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Thread: Corrupted Visions: Your My Angel (Feat: Masta C)

  1. December 8th, 2003, 01:07 AM #1
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    Corrupted Visions: Your My Angel (Feat: Masta C)

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    MC Uski-
    You’re My Angel Gurl I cant Live With Out You here in My arms..
    As i kiss you softly on your lips, protecting you from all harm..
    nothing will ever stop me from loving you, i just cant let you go..
    But yet you know, that i just love being your pet to show..
    You And Me Were Ment To be Don't You See this Is Our Story..
    Baby your always here for me, I Love to hold you when its stormy..
    I Love your Warmth.....your Touch The Way You make me feel..
    I always wondered if i made a mistake would you take me still?..
    When I see Your Face U make Me Quiver and shiver In Happiniss..
    Your my angel gurl nothing will change that,thats why im rappin this..

    Masta C-
    There is just so many things that I just got to say..
    Like how I just thought about you a lot today…
    And words just cant explain how much I feel for you..
    I love you, you’re my angel, I could never speak more true…
    Not a day goes by that I don’t look up to the sky…
    Cause you defy the word angel cause you just fly…
    You just shine so bright looking so fine tonight…
    Theres nothing but pure beauty that defines my sight…
    There is just nothing that can change the way I feel
    You’re my angel…that’s why every days surreal…

    Yo This Was Keyed In 20 Mins Drop Some Feed back Peace
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  2. December 8th, 2003, 01:10 AM #2
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  3. December 8th, 2003, 10:32 AM #3
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    seems like you catz is both smitten...lol...quite deep man......the topic was kept to well....both could have upped the vocab...but ya message was got,,so... structure was ok...though masta you seem to have taken a slightly differernt approach to usual with shorter bars,,,but it worked ok......Uski..work on ya multis....all in all reppin good....pZ twinz....
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  4. December 8th, 2003, 04:23 PM #4
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    multis lacked but you can sence the emotion and feeling in this all was embodies you guys must feel your words cause they are trokected that way....good work brush up a lil but better then alot i read
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  5. December 8th, 2003, 07:06 PM #5
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    Yeah when i write about love i usually shorten my bars a bit i dunno why its just a habit lol....But Thanks For The Feedback So Far...Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.
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  6. December 8th, 2003, 09:37 PM #6
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    like word perfect said needs some more multi's well for uski's behalf masta u were fine and for both ya's the vocab needed to be upped a bit but for a piece that was keyed in 20 mins it wasn't to bad, it was quick and easy to read. and both of your structres were ok not a whole lot of complexity here though. but nice piece guys topic stayed on point made for a good collab. keep up. peace.
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  7. December 8th, 2003, 09:43 PM #7
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    very emotional and deep, more multis and longer wouled be cool but its good as it is, im not to good with love songs so ill jus let 2 guys take that lol
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  8. December 8th, 2003, 09:46 PM #8
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    Yo the Feedback is much appretiated Kepp it dropin in though thanks so far.

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  9. December 8th, 2003, 10:58 PM #9
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    MC - flow was nice...vocab lacked kinda elementary...topic cant go wrong with love...in need of metas and wordplay just to spice things up...decent drop homie

    Masta - flow on point...vocab fit well within context...topic same as above...good meta just a lil more wordplay...good drop

    you guys go well together nice team work

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  10. December 9th, 2003, 12:01 AM #10
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    I dont know, I thought uski had good multies, in about every line he had some..i dont know why you telling him he needs more...but thanks for the feedback and keep it coming in, its much appreciated, thanks
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  11. December 9th, 2003, 01:13 AM #11
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    /\ who you talking to...i said nothing about multies....

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  12. December 9th, 2003, 03:24 AM #12
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    you guys came with the emotion, i could picture the feelings there, your multis werent really there but the flow was on the spot.. somebody gonna get some tonight..
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    nice verse. props. it was nice to read. i enjoy verses with emotion. keep up the good work both of you. the wording may have been a bit basic. but wut i lacked in words, it made up for in meaning. so that was great. the flow was short and sweet. the imagery was nice. and so were the rhymes. keep it up peepz.
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    TF is up with this site and Mutlis???

    There is just so many things that I just got to say..
    Like how I just thought about you a lot today…
    And words just cant explain how much I feel for you..
    I love you, you’re my angel, I could never speak more true…
    Not a day goes by that I don’t look up to the sky…
    Cause you defy the word angel cause you just fly…
    You just shine so bright looking so fine tonight
    Theres nothing but pure beauty that defines my sight
    There is just nothing that can change the way I feel
    You’re my angel…that’s why every days surreal…

    Lacking Multis??? Eh you people need to Elavate
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    lol...Hey Thanks For The Feedback So Far, Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.
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