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    Feast of Holy Innocents feat. Aeschylus & Po'

    The Feast of Holy Innocents
    1st - Aeschylus`
    2nd - Nostradomus
    3rd - Po'




    A normal dinner taking place, My wife prays over the food
    Smoke fills the room, first thought "they'll be here for us soon"
    "THE AMERICANS!", a booming voice gives heed to the troubles ahead
    Grab my child and my wife from the ashes that have come from the dead

    *flash* they attack again, but from where? they have surrounded the town
    stray bullets from the grood, crimson liquid is all that fills the streets now
    "Is this a curse? what did i do? I've respected you all along allah"
    A bullet flies past me and hits my wife, we must have upset the god
    I take my wife and daughter to a safe place where they would hide
    I have too much pride, i took our gun and at once let the bullets fly
    Blasted through trees, my friends, houses even their tents but none killed
    The downfall of our army has come, we will bow to none, by hatred i'm filled
    *flash* another bomb off in the distance hellfires absorb the city in flames
    A camel in the open!
    it's a shitty way to escape,but i blasted right through his cape and grabbed the reigns
    I had a family, a home, theres is nothing to do here but run for my life
    I grab hold of the knife, they say prayers save lives, so for my family i'm doing it twice
    Finally i see them, their camouflage suits could never fool a true warrior
    but are eyes met, knife vs. M16 he said "don't move, america is taking over"
    flash of evil i couldn't resist, attacked the bitch, this countries ours!
    They saw me unarmed, raised their sights and shot at me like cowards
    A final gust of wind left my body, as i saw my wife for the last time.....
    ...i could not handle
    seeing them carry my baby, saying "we'll use her as an example"
    ""
    ""
    ""
    ""
    ""
    with clipped white wings of snow, I awoke
    to your pale touch of penance. Once bound,
    a creature devout to the newly upturned sky;
    azure ponds now joining lonesome eyes
    through the lonely flight of your words.

    Struck terror through the tyrants chilling through coarse veins,
    And bad oppression tremble. Nerveless stood the horse reigns
    The hardened seamen: but recovering soon to check,
    They gained the barrier, that across the deck
    Its firm defence projected; then began to enter caves,
    The scene of blood; then poured amongst the slaves
    Frantic and fierce, and madding with their wrongs, stop or go?,
    The volley'd vengeance; whilst without a friend or foe
    Misguided courage urged the strife in vain; cowards,
    And checked by hands unseen, relaxed its powers
    In sudden weakness.—Terror, and surprise, I spew,
    Like deadly blood-hounds, seized the vanquished crew
    That stood defenceless, and exposed, the mark to hell,
    Of uncontrolled revenge; fear uncontrollable as they fell
    Without reluctance saw the purple stream was destroyed,
    Slow welling from the fount of life, and joined
    In kindred currents pour along the deck, their grave,
    Tinging with guiltless blood: the western wave.
    No prying eye perceived it: crying day by day,
    Saw the same scene renewed; whilst prosperous gales fade
    Full towards her destined port, the vessel bore,
    And gently breathing over the land's mind in restful horror
    Came the remembrance of his native land, a hand they lend,
    The thoughts of former pleasures, warmer hearts, & former friends
    Of rest and independance; heedless he arose to speak,
    That on the miseries of others, he fled to hide in oblique
    The fabric of his joys, and gratified, to the leader they hailed,
    His selfish views, whilst multitudes and actions became bewailed
    The eternal loss of nature's dearest lives and gifts,
    To them irreparable wrong, to him a slight change to his thoughts of bliss.
    ""
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    ""
    Military defense, explosions dropped before, but not long..
    In a state of devastation. Where war has up-strung..
    Praying for treaty, the evilness, nobody will stop it..
    Commotion arose, no way avoiding this conflict..
    Agony, pain. Crying surrounds. Nowhere to see joy..
    The methods appear disturbing. Children used as decoys..
    Women screaming, as the soldiers seeming in fright..
    Black smoke pollutes the air. Daylight leaving to night..
    Loud noises, ears ring. As civilians run to take cover..
    Why attack innocent humans?
    .........................For the wrong doings of another..
    Babies, have so much ahead in life. This hating’s bliss..
    So, “take them out, now.” Like they have a say in this..
    People still dieing, getting hit from the flying of stones..
    Destroying their house..
    ........................The remaining craters are homes..
    Nobody cares, accept them. I know this a lot, see..
    You’ve never had to witness the stench, of a rotten body..
    They try to prevent them back. No, there not quitters..
    The Americans continue the attack..
    ................................As if another act of Hitler..
    So to prevent this evil doing. Stop and take a breath..
    And help the innocent family..
    .....................Before their blown off the continent..

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    Good looks guys.

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    Yeah good ass job fellas'

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    HOLY SHIT

    that is fuckin dope both did really good here with the story telling like again how you are using a picture to describe what is going on really makes it that much better dope emotion and imagrey didnt use words out of place everything was there for a reason and thats what i like about you guys really its very dope how you guys just can do that really need to callab with you both fo sho good to see this dope type shit stay up keep doing ya thing

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    i have a question... why is is tht everytime i read a om from 1 yall it's long as fuck but dope at the same time?


    well here it it..

    aes...ya structure was a lil meh at some point's but a good thing was ya word choice keep the flow going....i also liked ya rhyme scheme...vocab was str8 n emotion was there....visual wasn't bad at all....good topic aswell

    nos... vocab was very well thought out.. wording was good n so was ya structure...ya flow was pretty good n i liked how u expressed n stressed the topic in ya verse..
    emotion n feeling was there...liked ya verse

    po'... same to you flow was good to to wise word choice n ya vocab was very good... i think this is the first om i read from you...well i'm glad i did cuz u've impressed me... feeling n emotion was there..a good drop

    all.. i liked how you all stuck to the topic...very well thought out peice..

    look foward to reading more from all

    ps. ^^newbs that's real feed..

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    It was soooo long, but so much worth reading, I'm at work right and I'm late from break because I was reading this... It was worth it lol...

    A final gust of wind left my body, as i saw my wife for the last time.....
    ...i could not handle
    seeing them carry my baby, saying "we'll use her as an example"
    One of my favorite lines, it fit perfect into what you were saying...

    Adding the picture was a good way to start it, being that I was able to picture everything being said... with my own imagination... Look forward to reading future work from you three....
    Legendary lol...
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    Thanks guys. Its much appreciated.

    And Tim, if you would like to collab, PM me or hit me up on AIM.

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    great job with this guyzzz... this was really fucking dopeasfuck. awesome imagery, flow and vocab was on point, awesom structure, and the title drew me in as well, nos always has coo titles, great job, niggas, we shoudl do a full crew collaboration. keep writing!
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    it up my piece: racism or my frankenstien feat. Issue

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    Im not in The People, but Id be glad to collab with you.

    Thanks for the feed.

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    this was mad fucking long
    but also realy good...
    very deep
    very poetic

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    uh.....yeh. Up

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    All of you sleepers, do not go to sleep tonight. That may sound impossible for you homos, but if you go to sleep on this peice you will die.

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    *Sets bomb timer*

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    My favorite verse here was aes...so much emotion packed inside of it, and the illustration above your guys piece really set it off. Omfg this was intense, I read aes' verse and I wanted to see what happened next! And after nos's I wanted even more. Very long but very good. in Aes' verse also, there were some lines I fell off on...but he immediatly picked me right back up. These verses seemed so sad but so heartfelt at the same time. You put a lot of effort into this, the creativness was amazing guys... good job.

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