Impeachment,Political Correctness,-N- Hiprocracy produced

I'd say it's time for impeachment N political correctness
N ma main objective, to see they don't get re-elected
so check it, operation cleanse tha world is ready to begin
no worry about what god thinks, he's in favor of these sins
coz crooked governments are tha real terrorists no doubt
murderring tha mass of people, they pretend they helping out
N tha United Nations, ain't done shit ta improve relations
Im losing ma patience, wit all tha precious time that they wasting
its our own fuckn governments, that we need ta be crushing
But when tha pressure is applied, they quickly end tha discussion
its fuckn disgusting, my president is the first one I ain't trusting
wit his selfish Prime, partner in crime, got me feeling like busting
they use tha media to paint a picture of confusion
using force N discarding any form of resolution
whether signed, or adopted, by administrations
urging other nations ta offer their own participation
in what, tha destruction of people they call a homeland threat
changing federal reserve, into a daily growing debt
at a rate thats alarming, plus innocent that theyre harming
sending thousands into battle like bees swarming
while publicly they seem charming, soft spoken N warm hearted
are they really that arrogant or just think that were retarded
yes its time for a change, but fuck peaceful negotiations
assasination is tha best solution, it creates less complications
coz this madness will not cease, no peace will be in tha middle east
violence will only increase, until the evil leaders are deceased
N hipocracy produced by this so called democracy
taxes be increasingly costing me, that is why of ma animosity
the fight be exhausting me, do they wonder why I got hostility
probably because the cops I pay for don't let me live in tranquility
they prohibit my ability to provide for my family, are yall feelin me
Im tired of tha fucked up cards that life just keeps on dealing me
meanwhile a lifestyle of crime, this time, is appealing N tempting
don't really want ta cheat or steal, but still my pockets stay empty
N forty percent of my total paycheck, is to much ta be taxed
thats no exaggeration at all nigga, those are tha actual facts
they subtract N extract, from tha wages that I work for, to earn
but when its time for tax returns, they don't seem all too concerned
oh yeah they're quick to collect but very slow to cut a check
N with this kinda standard treatment, what tha fuck they expect?
respect?

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Uppin..dayum niggas i put effort into this shit

okay..uppin

i'm goin to try this once more

fight the power! lol

i can see you put effort into this, i can also see that you're at a point now where you're starting to get good at this rap thing. now for the piece...

the concepts a good ol' fashioned one but it never gets boring. i definately caught the anger in this, especially as you talked about different areas the goverment is fucking us on, you got a few multis in this and they were well-placed, your vocab was basic but it made the piece easier to read. the images were solid as well. a respectable open mic man.

my only real critiscism is your use of "N" in a big capital instead of and or a small letter, it draws attention from the rest of piece and makes you looks like you're using it a lot.

keep posting and elavating. and please rep one of my pieces. pzz

Thanx man...Uppin

Alright Please Give me feedback...Dayum take ya time on sumthin and Nobody pays attention...do a keystyle and everyones a critic

It was nice, you clearly meant what you said with that verse. So it was powerful, but it wasn't quite, it didn't have something. It wasn't descriptive enough I think. Things like, 'They pretend they helping' out didn't help either. It might be rap, but you still have to use proper grammar.
But overall, it was good, it was a nice open mic, keep elevatin

^^^LOL...Okay...Uppin for Critism

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