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doc_knock
prophacyz
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10-15 lines...max
reg'la house rules
he drops first
topic-personal suicidal thoughts...
aight, checkin in...here goes....
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why go on living pointlessly day to day/
everything is fuckin pointless, aint no reason to stay/
but i cant show a tear, cuz i gotta be strong/
but inside, shit its different, im being strung along/
by someone else? no, by myself? yes/
sometimes i ache so much i think i should take a gun to my chest/
this shit just aint worth it, death is escape/
who gives a fuck about family, even though hearts may break/
slit my wrist, drain my blood, fall to the floor/
i know that in my head ive fuckin seen this before/
the same pain forever, and it never goes away/
like it or not, my life ends today
i've got all these thoughts runnin through my head, damn, i can't
take the stress anymore...sometimes i wonder would i be better off dead?//
its not like anyone ever liked me in the fist place. they'd never notice i'm gone...i 'vanished without a trace'//
it seems as though i have 'scattered' from my family like 'leaves-droppin-the-fall'//
mom and dad neglected me...when i was i was in danger, they never once tried to fuckin protect me//
pull the trigger and blow the brains right outta me...
maybe thats what i would take for these bitches to see//
^shit...it stretched my lines...oh well...it was ten....let the votin begin....100 characters...100 characters......
prophacyz...ur structure is whack man, u gotta fix that, i see you pointed that out to. You gotta fix that. Even tho prophacyz verse was more creative...doc_knock did create a much better picture in my head about the point he was trying to establish. Both had nice closers even tho prophacyz was stronger in my opinion. Creativity is awarded...But the main point of a topical battle is to create a better image in the readers head about the subject...so
vote- doc_knock
Return the favour by dropping honest votes on the battles in my signature please. Thx.
^ i can respect that. i appreciate ya honesty payce...need mo' niggaz that vote like that on this site....oh well. yes my comp. is fucked and messes up my structure
Yeah Doc's was cool, was like a poem prophacyz u had a good verse too but it was hard to read as everyone else pointed out, other than that u both had good shit but I have to go with doc on that mainly with the line about family and the one about picturing it before, i think every teen goes through that shit good stuff -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
this is my first topical battle, so i don't really know how to do this typa shit...not an excuse...its da truth....
heh...yeah, ive done a few, so i had the up end on that one....
prohacy, check your pm's
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hey, i dropped a vote in your battle. Can you guys hit me up with some honest votes on mine plz. thx
Do not ignore his^ comment because he cannot vote back for you or that will be suspicious as in D/r "If You Vote For Me Il Vote For You"
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