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    Star Gazing

    Star Gazing
    Prince Carter

    Lately i've taken to star gazing
    I can't explain or reason out
    the reason i've been chasing the fates
    erasing my days under a sight
    that's so amazing, i'm unable to gauge
    how far i'd go to touch the sky
    home is where the hatred is
    save my kids, i can't erase this pain
    the structure of my confidence
    has been raized by the rain
    dark clouds stir above my head
    dropping a torrent of disdain
    and so it's become difficult
    to catch stars through the darkness
    remarkable how lost i've become
    wrought with naught i am, numb
    yet i trudge through the mud
    stuck in the muck and mire
    of bad luck and dissipated desire
    so until my stars return
    and i elude these scars and burns
    placed on me on a daily basis
    i'll keep reminiscing on the basics
    while masking my marks
    behind cash and fasting from bad remarks
    using my heart instead of logic
    though the former smarts more
    you've caught me at the core
    lost in my thoughts, wandering the labyrinth
    leaving my sins to soar, avoiding the minotaur
    hoping to take to space some day
    waiting to be replaced by my young
    and my they one night star gaze
    that i found my place in the sun
    1luv.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
    Po.Ethics.

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    hmm...elevation is key.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
    Po.Ethics.

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    This was an amazing piece. I mean, this really touched me. Everything was like, perfect in here, and just so deep within an imagination but not yet breaking the boundaries of abstract style. I loved this. The rhyming was also so discrete yet it came out in the piece a lot. Most of all, there was a message to this piece, and it was so emotional which is what I liked about it.

    Definitely worth recognition. Most definitely.

    Good one, man.

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    Thanks a million Exact, i deeply appreciate the depth of your feedback and i'm flattered that you enjoyed it so much man, thank you.

    Elevation is the key, 1luv.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
    Po.Ethics.

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