Chitown

[chitown_mex11]

this is somethin' i might record in the near future as part of my demo, obviously its incomplete because its just one verse and no hook maybe ill post up the rest later...btw the flow of this is slow i guess it would go wit a beat like Hustle Town by SPM if you's ever heard it...

im packin glockz, while watchin my back
villainz lurkin on the street as i lace this rap
givin' advice not to be mistaken for a psychologist
prescribing lyrically dope shit call me a pharmacist
they insist that i aint true and aint certified
well i glorified and nearly died on some shit that you denied
these streetz done lied and provide
more drama than a play from shakespear
litigationz on the daily so the cops we fear
dont interfere, when ya hear the bulletz ring
and dont try to intervene
cuz slugz addicted to the innocent like nicotine
and we dream, sim-pa-lly on the cure fo' these fiendz
nevertheless after all this stress
i progress to victory through the adversity
and roll slow on 26th in that dope Chi-city


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=296995
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=297042

[th-C]

deep

[Dunkalicious]

this is somethin' i might record in the near future as part of my demo, obviously its incomplete because its just one verse and no hook maybe ill post up the rest later...btw the flow of this is slow i guess it would go wit a beat like Hustle Town by SPM if you's ever heard it...

please dont..

[Stunee]

It`s alright. The structure needs a little work. Vocab was decent, in that short of a rhyme you could`nt really have expanded much. Good wordplay, but no imagery...it`s a flow, so it`s ok.

[Verbal Vigilante]

Nice, Lace It Down.

[Verbal Vigilante]

Oh, and try adding some more lines, it's a bit short

[Endeva.]

i thought this was pretty basic sorta played stuff... theres nothing new here, and use correct grammar, its easier to follow, and i wouldnt record this either, well not as it is, you need to work on it much more, the flow wasnt even there in places, and it was too short, it wouldnt even cover a minute recording... anyways work on it more, pz

[Stunee]

He said it was only one of the verses, and simply wanted some feed on how its coming so far. Now that you got the feed, work on it and post final, stay up.

[chitown_mex11]

aight koo thankz for being honest...uppin

[~SILENT~]

This was pretty basic. & me living in Chicago, I think you could have done much better. Because the street's of Chicago are way worse then what was stated. So I feel you could have went into it deeper or something, but it was ok.
& yea I know where 26th is at.
I had to go over there the other day to visit my dad in The County.

`pz.

[chitown_mex11]

This was pretty basic. & me living in Chicago, I think you could have done much better. Because the street's of Chicago are way worse then what was stated. So I feel you could have went into it deeper or something, but it was ok.
& yea I know where 26th is at.
I had to go over there the other day to visit my dad in The County.

`pz.

yeah you're right homie i could've portrayed it better, but hey its one verse and ill fix it and i still got 1 or 2 verses to go...ill make sure itz dope