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    spaceship/ufo/crater gator/alien collide

    Super-sonic electronic, plate tectonics
    toxic drinking tonic – airwave sinking
    molecular cells linking, android eyelash
    blinking, terminator cyborg thinking
    about mechanical structures taking over –
    Computer matrix seeing – transforming
    human beings, civilians from civilized
    places fleeing, no signs of breathing tissue
    seeming,
    Crater wholes destructive metal,
    Roaming nomads – future dust
    choking meddle,
    Carpetbaggers with no since of trade
    try to settle,
    On inhabitable lands composed of
    shrapnel and poison,
    Battery fluids leak as blood and
    toxic waste starts to moisten,
    The mouths of unsuspecting
    victims as laser blasts
    impale fast
    through the drastic
    measures of debris and
    glass,
    We are in the future,
    no turning back – no past,
    Every step you take may be
    that step’s last,
    Volcanoes of obsolete computers,
    These are not of the future so they
    are deemed useless by the ruler,
    Humans forming crosses, patching
    up incidents like sutures,
    Helpless green army soldier unite
    to fight like troopers,
    Atomic bombs hazardous choking,
    The stump of a human being smoking,
    The implosion of a hand grenade bloating,
    The eye of an organism in a blood pool floating,
    typing keyboard letters every word is voided,
    Green hair and half a caged face I swear its Freakzoid it’s,
    something not of this world
    and this IS the world
    Mars, Venus,
    something in between this,
    It could be a little better
    but it’s not the cleanest….
    take over !
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    Re: spaceship/ufo/crater gator/alien collide

    damn... you and your fuckin uber sonic tonic toxic choice of words...lmfao dud eit was a nice read man and real abstractive and was just on point man... really down to the point of easy understanding and yet still very vague to ones eye nah mean man... this was just equally dope man... props man.... i loved how it was just all around yet it had a point and a meaning... it was just nicely fitted and the way it came about to things... it was just a ill and nice read man not much i can say right now bbut ill edit in later a better feed man... sorry


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    rise.

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    Re: spaceship/ufo/crater gator/alien collide

    Ha your one clever little fuck i'll give you that.You always seem to come up with these strange yet creative topics and its amazing how you write so well to them.When I first saw the topic I didn't know what to expect but I was proven wrong.It took me a while to get used to this style of yours and it just felt strange the first time I read it, but I read again and again untill I was fully ajusted to the style in hand.Your wording for me was your number one strong point here.It was just so god damn good and by using that style of yours helped me to take it in a lot easier.Maybe because these words are singled out..I dunno.You are always so descriptive in how you write so it wasn't a huge shock at the level of imagery here.Now...your take on the topic.I thought you wrote it in the best way possibe.It was something fresh and differant to my eyes, only one word for it and that is brilliant.For me this is HoF worth and will be getting a nomination.Well done

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    Re: spaceship/ufo/crater gator/alien collide

    wow, this was a weird read, although good.
    this was fluid man, you flowed so smoothly,
    with your particular choice of word's
    which from you im starting to grow fond of.
    This is really an excellent poem.
    and along with Dyl i will be nominating for HoF.
    no joke i thought it was that good man.
    plz hit up The Wake. in your free time.
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