Week 8 - Ra Ill (0 - 0) Vs take.O.ver (0 - 0)

[D.Silver]

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Good Luck to you both

[Ra Ill]

Check`

How many lines 10 - 20?

[take.O.ver]

how bout 16?


--check

[Ra Ill]

coo.

[Ra Ill]

he has a heart of gold bliss, prevails with ignorance,
you have the edge - to bad he fell for it.
lets go toe 2 toe then, his writtens dont give a damn,
falls to defeet cuz his keyboards jammed.
apart of me wants to let this go, were one in the same yo,
difference is that your the sideshow.
id stick my dick in the middle of his name,
fck a take your O.ver and out, now scramble this lame.
skeet my future at you on vids, & thats its,
take a shot at you like heres lookin at you kid.
predictions show im under-dog, but under the law,
touchy subject cuz i neuter dawg.
i dont try to win, i'll define whats within,
KID BLITZ'd ya ass in frontlines while Live 0 -6'in.
well if ya dont get it screw u like i was kid'din,
heres the catch, like bat-mittin this fool just gets ridden.

[take.O.ver]

I'ma 'Spear' the dude, lines uglier then Brittney with a shaved head
last week you signed in, this week you're in the sign out thread..
... you're not up to par, not even close to ready for JR's yet..
didn't you learn, before you run you gotta take Baby Steps
in fact, you need more elevation .. head back to the Cyphers ..
.. cuz you ain't even potty trained yet.. you still need Diapers
Check it, I'm the Boss, you just a Front Lines Soldier
Watch 'A.I.' drop Him << Like He Did a CrossOver!
you a bum, broke dude, no way you could buy-a-win
A.I.'s gettin rid of you, like the Sixers did to Iverson
My 'Punches' are like Crack, so which one you gettin 'Hooked On?'
& as far as your future in rap..
like John Brown says, "That's Not A Good Look Son'
.. but i do wish you luck, in all your future endeavors..
what time would you like this loss .. cuz you 'whenever'
Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'



whenever - win never.

[take.O.ver]

up.

[Nashvillain]

he has a heart of gold bliss, prevails with ignorance,
you have the edge - to bad he fell for it.
^decent attempt
lets go toe 2 toe then, his writtens dont give a damn,
falls to defeet cuz his keyboards jammed.
^whys your 2nd bar always so short?,no
apart of me wants to let this go, were one in the same yo,
difference is that your the sideshow.
^weak
id stick my dick in the middle of his name,
fck a take your O.ver and out, now scramble this lame.
^lame
skeet my future at you on vids, & thats its,
take a shot at you like heres lookin at you kid.
^NO!
predictions show im under-dog, but under the law,
touchy subject cuz i neuter dawg.
^??
i dont try to win, i'll define whats within,
KID BLITZ'd ya ass in frontlines while Live 0 -6'in.
^WTF
well if ya dont get it screw u like i was kid'din,
heres the catch, like bat-mittin this fool just gets ridden.
^bad closer

overall this was a newb verse,u need 2 seriously elevate

***VS***


I'ma 'Spear' the dude, lines uglier then Brittney with a shaved head
last week you signed in, this week you're in the sign out thread..
^meh
... you're not up to par, not even close to ready for JR's yet..
didn't you learn, before you run you gotta take Baby Steps
^weak as hell
in fact, you need more elevation .. head back to the Cyphers ..
.. cuz you ain't even potty trained yet.. you still need Diapers
^wack!
Check it, I'm the Boss, you just a Front Lines Soldier
Watch 'A.I.' drop Him << Like He Did a CrossOver!
^coo
you a bum, broke dude, no way you could buy-a-win
A.I.'s gettin rid of you, like the Sixers did to Iverson
^again wit the A.I shit,but ok
My 'Punches' are like Crack, so which one you gettin 'Hooked On?'
& as far as your future in rap..
like John Brown says, "That's Not A Good Look Son'
^meh
.. but i do wish you luck, in all your future endeavors..
what time would you like this loss .. cuz you 'whenever'
^weak
Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'
^meh,almost

very weak battle,both need 2 elevate,there was 1 good punch in this battle and it was takeovers so he gets my vote

