Week 9 - Tebo. (2 - 1) Vs take.O.ver (1 - 0)

[D.Silver]

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Good Luck to you both

[Tebo]

check, I guess just match or whatever who goes first, I just know I ain't going 20. I'm going 10. Match me.

*Will be edited for Links of votes*
1. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post5543754
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[take.O.ver]

alright, so 10 it is..

[Tebo]

Lets go 14 actually, I'm going to go 14.

[take.O.ver]

okay, 14.

[Tebo]

yea .. i wish i had gotten on here earlier to do football and basketball..

next season though, i'm gonna own.

I was thinking of starting a RB League..

anyone interested?


in .. so far:

1.take.O.ver
2. handofgodsucka
3. lw truth lw

It's like your a failed cop the way you coach men to kick pig skin
Also failed anatomy class way your handcuffing ass b4 the game begins
I'm markin this dude loco, he'll put anything in the chokehold, how dumb
That he fantasizes bout the Rolling Stones logo, he so desperate for tongue
This guys against dick riders, but he'll truely go alot lower
When he see's one he'll push him to the side & proceed to Take Over
You created a puddle to spit up to the top & proceeded to dive in
But salivas wittnessed your face sunk & hit the block underneath ya damp writin
Anaconda out of this verse how? Just cuz my verse was a verbal attack
Crushed yours like a snake would, but it'll be the voters who say "it's a wrap!"

yea... i'm waiting til we get at least 10 ppl to do a live draft, that way we can all decide on a good time. so far, we got 5.

You have no antics, so you bitch durin the PM'S
That your bitch ass has, hence the D/R meetings
You need to stop bein a bitch fool 'N get fuckin rid of ya periods, son
Cause then it'll clear up a true statment too, of this bein Take 0 Ver Tebo 1

14.

[take.O.ver]

lmfao @ 3 winless amigo TTM

ay look, i think i finally found El Tigre Woods a date.
Just look at his sig..
.... it could be entered for the Gay Pride Parade!
Tebo, give it up dude, It's time to face the fact you suck
i mean what chance do you have...
when even the Quotes you use are wack as fuck
I could tell you to fix ya punches, flow and so on
'Cause' << you'd be a Lost One..
.. but luckily you still have some advice to grown on!
Your 'Apprenticeship' is coming to an end, cuz your played out
so the next two words you'll hear...
... "You're Fired" .... Straight outta Donald Trumps mouth

& why in the hell are you "LFMAO @ The Three Amigos TTM"
when you know yourself you should be right there with them!
and I heard being wack like you was bad for your health
so I'm done typing .. here dude, why don't you diss yourself..

Eyyo Tebo you rap so wack, give me a L O S E
I lost my match, like 50 couldn't buy out Pelle Pelle
Worst in the league, least Lymph's won sumthin
I got 2 DQ's under my belt & 1 loss up 'N runnin
Steady gunnin, I guess if everyone say I wack
I'm wack... Cows will fly if I ever get a tittle match

I'm Guaranteed to knock 'Tebo' out by 'Friday', so consider him dead
he may think he finally got a 'real' W, but I just took a brick upside his head!

[Lambragini]

It's like your a failed cop the way you coach men to kick pig skin
Also failed anatomy class way your handcuffing ass b4 the game begins
wtf no
I'm markin this dude loco, he'll put anything in the chokehold, how dumb
That he fantasizes bout the Rolling Stones logo, he so desperate for tongue
no
This guys against dick riders, but he'll truely go alot lower
When he see's one he'll push him to the side & proceed to Take Over
no
You created a puddle to spit up to the top & proceeded to dive in
But salivas wittnessed your face sunk & hit the block underneath ya damp writin
omg what are u talking about
Anaconda out of this verse how? Just cuz my verse was a verbal attack
Crushed yours like a snake would, but it'll be the voters who say "it's a wrap!"
not a punch
You have no antics, so you bitch durin the PM'S
That your bitch ass has, hence the D/R meetings
no
You need to stop bein a bitch fool 'N get fuckin rid of ya periods, son
Cause then it'll clear up a true statment too, of this bein Take 0 Ver Tebo 1
you suck

vs.

