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she slips away
always smiles
then twirls beyond
fingertips
taste only a
glimpse of her
flesh beckoning
consumption
will be mine
my gaze strikes
her final pose
before the crowd
cheers in praise
her slender body
tensely turns
up my passion
burns down on her
uneased shiver
agreement binding
her wrists together
we consumate
my lustful urge
to dance endlessly
needing finances
the theater
lends its dancers
bodies shiver
Last edited by gémeaux; March 26th, 2007 at 01:35 AM
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I really like the meter of this piece, gem...it flowed in a lovely way that reflected the dancer it's about...
the descriptions in it were concise but delicious, if you know what I mean. I was reading it out loud, and the dancer tasted good. Your speaker, though revealed as malicious at the end, talks about her in such a way that makes me share his lust...
and the last stanza is excellent..."agreement binding her wrists together"...and the speaker not caring about the dancer at all, only her body...and "my lustful urge to dance endlessly"...
Just lovely =)
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I agree, i was taken aback at the way you managed to reflect the pace of a ballerina to the poem. I really enjoy your style, your word choice is superb and each stanza is as poignant as the last. An enjoyable read indeed, gemeaux.
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