V//takeover

[kid sick']

he has a heart of gold bliss, prevails with ignorance,
you have the edge - to bad he fell for it.
meh
lets go toe 2 toe then, his writtens dont give a damn,
falls to defeet cuz his keyboards jammed.
no
apart of me wants to let this go, were one in the same yo,
difference is that your the sideshow.
no
id stick my dick in the middle of his name,
fck a take your O.ver and out, now scramble this lame.
no
skeet my future at you on vids, & thats its,
take a shot at you like heres lookin at you kid.
na
predictions show im under-dog, but under the law,
touchy subject cuz i neuter dawg.
NO
i dont try to win, i'll define whats within,
KID BLITZ'd ya ass in frontlines while Live 0 -6'in.
meh
well if ya dont get it screw u like i was kid'din,
heres the catch, like bat-mittin this fool just gets ridden.
no


vs



I'ma 'Spear' the dude, lines uglier then Brittney with a shaved head
last week you signed in, this week you're in the sign out thread..
no
... you're not up to par, not even close to ready for JR's yet..
didn't you learn, before you run you gotta take Baby Steps
no punch
in fact, you need more elevation .. head back to the Cyphers ..
.. cuz you ain't even potty trained yet.. you still need Diapers
no
Check it, I'm the Boss, you just a Front Lines Soldier
Watch 'A.I.' drop Him << Like He Did a CrossOver!
meh
you a bum, broke dude, no way you could buy-a-win
A.I.'s gettin rid of you, like the Sixers did to Iverson
ok
My 'Punches' are like Crack, so which one you gettin 'Hooked On?'
& as far as your future in rap..
like John Brown says, "That's Not A Good Look Son'
no
.. but i do wish you luck, in all your future endeavors..
what time would you like this loss .. cuz you 'whenever'
ok
Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'
na


v/Takeover

[Piff Jones]

he has a heart of gold bliss, prevails with ignorance,
you have the edge - to bad he fell for it.
meh
lets go toe 2 toe then, his writtens dont give a damn,
falls to defeet cuz his keyboards jammed.
no flow whatsoever
apart of me wants to let this go, were one in the same yo,
difference is that your the sideshow.
nah
id stick my dick in the middle of his name,
fck a take your O.ver and out, now scramble this lame.
meh
skeet my future at you on vids, & thats its,
take a shot at you like heres lookin at you kid.
nah
predictions show im under-dog, but under the law,
touchy subject cuz i neuter dawg.
no
i dont try to win, i'll define whats within,
KID BLITZ'd ya ass in frontlines while Live 0 -6'in.
nah
well if ya dont get it screw u like i was kid'din,
heres the catch, like bat-mittin this fool just gets ridden.
no


vs



I'ma 'Spear' the dude, lines uglier then Brittney with a shaved head
last week you signed in, this week you're in the sign out thread..
no
... you're not up to par, not even close to ready for JR's yet..
didn't you learn, before you run you gotta take Baby Steps
not a punch
in fact, you need more elevation .. head back to the Cyphers ..
.. cuz you ain't even potty trained yet.. you still need Diapers
wow hell no
Check it, I'm the Boss, you just a Front Lines Soldier
Watch 'A.I.' drop Him << Like He Did a CrossOver!
could made this better
you a bum, broke dude, no way you could buy-a-win
A.I.'s gettin rid of you, like the Sixers did to Iverson
another AI punch ruins it
My 'Punches' are like Crack, so which one you gettin 'Hooked On?'
& as far as your future in rap..
like John Brown says, "That's Not A Good Look Son'
lmfao NO
.. but i do wish you luck, in all your future endeavors..
what time would you like this loss .. cuz you 'whenever'
no
Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'
nah

Such a weak battle. I got Take Over for his cross over punch though.

V/ Take Over, by a hair.

