight thanks both of u for the feed.... uppin for more and status unknown ill leave u sum feed on urs
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  10. January 7th, 2006, 11:09 AM #10
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  11. January 7th, 2006, 11:36 AM #11
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  12. January 7th, 2006, 12:13 PM #12
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    Decent piece.The topic was very well played,in similiar and exact ways,but if you did get better you couldve mae it better.The concept too was well playeed as well.The vocab was decent because you didnt use types of multies that were big or unique.The structure was ok,but the flow wasnt all ok though.Over all elevate and get better dude.

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  13. January 8th, 2006, 05:23 PM #13
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    uppin...thanks for the feed
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  14. January 8th, 2006, 05:27 PM #14
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    Original Topic.....

    Concept was understood....Wordplay an vocab was average...This was just something simple...Next time think of something un original and use above average word use an vocab...

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  15. January 8th, 2006, 07:38 PM #15
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