The rain is coming down like cats and dogs
It's harder to see you, see through all the fog
I know you're there so i'm not scared
"Hey Lets get crazy how bout' we just get married"
She said "Hey baby baby boy I've loved you from the day that we met, don't care what mom says or if we're ready just yet"
Cause this don't mean a thing if you're not next to me
You're who I want to wake up to every morning..
Last edited by niggerican; July 3rd, 2008 at 11:47 AM
Last edited by niggerican; August 12th, 2006 at 11:09 PM
I liked this,it was a very very emotional peice, and you had great imagery here. The flow was a bit choppy at times, because your wording was off. Try to use more complex vocab and a few multie strings wouldn't go a miss. But yea nice peice dude, I enjoyed the read.
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this is a real nice pice it was kinda off at some parts but still had that emotion in it
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