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    Way of Life

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    {A Glimpse} Part One. - FormulaMC

    (Verse 1)
    I'm livin life to the fullest cuz tomorrow it could be my last
    anxiously waitin fo 2morrow wishin 2day would go by fast
    I wanna see what tha next day brings for J, heaven or hell
    I'm breaking down doors, about to leave its eleven farewell
    I'm that type who takes tha bus to tha mall starin at a bitch
    to strike that attitude, start tha game gotta hit her with pitch
    something hard but nice, Foul Ball! for saying I am not rich
    pimpin is wat I do for a living like how these hustlers hustle
    and how fat people excerise to burn n' gain some muscles
    when I'm with a chick and her sibling I act kind of fatherly
    tha hate from these jealous ass niggaz never bother me
    took tha hate, they're stabbin me with a little plastic knife
    I'm still searching fo my ideal woman near or far my wife
    gotta stay pimping while taking tha hate its tha way of life

    (hook)
    mami said she doesn't like a nigga's attitude cuz I carry you
    cuz you lied, in this rap shit I'm underrated like Larry Hughes
    I keep switchin up my style cuz these bums are gettin closer
    my life is getting kind of better instead of lookin more grosser
    Jay-z sample-------->"That's right it's wicked, that's life I live it"
    Jay-Z sample--->"I'm trying to live it to the limit and love it a lot"
    its tha way of life

    (Verse 2)
    a nigga got what he wanted but didn't steal on a regular basis
    teeth kind of fucked up, nice smile wit tha result of no braces
    I'm gettin around in my homestate now going different places
    mostly in PG seein some familiar faces, tha J's I kept it laced
    still learnin tha games of tha streets gaining some knowledge
    I'm tryna ride on some 20's before I head to florida for college
    once I get a J.O.B, I'm a save sum green up fo my mercedes
    momma keeps telling me about these different types of ladies
    don't wanna shatter my dreams early by bringing back babies
    but that doesn't mean I'm a not fuck a bitch, this nigga's down
    if I'm falling into a terrible situation, I'll notice and try to rebound
    myself off tha glass cuz I don't wanna fall into tha wrong hands
    I live my own life can't nobody change it I hope you understand
    its tha way of life

    (hook)

    (Verse 3)
    can't see a black man's sins cuz they're covered by my dark skin
    I'm chillin, turned off my mind don't want it runnin my life is parkin
    fuck hustlin, I'm either chillin at a party or sleeping during tha night
    or still awake writing a dope rhyme you can see my bedroom light
    YJ blazes whenever, I study less sleep more and get good grades
    my life looks a bit brighter, so no mo holding up tha ace of spades
    like they say death is tha easy way out!, death is YJ's final request
    for every moment I live and every new people I meet I feel blessed
    15 years is a long way in life, I wonder who would of ever guessed
    I'd make it this far after so many encounters wit tha angel of death
    I'm pimpin, I'm blazin, sleepin, I'm rappin and I'm luvin this lifestyle
    I'm that kid who never shows his happy side, I frown I rarely smile
    its tha way of life

    (hook)
    BEST OF YJ
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    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    This Was A Pretty Good Piece For A Startin' Out Newbie.Structure Can Use Some Major Work,Try To Use Some More Multis.
    mami said she doesn't like a nigga's attitude cuz I carry you
    cuz you lied, in this rap shit I'm underrated like Larry Hughes
    I keep switchin up my style cuz these bums are gettin closer
    my life is getting kind of better instead of lookin more grosser
    Jay-z sample-------->"That's right it's wicked, that's life I live it"
    Jay-Z sample--->"I'm trying to live it to the limit and love it a lot"
    its tha way of life
    ^^Diden't Rhyme^^
    Plus You Using Quotes That Other Rappers Have Said Seems A Little Herbish & Gay Cause You Can't Come Up With Your Own Lryics To Fill In Those Extra Lines.
    6.5/10

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    I think this was a drop was descent.... Even without the use of multies..... The flow was very good.....

    To make this drop better, use some better wordplay... The guy above gave good advice

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    Ok ima be honest.
    I didnt like this.
    The Hook was garbage

    The flow was sketchy
    Vocab was pretty bad
    Structure was solid tho...

    Concept is kinda played..
    but keep elevatin ull get ur style soon.

    pz

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    i agree you need work...but you kept on topic... the flowdid fall in places..and so did the rhyming...work on complexity....few multis n metas n shit....vocab also..you got alot of 1-2 syllable words in there......but still an ok read...jus work on it....pZ
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    thanx fo da advice uppin
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
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    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    yo i thought it was hot, i might b da only 1
    but i liked da piece, maybe because i usually
    read dese post wit a Pac beat in my head and
    de can usually fit wit anything, lol
    but ya i thought it was sick so
    keep uppin an stay uppin
    peace
    Its all on me
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    an by da way puttin samples in ya
    hook isent gay if it fitz da peice an
    bringz it 2gether like dis did
    Its all on me
    LA
    $4$-Life

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    thats great, you said and explained it well, keep workin it out. nice how you had some philosophy in there. good job.

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    thanx uppin
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
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    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    BEST OF YJ
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    Luv sick
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    Yeah this was ok i thought.....your structure was good through out the piece......your flow in this was pretty good as well, it stayed on through out it, never really got off that much....try adding some more multies to this though...but keep at it.

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    yeh i liked this piece...which is weird from me u know cos i dont really like alot of tha stuff on this u know...i dont think it wud be burning up though...but still it was nice...nice flow to it

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    agree wit the nice structure, flow was decent but still could be improved wit a better hook.good effort tho
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    thanx uppin
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
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    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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