Eternal Promise ft. Abiona

[Spekz.]

Eternal Promise
By: Spekz. ft Abiona

Spekz(normal)
Abiona(Italicized)

I stare,
Holes in the mirror
Praying this suit
Of prince charming,
Layers me with a hint of magic.
For handsome groom – isn’t enough.
Hands folded,
Holding my lowered thoughts
I talk to god, on the holiest day of my life
“please, make this day
one to relive, not just for me…
…but for my angel,
my truest of love,
my best friend,
my soon-to-be,
bound for ever...
…wife.

As time wept on my ever request
I too had traveled
Into the still of an honest moment.
Soon music glided to my ears,
It begins…
Now I wait anxiously
Hardly breathing,
My heart remained pure
Steadily beating…
And then,
Church Bells
Startle the butterflies
Birthed in an empty stomach.
Anticipation stirred my blood,
Hands shook,
Knees cripple,
And then by no mistake,
An angel,
Cast a glow,
I simply couldn’t resist.
Smiling, I nearly fainted…
Oh, how I cherished this moment…
Suddenly,
Tears of the deepest joy
Splashed on sensual cheeks
Feeling the warmth of her
Radiance from the heavens.

All I can do…
…is stare.


Eyes break open
upon the dawning of a new reflection
one last glimpse through looking glasses
Visions cast backwards
through memories of paths traveled
before his crossed mine.
Divine blessing, he separates time
sending moments before his presence
into the shadows of yesterdays
The heart plays
rhythms of holy overtures
in tune with steps
feet flying down velvet carpets
towards the altar
where he rests

My prince
holding my future
within the caress of his hands
my song
upon the curves of his lips
inside I turn and twist
to violins
strings pulling notes of forever
from deep within my soul
his hand outstretched
Where he leads
I vow to follow
through the darkest nights
and into the brightest days
Our union
pulling sun and moon
into new rotations
I swear to place him
amongst the stars
forever shining in my sky
Starry-eyed
I look to him
and pledge our future
to begin


Your love burns in my soul,
Placing warmth in my heart.

Your soul, it sings to mine
restoring faith in a new start.

Luscious lips graze mine,
Melting any linger doubt.

I breathe your kisses
and understand what love's about.

Your eyes pierce me
Forever caught…
…on you.

Reborn within your vision
To you...
...I shall be true

Do you take her to be your lawfully wedded wife
I Do – as passionately as words can express.
Do you take him to be your lawfully wedded husband.
I do - until my beating heart must rest.

[Spekz.]

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[Spekz.]

Upping, for some love.

[Spekz.]

Up.

[Soule]

saved for feed.

[Soul Slayer]

I've written a piece on marriage, the set up is in a chapel and the poem is made up of the wedding vows. So i liked this a lot. Your 2 styles of writing were evident but you combined well together. It had a few abstract lines and the meat in the emotion. There was a lot of originality and creativity in this which i reckon made it soooo fresh. I liked both because there is a lot of truth in what you wrote. From nerves to flash back.... Thanks for the read you guys

[Addict]

Saved for feed....








Not really, But jesus, Write enough??? Damn. I started thinking id skip some of it! lmao.


Spekz, For a second i thought this was going to be a back and forth piece from a bride and groom with you and Abiona and that you were the bride, But i was wrong, Lmao. But your part was very nice, Alot of creative pictures in there. Really made me feel like i was her, Mainly,

Church Bells
Startle the butterflies
Birthed in an empty stomach.
Anticipation stirred my blood,
Hands shook,
Knees cripple,
And then by no mistake,
An angel,
Cast a glow,
I simply couldn’t resist

That made me feel like i was either her or i was watching her. Really good part man.


Abiona, You are a very creative woman, I liked your part just as well as Spekz, Both of you flowed well with one another like maybe you guys ARE married or something. Or planning on it atleast. You matched Spekz level of imagery, Mainly in

My prince
holding my future
within the caress of his hands
my song
upon the curves of his lips
inside I turn and twist
to violins
strings pulling notes of forever
from deep within my soul


That part made even my heart melt... And im heartless!



There was alot of passion in this, You guys made it really show her point of view on the "Best day of her life" as some would say.
I really loved the end too,

Do you take her to be your lawfully wedded wife
I Do – as passionately as words can express.
Do you take him to be your lawfully wedded husband.
I do - until my beating heart must rest.


This was really great, Very beautiful read. Good piece guys.




Btw, Hit me up.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ld-389637.html

[Cody Nash]

I breathe your kisses
and understand what love's about.

^hot damn, lines like this were EVERYWHERE in this motherfucker. this was the coolest wedding piece I've ever seen lol. I loved it. everything was just so perfect as a wedding should be portrayed every single time someone is married. you both had a vibe going on and blended very well. ESPECIALLY in the ending. I loved how both of you went back and forth as if in conversation... Abiona, you just never cease to impress me in your pieces... each one has a special feel to it and you cover every aspect without missing a beat... and Spekz? I'm so glad to see how far you've come in writing... it was the diaries at first, when we were all small time writers with potential... now it's this, big time writing expressing a full blown talent... a great poem. both of you did WELL to say the least. thanks again for the read.



- Nash

[Spoken Deity]

I personally, sense i'm getting married in 4 months, connected with this piece. Like, the way this was protrayed was perfect. The imagery coming from btoh writers was more than flawless. You both had original concepts, random abstract images and at the same time, made the images accessable. It was all very deep and def made you stop and breath a few times. Everything else from structure to other devices were good. This deserves the nom for sure.

[Soul Slayer]

done.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-390070.html

[Alphaeus]

Ok this was sexual,
Never read a piece on marriage where two writers connected so well and empowered each other like you two.
I liked how at the end you blended by dropping one or two lines and mixing them up.

Spekz, you did a great job here, really started the piece off well. I really liked your description and attention to detail; you brought the scene to life with your words.
Language was great and really suited the piece, your play on words at times made and kept things interesting,

Church Bells
Startle the butterflies
Birthed in an empty stomach.
Anticipation stirred my blood,
Hands shook,
Knees cripple,

Here's an example of what I mean,
I liked things you did with your piece, very clever.

Abiona you kept things going nicely, you really moved the piece forward and stayed on point like Spekz. Again I liked your language; it really suited the concept of the piece,
your writing style is perfect for the topic of this piece.
You put me in the story with you attention to detail and great imagery.

my song
upon the curves of his lips
inside I turn and twist
to violins
strings pulling notes of forever
from deep within my soul

I enjoyed these types of lines from you, really well worded and thought out.
Again as I said you Spekz, you were clever with your piece and you two came together perfectly. Really nice piece guys, great read.


RTF
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...de-390157.html
Thanks