A Road to the Afterlife

[CiRcA sKaTeR]

Yea tell me If I should go on with this, this is just a first verse that came to me : /

I'm driving 90 in a 40 zone, in an intersection
Breaks are blown, I'm on the phone, can't handle more rejection
Shift the gear, I drink my beer, No more need for no protection,
I'm more jacked up, and Fucked up then a George Bush election
I'm always getting screwed over so you'd think I'd learn my lessons
But it just drops my self esteem, and ups my usage of depressants
Based my ways, on my days, as a teenage adolescence
Sniffin' Coke Until I'm broke, and pumping multiple injections
Suicide was the antidote, to a life of misery
You can suffer to a degree, before you strike insanity
Suddenly, Life lost value, nothing was what it once meant to me
I was just another rapper, searching for an Identity
I've made some choices I regret, and some choices I've enjoyed
But the most important choices are the ones you can't avoid
So now I'm unemployed, getting fucking paranoid,
Death would be a warm welcome, Cause my life has been destroyed


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[SpitBoxer]

feelin this peice fam. flow was on point. i feel the emotion... good topic for this.

"Shift the gear, I drink my beer, No more need for no protection,
I'm more jacked up, and Fucked up then a George Bush election"

nice lines^^^

stay up fam

peace

[.Silence.]

this piece was good from you homie.But two things you might want to work on is using more Imagry and more emotion in your verse it will amke it better homie.But you had a good storyline in this piece and that is good cuz if you don't have a good storyline what would be the point of the piece.Also you had a good structure and good use of your vocabulary in this piece.Just keep up the good work homie you'll get better.Check out one of my OMs my newest ones are "Current event","how we were raised",and "unwanted Child".

[TheCrunkKing]

good piece, need to finish the song before u post it though, but good drop, good rhymes, keep up mane

[CiRcA sKaTeR]

O yeah Congrats on 1000 posts Va

[*BaByShAnTe*]

ya vocabualry was good.
you had a noce topic, and the rhymin was hot ya bars were good as well.
this was enjoyable to read tho, very interesting. at some parts id idnt understand exactly what that ahd to do with after life because it was off subject yamean, the flow and vocab was hot just try to make the shit more related to the topic at each line and each bar
hit my poiece up
here's the title "Shante~psychotic thuggette" i'd appreciate it