Exist

E-Lude · December 4th, 2003, 04:53 PM

does god really exist, well if he does i ain't found him.
I'v climbed up that hill, only to find it was a mountain.
so many times I'v gone lookin, for the peak and almost found it,
only to have the wind pull me down and start again grounded.
then it hit me, all the nations with biblicalations.
lifes not meant to be easy, its about trials and tribulations.
just take a look at california, and its gang affiliations.
lessons learned in pain, dont ever die in vain.
so don't worry bout makin it out alive, in this life we call a game.
don't worry bout scientifics, or whats his real name.
belief's what keeps us goin, its how were all the same.

tell me what u think.

**Undeniable** · December 4th, 2003, 05:16 PM

very nice... exellent flow, good vocab, topic was good... on the whole i really enjoyed it. I could have been a little longer but still good.

8/10

**-LD-** · December 4th, 2003, 05:42 PM

Alright Vocab, Good Flow, Good Topic, .. ^ Same Coulda Been Longer.. Didnt really enjoy it.. Alright Multis

7/10 Holla Feedback at my sig

C rocka · December 4th, 2003, 05:50 PM

shit was nice....i was feelin it fo sho i give this

7.5/10

**Mistral** · December 4th, 2003, 05:51 PM

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get deleted...

But this was alright i thought...structure in this was alright could use a bit of a touch up here and there but it was good....your vocab was alright as well, could be up'd though....flow in this was pretty decent, got off at a few points though....overall this was alright...keep at it.

E-Lude · December 4th, 2003, 05:52 PM

thanks for the feed back...C rocka i was diggin your open mic shit too.

**Endeva.** · December 4th, 2003, 05:55 PM

i gotta agree this was a nice lil peice....some nice vocab..and the fflow was steady.....maybe a bit short but with a longer verse i can see it being coo... pZ.....