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He
he smiles at me
the affirmation that the day was good
his hands swallowed by my palms
he giggles at me
he walks proud that he is here
steps of confidence erecting and strengthening
he spouts wildly how the day should end
how we should get drunk with Sunkist Orange Drink and Lay's Potato Chips
then he redirect to getting my butt whooped in madden
planning the time has got him juiced
through the rambling he stops and hug me
tell me that he love me
i'm the best
he ever had....lol
like he had others
but i feel that he truly trust me
he truly want me to be every dream he has of me
and i will be his every adventure and his prayer bench
he knows my love.....
i'm his only superhero
and who he is.......
he is my son
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...-I-Lost-in-You
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?473106-Lost
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Oh wow. I have no words.
That was like a stream of light flowing through me, that flow, those words, that intrigue.
You threw me. So far, with these words. And then, at the end, you killed me.
I feel like I've 'been through something'. And I'm numb, because of it.
It's so bloody good.
I'm so, ... forget it.
Jealous. lol
Words move people. Your words just did that.
Beautiful read.
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How can this sit?
Come on people.
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hey a poem, awesome, I forgot ppl did them on these things.
this was good, too high to even begin to explain why and i will promise to come back and leave feed but i will probably forget but i promise i will come back and leave feed.
but if i don't, this was very good.
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4th or 5th time reading this so I apologize about not feeding a long time ago. This was so ill. I loved it. As I said in the mag, the emotions felt here cannot be fabricated and as a parent (I've got a daughter who turns 4 in a month) I can thoroughly dig the principle of this piece. I really think you hit the nail on the head when it comes to parenting. I have a poem about my daughter I wrote some while ago that this reminds me of, I must say you executed the idea better than I did lol. This has already been nom'd and is more than worthy of it. Props 143 I hope to see a lot more poetry from you in the future