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    New Shit Rate It Yall

    By my wisdom when I pop you snap and crackle//
    And I dont lie when i william tell ya adams apple//
    Yes I'm too violent when fighting//
    And too psycho when writing//
    So I'd rather be on fire come equipt with the lighting//
    Spitting quick like its lightening and im swift when i'm writing//
    You see no end to the fright when I sence the end of your life//
    With the blade in my right and ya neck next to the end of my knife//
    That in it self is a fight, will the fame be worth it//
    I'm a lyrical warrior, s dot is the purest//
    Everything I'm enduring is just reassuring//
    That when the bell rings and the closing curtains jerking//
    That ill be certain ill leave your carreer hurting//
    You'll be in chains and shackles//
    I'll rearrange ya back mold//
    I'm insane with rap flows//
    But i still maintain the tactacle abilities//
    That smash mathmatical facilities//
    An actual epitomy//
    Brought back in this factual vacinity//
    Your wack flows aint hittin me//
    The tire tracks are missin see//
    But i still ran you over//
    I'm a militant soldier//
    With two huge boulders//
    That i carry upon the top of my shoulder//
    Than there rocks once exploded//
    Till the cops come, i'm still holding//
    Sawnoff shotguns, I'm reloading//
    And i'm not done I told ya//
    I'm not drunk, I'm sober//
    And no chump son, I'm a lyrical warrior//

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    This piece was alright, You had some good lines, but overall it could use a bit of work, alot of redundancy in this piece and prolly where the most work is needed...Keep it up tho, peace....

    Yo if you get a chance, hit me back on my piece...thanks peace...Summer Breeze
    Last edited by ELEETE; May 11th, 2006 at 07:51 PM

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