ay look, i think i finally found El Tigre Woods a date.
Just look at his sig..
.... it could be entered for the Gay Pride Parade!
lol funny but no
Tebo, give it up dude, It's time to face the fact you suck
i mean what chance do you have...
when even the Quotes you use are wack as fuck
meh
I could tell you to fix ya punches, flow and so on
'Cause' << you'd be a Lost One..
.. but luckily you still have some advice to grown on!
nah and stop using the three line punchs they throw ur flow off
Your 'Apprenticeship' is coming to an end, cuz your played out
so the next two words you'll hear...
... "You're Fired" .... Straight outta Donald Trumps mouth
forced and no
& why in the hell are you "LFMAO @ The Three Amigos TTM"
when you know yourself you should be right there with them!
not really a punch
and I heard being wack like you was bad for your health
so I'm done typing .. here dude, why don't you diss yourself..
no
I'm Guaranteed to knock 'Tebo' out by 'Friday', so consider him dead
he may think he finally got a 'real' W, but I just took a brick upside his head
no


wow this battle was wack as fuck but im going with tebo for no being so forced

vote..tebo

[Tebo]

ok...................;\

[-Coop-]

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Tebo
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It's like your a failed cop the way you coach men to kick pig skin
Also failed anatomy class way your handcuffing ass b4 the game begins
The wordplay is ok, I see the effort. You get points for the effort, even though the wording itself is way off.
I'm markin this dude loco, he'll put anything in the chokehold, how dumb
That he fantasizes bout the Rolling Stones logo, he so desperate for tongue
Hmm... concept was ok... If the set-up was more relevant, it would've been better.
This guys against dick riders, but he'll truely go alot lower
When he see's one he'll push him to the side & proceed to Take Over
Won't really feelin this one.
You created a puddle to spit up to the top & proceeded to dive in
But salivas wittnessed your face sunk & hit the block underneath ya damp writin
Pretty stretched. Therefore, it's a no.
Anaconda out of this verse how? Just cuz my verse was a verbal attack
Crushed yours like a snake would, but it'll be the voters who say "it's a wrap!"
Man, this could've been better too, your concept is ok.
You have no antics, so you bitch durin the PM'S
That your bitch ass has, hence the D/R meetings
Way too simple.
You need to stop bein a bitch fool 'N get fuckin rid of ya periods, son
Cause then it'll clear up a true statment too, of this bein Take 0 Ver Tebo 1
Very creative. I liked this for the creativity.

- 4.5/10 - WOW. Tebo, I'm impressed. You finally took our advice, and went under 20, lol, and it payed off. Your lines are a little more complex, and you even threw in a lil bit of wordplay in there. A couple of them are stretched ,or weak, but hey, if you continue this, you'll elevate to be a better battler in no time. Very good compared to your past drops.

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take.O.ver
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ay look, i think i finally found El Tigre Woods a date.
Just look at his sig..
.... it could be entered for the Gay Pride Parade!
Ummm... ok? And? What if the dude was gay? This was weak.
Tebo, give it up dude, It's time to face the fact you suck
i mean what chance do you have...
when even the Quotes you use are wack as fuck
Much more of a statement than a punch.
I could tell you to fix ya punches, flow and so on
'Cause' << you'd be a Lost One..
.. but luckily you still have some advice to grown on!
Nah, worded poorly. Which made it confusing.
Your 'Apprenticeship' is coming to an end, cuz your played out
so the next two words you'll hear...
... "You're Fired" .... Straight outta Donald Trumps mouth
This coulda been better, even though the concept IS played.
& why in the hell are you "LFMAO @ The Three Amigos TTM"
when you know yourself you should be right there with them!
Lol. Kinda funny.
and I heard being wack like you was bad for your health
so I'm done typing .. here dude, why don't you diss yourself..
Never do this, ever. It is not effective at all.
I'm Guaranteed to knock 'Tebo' out by 'Friday', so consider him dead
he may think he finally got a 'real' W, but I just took a brick upside his head!
Blah... this was soft as hell.

- 2/10 - I think you underestimated Tebo this time. Your bars were all either statement-ish, soft, or worded poorly. Not one stood out, except maybe the TTM one, and that wasn't even decent, it was just funny. Damn, a lot of your concepts weren't used properly either. Spend a little more time on your wording, thats your glaring weak point.