[Tebo]

he has a heart of gold bliss, prevails with ignorance,
you have the edge - to bad he fell for it.
ok
lets go toe 2 toe then, his writtens dont give a damn,
falls to defeet cuz his keyboards jammed.
nah
apart of me wants to let this go, were one in the same yo,
difference is that your the sideshow.
nah
id stick my dick in the middle of his name,
fck a take your O.ver and out, now scramble this lame.
ok
skeet my future at you on vids, & thats its,
take a shot at you like heres lookin at you kid.
hmm
predictions show im under-dog, but under the law,
touchy subject cuz i neuter dawg.
naw
i dont try to win, i'll define whats within,
KID BLITZ'd ya ass in frontlines while Live 0 -6'in.
lmfao
well if ya dont get it screw u like i was kid'din,
heres the catch, like bat-mittin this fool just gets ridden.
not bad

Vsss

ma 'Spear' the dude, lines uglier then Brittney with a shaved head
last week you signed in, this week you're in the sign out thread..
great concept top line, ruined with bottom
... you're not up to par, not even close to ready for JR's yet..
didn't you learn, before you run you gotta take Baby Steps
k
in fact, you need more elevation .. head back to the Cyphers ..
.. cuz you ain't even potty trained yet.. you still need Diapers
seen done 2 much
Check it, I'm the Boss, you just a Front Lines Soldier
Watch 'A.I.' drop Him << Like He Did a CrossOver!
?nah
you a bum, broke dude, no way you could buy-a-win
A.I.'s gettin rid of you, like the Sixers did to Iverson
ok ok
My 'Punches' are like Crack, so which one you gettin 'Hooked On?'
& as far as your future in rap..
like John Brown says, "That's Not A Good Look Son'
good concept
.. but i do wish you luck, in all your future endeavors..
what time would you like this loss .. cuz you 'whenever'
nah
Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'
coulda made this good, kinda mehish

I think Take Over has his concepts down pat, just needs wording LIKE ME lol
Ra Ill came ok need elevation

V// Take Over

[take.O.ver]

4 links so far:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327297

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327303

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327296

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327313

[Mr.Mal]

a very dull battle here guys i must say, i was only feelin the one line by takeover and that was barelly ok.

Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'
^^ dat was ok, at least u tried bein witty.

v// takover

[Jonezy]

he has a heart of gold bliss, prevails with ignorance,
you have the edge - to bad he fell for it.
k
lets go toe 2 toe then, his writtens dont give a damn,
falls to defeet cuz his keyboards jammed.
no
apart of me wants to let this go, were one in the same yo,
difference is that your the sideshow.
no
id stick my dick in the middle of his name,
fck a take your O.ver and out, now scramble this lame.
ehh ok
skeet my future at you on vids, & thats its,
take a shot at you like heres lookin at you kid.
nah
predictions show im under-dog, but under the law,
touchy subject cuz i neuter dawg.
nah
i dont try to win, i'll define whats within,
KID BLITZ'd ya ass in frontlines while Live 0 -6'in.
no
well if ya dont get it screw u like i was kid'din,
heres the catch, like bat-mittin this fool just gets ridden.
nah


vs

I'ma 'Spear' the dude, lines uglier then Brittney with a shaved head
last week you signed in, this week you're in the sign out thread..
no
... you're not up to par, not even close to ready for JR's yet..
didn't you learn, before you run you gotta take Baby Steps
noo
in fact, you need more elevation .. head back to the Cyphers ..
.. cuz you ain't even potty trained yet.. you still need Diapers
noo
Check it, I'm the Boss, you just a Front Lines Soldier
Watch 'A.I.' drop Him << Like He Did a CrossOver!
ok..could of been better
you a bum, broke dude, no way you could buy-a-win
A.I.'s gettin rid of you, like the Sixers did to Iverson
ok
My 'Punches' are like Crack, so which one you gettin 'Hooked On?'
& as far as your future in rap..
like John Brown says, "That's Not A Good Look Son'
lol no
.. but i do wish you luck, in all your future endeavors..
what time would you like this loss .. cuz you 'whenever'
no
Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'
meh

poor battle..but
v/ takeover

[The Vortex]

well if ya dont get it screw u like i was kid'din,
heres the catch, like bat-mittin this fool just gets ridden.

^decent play


vs


Dude always comes soft, so why you thinkin you hot still?
Fuck It. I won't eat sushi, cuz i don't like 'Ra Ill'

decent


vote- takeover

i just thought the rap flowed better and was a tighter write.this battle as whole diddnt really impress me at any point

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