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    old york
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    Where'd you go?

    Im looking at night,wondering from sight whos this in the mirror
    Palms full of sweat and tears tight,ignoring the cries from her
    Above there,a mantle carrying a handfull of light from in and out
    The light i could not handle,carry's a full bag of tears and shouts
    Knowing what not could be changed,i hear from a distance
    Blowing the stress of my range,i tear a blood at instance
    Seeing him carry a dagger,climbing from the ladder up stairs
    Walking into his death,from anger he stepped into his own lair
    Crying,and not noticing the tears from the years he's faced
    It's not the same,he pulls the knife up and gets paced
    He cuts himself,and blood drips from his wrists and lips
    Grips his own hand,and gets ready to hang his neck
    A second,than past dead,he falls to the ground all red
    The person in the mirror still standing,nothing has been said
    Crouches down,and looks to this show,everything went so slow
    He fades way from inside the glass,and walks away saying 'Where'd you
    go?'


    I have a thread on Menace2Society with this om as Yabadabadoo
    hurterrybody.

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    old york
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    hurterrybody.

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    Fuycking serious,someone leave feedback.
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    Yerrr.
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    Yer,herrr.
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    Its aight its not great but its aight.Vocab could be betta and so could the flow but its alright its just not great.

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    Vocab-alright
    Flow-alright

    This is my favorite part

    Seeing him carry a dagger,climbing from the ladder up stairs
    Walking into his death,from anger he stepped into his own lair

    Overall i likedthe piece keep it up
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    good drop....topic was different..didnt really interest me that much but it was a pretty good read...had sum nice flow and even strucutre made it easy and smooth for me to read..rhymes were good....vocab was descent..elevate on dat a bit....overall this was pretty good..keep it up homie...peace

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    J.Christ
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    Blowing the stress of my range,i tear a blood at instance
    Seeing him carry a dagger,climbing from the ladder up stairs
    Walking into his death,from anger he stepped into his own lair
    Nice .

    Grips his own hand,and gets ready to hang his neck
    A second,than past dead,he falls to the ground all red
    The person in the mirror still standing,nothing has been said
    meaning suicide?


    Shit was good .. off point a couple of time but i kind of get the point, if you can . explain . Fa sho

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