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Thread: Face Down. Ft. The Realist

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    Face Down. Ft. The Realist

    *To Start Of, Sureals Protege, The Realist*

    The waitress keep my java cup filled, her company this evening
    When I talk she hangs on my words, hooked on my breathing
    Nothing like coffee and a beautiful girl to finish a long work day
    We finish off the third tray, ride home is late she ask can I stay
    Cute blond twenty four and single, waitress to pay for her career
    Grew up ugly, braces and pimples, bachelors in two more years
    After midnight we stroll to my vehicle, she asks about the horses
    She enjoys the leather interior, after all they are stock on Porsches
    The conversation drifted to sex, accidentally brush against her thigh
    Subtle was useless, the red light was her excuse to kiss as a reply
    Pull into her homes garage, we can't keep our hands to ourselves
    Both our clothes litter the floor her body is the softest I ever felt
    Eventually her apprehension was evident, I minded my own business
    Tears told me she didn't want to continue, her first time she did this
    In my mind I admit to my perverted hobby, I heard the siren sounds
    Rearview reflects to me the one woman I could never face down

    *Time To Get Sureal*

    Flip Opposite Style, Yet Still Turned Away.
    Brain Storms Wild, When Skies Turn To Rain.
    Face The World, Always Turn One Blind Eye.
    Why Cry, Trip Over Tangles Of Your Own Lies.
    Start Throwing Darts, To Pop Life's Purpose.
    Not Missing Parts, Are You Getting Nervous?
    Always Watch Your Back, Head Up, Face Down.
    Never Flip The Trax, Straight Up, Disgraced Now?
    .WP.
    .. It' Still Perfect..

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    This was a good piece...Realist part was good, it had good flow...it was structured very well...i liked the content, made a good visual..vocab was good as well...Sureals part was good too...vocab was good..structure was nice...flowed real well...overall i really liked this piece, it made for a good read, very nicely done, the concept was real good too...keep at it.

    and if you could leave some feedback..
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=86787

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    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
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    IT WAS HORRIBLY SHORT BUT THE WORDS PAINTED THE PICTURE AND OUTSIDE THE LENGTH I SAW NO FLAW IT WAS LIKE READING A SONNET TO A BEAT GREAT READ TO YOU BOTH
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    This was very, very good...

    But I'm missing the point, I think...

    Did ya rape her?

    It sounds like she said no, your hobby is rape, and you left with sirens in ya rearview, ashamed of what ya did...

    Did I get this right?

    Cuz Sureal's sounds like he's damning and judging you for what happened...

    Maybe I completely missed the point, but I smell a Kobe like thing.

    But what I read was just bad-ass...

    From both...

    Even if I missed the meaning, I enjoyed being confused.

    Alot.

    Peace

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    95% Correct...
    The person who told the story is a FEMALES and shes finally admits to herself that she rapes other women because she has low self esteem...
    The rearview mirror in the cop car made her look at herslef and see what all this rape got...

    Good reading into it...
    Upping

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    Dope from both,..

    Sureal protegé...?..

    RoA...Born...lol

    But still,..both used some nice vocab,...flow and a real nice topic..feld this piece, ...some deep aspects, ..made this a nice and good read...

    Peep..First love..i just dropped it..

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    Pretty Good Fam...
    Keep It Up, Sureal
    We Are Collabing
    Okay? Okay!........
    <center>..The . Topical . Regime.. </center>

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    dope piece i liked it, but i was wondering about that part if you raped her or not.. but other then that it was really good, sir eel killed hit his listens were short but they flowed very well good shit man
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    Realist dropped a good length & the scheme was solid throughout & i was feeling that. . Some great content

    The waitress keep my java cup filled, her company this evening
    When I talk she hangs on my words, hooked on my breathing

    That was a great opener with great imagery. .

    Sureal that was a short but sweet drop. . Maybe too short but good none the less. .

    Pz
    Pot` Ed.

    I dropped to show RM what hot was;
    And this faggot got Butterflies in his stomach the size of Mothra

    Your text is just another weak display
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    Good stuff...

    Nice imagery...
    Also left enough to the imaghination so the reader can intepret it different ways..

    Good stuff ya'll
    AI

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    That was a good piece you guys...I agree with what Chrit said. This piece doesn't need critique it's one of the better open mics posted lately.

    Check mine out ft. Word Perfect-

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=87818
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