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    Herasy

    [Intro]
    Before we start, I’d just like to thank the Lord, the one of above…
    God, Allah, Yahweh, Jupiter, Zeus…
    His holy prophets, Jesus, Mohammed and Moses…

    PSYCH!

    [Verse 1]

    God is nothing but proof of fear in the human consciousness
    Name one living person that would be able to answer this,
    Regardless of the death rate from Jihadists so intolerant,
    Honoring their sovereign, invisible yet predominant,
    Responsible for murders from the Crusades to the Holocaust,
    Peace out to motherfuckers like Vyacheslav Molotov,
    In honor of a god that has no actual followers,
    Claim they worship the same god, then become involved in carnages,
    Placing nations into bondages, taking children hostages,
    Killing innocent: preposterous, the ones that are now lost to us,
    Can never be regained, can never be reclaimed,
    All in the name of a false hope, will the world ever be sane again?
    The true question is: was the world ever sane in the first place?
    I doubt it cos back then, Nazi’s tried to create an Arian race,
    Now Muslim extremists shove grenades in their own face,
    Please, who came up with this nonsensical bullshit?
    Religious symbols, priests raping young sensitive children,
    And in return for the millions who were killed in the centuries?
    John Paul the second says ‘sorry’ and back off to his ancestry,
    Homeland where he lived in tha lap of lavishness,
    While three of his followers in Uganda die every second on the averages,
    Of half a dollar that constitutes their annual salary,
    Perhaps enough to buy a grain of rice and put on half a calorie,
    It’s all a fallacy, and I’m tellin ya I can prove it,
    Using music to soothe prophetical traitors like Judas,
    Check this excellent breakdown of the history,
    To put it in biblical terms: religion; I can see the bitch in thee!

    [Hook x2]
    *samples*
    There is no god for me – Ras Kass (Interview with a Vampire)
    Know I process my thoughts logically – Obie Trice (They Wanna Know)
    Technically you don’t even exist, god – Canibus (Tibetan Black Magicians)
    I can see the bitch in thee!

    [Verse 2]


    Yo,
    Abraham, the first drug lord from the dead Assyrian city of Ur,
    Experienced relapses, convulsions, voices in his head, so for a cure,
    He thought about it in bed and devised a plan of horse manure,
    Sliced his sons wrists and watched the red pour into the sewer,
    Moses was a pothead, who smoked cess incessantly,
    Marijuana, went to Egypt and brought on a plague of leprosy,
    Especially when he gave every single Hebrew ecstasy,
    And they all envisioned a divine power, the rest you know as history,
    Jesus was a maniac, who claimed to be the messiah,
    Holy Mother Mary was known for her sexual appetite and ire,
    Got pregnant, gave birth to a mentally retarded Hebrew,
    Brutal facts: Christianity is nothing but regarded as see through,
    After Mohammed died, they waited for his corpse to reawaken,
    But when dogs ate his corpse, his followers’ minds became forsaken,
    Suicide the path to paradise, smack women and then rape them,
    Blew inside, the Amorites couldn’t fathom on how to take them,
    Satanists, the epitome of religious imprudence,
    Fake bitches with idiocy on the level of luminance,
    Underage sex, pillaging women, utter foolishness,
    And all of this shit is spin off from Christianity,
    I wish they’d all quit and see the true worth behind profanity,
    Expressionless motherfuckers, worshipping an imaginary,
    Collaborative deity that has neither capacity nor actuality,
    Factually the battery that powers this damn fallacy,
    The insanity in the brain cavity of the race belonging to humanity,
    It’s maddening and saddening how savageous these bastards get,
    Normal people transformed into nothing more than animals,
    And cannibals, feeding on each other with their mandibles,
    It’s like a motherfuking cloned army of Hannibals,
    A creation of Thomas Harris if you don’t find it understandable,
    Think of Nicholas Copernicus and his heliocentric system theory,
    The church, being sick of his earnestness and idiosyncrasy, how dare he,
    Challenge the bible – Earth was the center of god’s eye,
    It managed the cycle, mirth in his mental, odd lie,
    So they ravaged him, eyeballs and limbs hewn from original state,
    Savages, priests, torture and burnt him at the stake,
    Learnt they made a mistake, cursed and just said it was fake,
    How is it that the people starve and the church is rich with gold?
    To find an answer, just read the Da Vinci Code,
    But it’s not only the church; remember the Jews killed Jesus,
    And now the Muslims attack the world with biological diseases,
    So check this excellent breakdown of the history,
    To put it in biblical terms: religion; I can see the bitch in thee!

    [Hook x2]
    *samples*
    There is no god for me – Ras Kass (Interview with a Vampire)
    Know I process my thoughts logically – Obie Trice (They Wanna Know)
    Technically you don’t even exist, god – Canibus (Tibetan Black Magicians)
    I can see the bitch in thee!