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VOTE: Tebo
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[one way]

tabo

It's like your a failed cop the way you coach men to kick pig skin
Also failed anatomy class way your handcuffing ass b4 the game begins
this was cool
You need to stop bein a bitch fool 'N get fuckin rid of ya periods, son
Cause then it'll clear up a true statment too, of this bein Take 0 Ver Tebo 1
this was dope as shit, like coop said very creative

takeover

'Apprenticeship'
that was a pretty big word


tebo

[Donald Trump]

It's like your a failed cop the way you coach men to kick pig skin
Also failed anatomy class way your handcuffing ass b4 the game begins
nah weak
I'm markin this dude loco, he'll put anything in the chokehold, how dumb
That he fantasizes bout the Rolling Stones logo, he so desperate for tongue
coulda been better
This guys against dick riders, but he'll truely go alot lower
When he see's one he'll push him to the side & proceed to Take Over
weak nameplay
You created a puddle to spit up to the top & proceeded to dive in
But salivas wittnessed your face sunk & hit the block underneath ya damp writin
weak too
Anaconda out of this verse how? Just cuz my verse was a verbal attack
Crushed yours like a snake would, but it'll be the voters who say "it's a wrap!"
this was cool
You have no antics, so you bitch durin the PM'S
That your bitch ass has, hence the D/R meetings
weak use of a quote
You need to stop bein a bitch fool 'N get fuckin rid of ya periods, son
Cause then it'll clear up a true statment too, of this bein Take 0 Ver Tebo 1
this was actually good

vs

ay look, i think i finally found El Tigre Woods a date.
Just look at his sig..
.... it could be entered for the Gay Pride Parade!
weak
Tebo, give it up dude, It's time to face the fact you suck
i mean what chance do you have...
when even the Quotes you use are wack as fuck
lol this was funny
I could tell you to fix ya punches, flow and so on
'Cause' << you'd be a Lost One..
.. but luckily you still have some advice to grown on!
nah
Your 'Apprenticeship' is coming to an end, cuz your played out
so the next two words you'll hear...
... "You're Fired" .... Straight outta Donald Trumps mouth
weak too
& why in the hell are you "LFMAO @ The Three Amigos TTM"
when you know yourself you should be right there with them!
weak punch
and I heard being wack like you was bad for your health
so I'm done typing .. here dude, why don't you diss yourself..
weak use of quote
I'm Guaranteed to knock 'Tebo' out by 'Friday', so consider him dead
he may think he finally got a 'real' W, but I just took a brick upside his head!
nah

v-Tebo

[-Coop-]

takeover

'Apprenticeship'
that was a pretty big word

Lmao

[vocabz]

It's like your a failed cop the way you coach men to kick pig skin
Also failed anatomy class way your handcuffing ass b4 the game begins
(The wordplay is ok. Off on the wording a bit.)
I'm markin this dude loco, he'll put anything in the chokehold, how dumb
That he fantasizes bout the Rolling Stones logo, he so desperate for tongue
(The concept was ok...)
This guys against dick riders, but he'll truely go alot lower
When he see's one he'll push him to the side & proceed to Take Over
(No)
You created a puddle to spit up to the top & proceeded to dive in
But salivas wittnessed your face sunk & hit the block underneath ya damp writin
(A bit stretched)
Anaconda out of this verse how? Just cuz my verse was a verbal attack
Crushed yours like a snake would, but it'll be the voters who say "it's a wrap!"
(Pretty dope... I liked this one)
You have no antics, so you bitch durin the PM'S
That your bitch ass has, hence the D/R meetings
(No)
You need to stop bein a bitch fool 'N get fuckin rid of ya periods, son
Cause then it'll clear up a true statment too, of this bein Take 0 Ver Tebo 1
(Creative.. This was pretty dope, too)


vs




ay look, i think i finally found El Tigre Woods a date.
Just look at his sig..
.... it could be entered for the Gay Pride Parade!
(no)
Tebo, give it up dude, It's time to face the fact you suck
i mean what chance do you have...
when even the Quotes you use are wack as fuck
(No)
I could tell you to fix ya punches, flow and so on
'Cause' << you'd be a Lost One..
.. but luckily you still have some advice to grown on!
(No)
Your 'Apprenticeship' is coming to an end, cuz your played out
so the next two words you'll hear...
... "You're Fired" .... Straight outta Donald Trumps mouth
(Played..)
& why in the hell are you "LFMAO @ The Three Amigos TTM"
when you know yourself you should be right there with them!
(Pretty dope.. I liked this)
and I heard being wack like you was bad for your health
so I'm done typing .. here dude, why don't you diss yourself..
(NO)
I'm Guaranteed to knock 'Tebo' out by 'Friday', so consider him dead
he may think he finally got a 'real' W, but I just took a brick upside his head!
(Too soft.)


v/ Tebo

He came better with the wordplay, concepts and creativity...
Decent battle..

[Tebo]

5-0