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Thread: Homage is all about sleight of hand.

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    Homage is all about sleight of hand.

    First of all,
    don't call me a poet
    writer
    scribe
    muse (imagine)
    but possibly asshole

    because I am no different from you (asshole).
    Our only difference is that I paint
    the ugliest self-conscious images of your empty
    heart and tenderly weeping memory
    onto the things,
    places,
    names
    you've forgotten and make you wonder
    in amazement,
    "you fucked that whore too?"

    This is what we are; bar room stools,
    bathroom graffiti, 4 dollar whiskey sours
    and all the tired nights you paid for
    with dignity.

    Broken man, cheer me on this;
    Normally I end my sentences with periods while
    you have yet to learn how to finish
    what you start, but
    this is not how to live life (in parentheses)
    yet we both wake finding
    ourselves with chapters that seem to stretch
    like ink-stained hands for a few
    more letters
    to call it a day.

    Call it an idiom.

    In turn, I hope for you one night
    to tell my story
    with the side of your axe, underneath the bleachers,
    in frat houses through the throaty groans
    of need I say more?
    Make me the fishing trip where I was
    the one to catch the biggest bastard
    in the lake, along with the girl of your dreams
    in each highschool flashback
    and you went all the way as if you wouldn't come back
    to yesterdays which can be coloured-in
    with Xs and at least the alphabet never ends.

    I can be your victory march, the flag raised
    as long as you call it as it is;
    poetry

    because this is me, you, everybody's grandmother
    and that cute, curly haired girl who's
    always by herself at the cafe
    it's all just unscripted when people fall in love
    and grow old and are ugly
    and are lumberjacks
    and realize they aren't
    but maybe they can write.

    I am stealing your life, for I you can call
    thief, motherfucker, B-grade actor
    failed tree-cutter
    and likely,
    poet.

    But you're still an asshole and I feel I owe it to the world
    to put it in a poem.
    Last edited by spokenoh; July 25th, 2010 at 07:12 PM
    can I kick it?

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    Re: Homage is all about sleight of hand.

    This was great, read like a poetic rant. lol I wasn't too keen on the topic itself but on the way you conveyed your message. It was nicely worded also. If I had to pick faults it would be consistency, I thought that you had some really cool stanza's and some that were just okay by the standard you set with the rest in my opinion. I enjoyed it though. Favourite lines were;

    This is what we are; bar room stools,
    bathroom graffiti, 4 dollar whiskey sours
    and all the tired nights you paid for
    with dignity.
    Loved the bathroom graffiti image, and emotion was strong and present throughout. Nice work. Nominated for HoF.
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    Re: Homage is all about sleight of hand.

    Normally I end my sentences with periods while
    you have yet to learn how to finish
    what you start

    you son of a bitch
    murder murder

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