    [Verse 3]

    Call it heresy, sacrilege, profanity or heterodoxical,
    Drinking Hennessey, its blasphemy this crap is paradoxical,
    Noxious toxic boxed in coccyx in folic biologic oxymoron,
    Gin and Tonic made the Koran, the kabala, torah and the gospels,
    The scriptures of mental patients that should be in hospital,
    Apostles that sucked cock and made up shit to please the Romans,
    Wars commanded from castles, Bastilles, and religious bastions,
    Citadels and fortresses support the holy crosses and,
    Nonsense like wars causing an esophagus, fighting to get more oxygen,
    Carcasses of religious rappers that got infected with Parkinson’s,
    In a sarcophagus, trapped for all eternity in the darknesses,
    In the name Jesus H. Christ – the ‘H’ stood for heresy,
    Known to the Hebrews as their gods most hated enemy,
    So they took this mental case and nailed his @ss to wooden planks,
    Failed to hear his screams as blood poured down his flanks,
    Refused to exonerate, their obligation to god was to kill posers,
    But the ultimate goal of their religion is to wait for one to get closer,
    So for the death of one man, after some 2000 years,
    19 millions Jews are killed throughout the Middle East and Europe,
    6 million of which were killed in such a short time
    A religious man was Adolph Hitler; to be Jewish was a crime,
    The children of Satan, so he gathered and made them,
    Into walking death amongst the frozen plains of Germany,
    Struggled for talking breath when they chose to follow earnestly,
    I can still feel their pain today, the wrath of God is still burning me,
    Turning me into this creature, this devil I am labeled as,
    I’m just the returning the favor, in fact several with my fabled ass,
    And all in then name of some dumb unlucky Hebrew citizen,
    And 12 apostles, made up shit smoking weed and popping Ritalin,
    Finally in the 1950’s the two religions make peace,
    Only to discover a common enemy further out to the East beyond Greece,
    The Islamic militant movement, terrorizing the nations,
    George Bush thinks he can fight back with his god as the revelation,
    My recommendation, my prediction is a world war causing annihilation,
    Hopefully god will finally die in the smoke, ashes and realization,
    Retaliation against synagogues, churches and mosques,
    Poisoned minds; the analogue of brainwashed rising costs,
    Customs and rituals to remove young women’s clitoris,
    Causing infection, done with rusted knives in the middle of forest,
    Circumcision and religion sort of go hand in hand,
    When you fall to religion, you become less of a man,
    You sacrifice your intellect; you kill what truly makes you human,
    Become a blinded follower, a sheep without thoughts of retribution,
    Contributing to death, disease, wars and hatred,
    If there truly was a god, I doubt he’d want his sacred,
    Sanctuary, his people, his servants to do this,
    That’s why I bring the raw facts and the knowledge through my music,
    So check this excellent breakdown of the history,
    To put it in biblical terms: religion; I can see the bitch in thee!

    [Hook x2]
    *samples*
    There is no god for me – Ras Kass (Interview with a Vampire)
    Know I process my thoughts logically – Obie Trice (They Wanna Know)
    Technically you don’t even exist, god – Canibus (Tibetan Black Magicians)
    I can see the bitch in thee!

    I must say, I’m quite worried about the reaction this will get and if too many people don’t like this, then get it deleted.I write about differant topics and I look at everybodys point of view.I am a beliver myself not a strong one,but I do have intrest in writing on how other people think.This one seems a bit contreversal and may be a bit too much,but at the end of the day its just a piece ans I apoligise if I offend anybody


    -Dyl

    Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
    On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....

    But how you fall doesn't matter
    Its how you land

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    Last edited by Dyl; May 5th, 2006 at 07:21 PM
    Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
    On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....

    But how you fall doesn't matter
    Its how you land

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    This Was A Good Piece. Though Some People Might Not Be Two Fond Of This I Liked Your Idea On This. Let's Start With the Verses. Vocabulary Was Great. It fitted Perfectly With Your Wordplay. The Way You Went Along With Everything Basically Perplexed This Whole Art. Now Discussing The Hooks. I Have To Say That The Hook Was Good But You Lost Me On What Was Happening In The Parenthesis. Every Good Piece Has Something Negative Towards It. Safe To Say It Was Only My Observation Of Flow. On Your Future Pieces Try To Show Some Inadequate Differentuals With The Way Everything Is But Together. I Just Could'nt See The Way You Flowed With Everything Put Together.

    -Para

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    Man it was very easy and I will explain get at me.

    uppin
    Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
    On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....

    But how you fall doesn't matter
    Its how you land

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    This was dope. Complex. And it's actual to my beliefs, go doesn't exist, I loved the piece. Overall some punches on god and his prophets, didn't check for multis, the flow was decent either they had them or not, good flow, exelent concept and content. The hook was nice, I don't know how to evaluate hooks anyway..

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    this was really good actually, good grasp on the vocabulary and it helped the flow a lot, try to make the multsyllabic rhyming more even though, this was good, and the hook was real fuckin' creative, i dont know if thats research you did, but that was a lot of religious stuff in there...

    only one little problem...
    the flow was stopped a bit, since this was a long piece by
    an
    .........a
    .........a
    .........b
    .........b
    rhyme scheme.... made it a tad choppy, try to work in an
    .........a
    .........a
    ...a.....b
    .........b
    to make it flow better and use pauses as well

    good job you have a lot of potential, keep rhyming

    PLEASE hit up my piece this old tounge

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