CHAMP: WK 6: Professor Frost(4-1) vs. illuminate(3-0) [Frost Wins]

[OG Maestro]

CHAMP MATCH,
WINNER BECOMES THE HW CHAMPION OF THE SS LEAGUE!
@Professor Frost @illuminate.

Topic
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"Growth occurs everywhere"

Create your own verse using the given image-quote.
(Do not let the quote nor the obvious image implementations dictate your writing 100%. Step outside the box with this.)

Check ins due on Thursday by 11:59PM
Verses are due on Saturday by 11:59PM
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Goodluck!

[OG Maestro]

I project air waves that stamp ears like an amp,
With an unorthodox stance, that's the mark of a champ

Check check.

[Know-It-All]

i hate this topic....

[OG Maestro]

All the good leaders are removed or killed for removing the warm blanket of ignorance & comfort that comes from it

The Imprisonment of Charles Ruben:
Story of a man whom was removed but came back as a leader
by Professor Frost


“Any last words?”, said Judge James Harding

The convict replied with a query, “Yes...have you all grown?...

Hello everyone. My name is Charles Ruben/ I come before you NOT serving multitudes of life sentences, but lives I sentenced & ruined/, doing/ murders I committed during my youth, when/ -- children are stuck inside poverty stricken nations/, we are adopted into lifestyles that we can not control/. These lifestyles can strike stakes of sinful temptations/ that are menacing & disorderly clocked in our soul/. We could trip & cry or climb on an incline & find time to survive/. Where’s God when you’ve got a TEC-9 pointed at your at your dome for a dime/? And the disgusting rot of death’s scent has aligned to arrive/?..


Have you all grown?”, he asked again, stronger than the first, His voice blasted an emission of hungered thirst


We..are.…. diamonds in the rough, designed to get past this
Glasses, engineer eyesight for tough, refined patches
Latches, opened our opticals -- resigned scratch-less
With views so clear we culturally redefined masses

Tear this freeverse's biology, because this platinum and gold soil never came cheap
Their lip’s reverse psychology -- is when they told us innocents had to be slain and to sow what we reap
The majority never could control the elite, whenever they patrolled we would just uphold & retreat
Our child lives were a lease, they cajoled it to crease, when we were the ones that should hold the receipt
They resold scold & caprice till it stained on our teeth, what we hated, we had to eat, when we prayed we had to weep
I had just learned to withhold the toll's peace by each piece......before the rage started to remold onto me

THEN SUDDENLY….THAT GOD DAMN BLOODRUSH HAD STOLEN MY SEAT
THEY ROLLED IN REPEAT, WE WATCHED AS LIVES SLOWED AND DEPLETE
SURGING ADRENALINE AND BLOODLUST HAD BOILED OVER TO KEEP-

Our blackened bruised hearts helplessly condoled in deceit,
We reached a crime peak that prophets never could peep
Better to keep, these secrets bind below sheets & never to sleep
And if we should ever have the 'ungrateful' endeavor to speak?
Shit...Might as well slumber in silence with heaters to throw a spark
A couple llamas & eagles. That in emergencies, inspire Noah’s Arc
ICGs & MPs were each handed to us like mics to Emcees, we were still counting 1 2 3s
Spraying canteens of gasoline to flames we had secrete, these shots rose over 1 hundred degrees
The sandlot's box was frozen solid in the streets, so, it was more of a tundra that competes-
For every scarce resource, there’s a bunch of defeat with a sickening surplus of oncoming creeps

“Fuck these tears…”
-Mild reaction happened as gasps began to erupt-
Fuck this fears..."
-He felt his attorney give his arm a grasp full of touch-
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AND FUCK JUGGLING DEATH’S GRIM REGRETFUL YEARS!!!!!!!”
-The Judge banged his gavel, guards escorted him out in a rush

His chains shook, like dying within babies in the hands of a bad handler
His change took spike, crying in sin & fading with echos of sad banter
Charles looked over his shoulder with pain's alcoholic proof stinging his eyes
The venom of ignorance denied the truth & denounced it as lies-

I’m a curse that was birthed, but no revert or reverse for this burst of a verse, no rehearse; I RE-SURGE-
THESE WORDS IN WILL TO DISPERSE, & INSTILL COMMERCE WHETHER IT HURTS-
ME. THEY DOUBT ME, SHOUT TO ME, THAT THEY COULD DO WITHOUT ME
I’LL DIE A FOREST OF JUSTICE THAT STILL GREW WHEN THEY CAST ME OUT SEA!!!
AHHHHHH!!!! WAKE UP AND SMELL THE EFFORTLESS EFFLORESCENCE!
THIS WILL BE THE DAY A MAN BLOOMED, TO SUCCEED IN LIFE -- ISN'T THAT THE ESSENCE!?

-Tears trickle tenderly down the cheek wounds of his enemy. They anticipated the violently end of he-
Whom displayed photosynthetic words, compassionately. The bastion of greed was banished backwardly-

“There is a new age of infinite growth, where spoken voice’s sunlight is hope...I have been astound
...this is an age that I’m glad to have seen”, said Judge James Harding, humbly

-The jurors and court officials hushed in muzzled silenced, baffled to be-

Grown.

It was too late for Charles to defend his actions, he accepted all charges; not challenging them in court contractions. They wanted him to drown in the deep depths of death’s abyss as a death-wish. He thought his words could plant perspective seeds; not worrying if he was at best, missed. He somehow vanished from his jail's blue cell. No traces of his body nor excursion, yet how his clothing fell was a tale to tell. Sometimes I wondered if his legacy had plundered. And the ship cruising upwards to the water’s surface was favored, with the new-found growth that from the ocean’s floor, he savored.
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[Know-It-All]

True story...last verse was changed to reflect what happened today...you can have it all. RIP...

Blossom
by illuminate.

He wasn't much of a child, a small kid, he loved to be wild
soft touch he smiled but in fifth grade his clutch was reviled
She was new in school picked on, he gave her flack for her brace
he attacked her and chased, she turned slapped him in his face
they both want to go back to the place, it was easy then....
they came together again as one on a July day in the breezy wind
her stomach was queasy when he told her he wanted to be with her
while sitting with tea and dessert, with glee and a spur
she jumped and kissed him,he promised, he would never be leavin her
he'd never be a peeved cur, he's never spoke an aggrieved slur
they fit like a glove, though there was noone above her glow
she said lets move to a farm upstate, so our love will grow
they'll come to know harm of hate, they will be safe and sound
layin down together like tired children after playing around
in an erotic way...they tangle there bodies in a quixotic fray
Addicted like narcotic, they are lost in eachother hypnotic gaze
an exotic sway......He wouldn't share this L but her....
love was never rolled so tightly laced with giggles, under covers...
.....as they toke the smoke out of eachothers burning hearts
far from the learning start, they explore they're yearning part
The love between them grew beautifully like an artist with acumen for art
there love came together, all balled up into the shape of a human heart



The love grew within them...
...untill fully its compiled
He looked beguilded as...
...she said love grew, shes with child
She was scared to death...
....when he slowly aired his breath
and said he was so happy...
....he could share in the mess"

4 months later, he faced her cries about her ever expanding waist size
He kept telling her she's not fat, she said they were unbased lies
she would keep a furious fight, she was in pain, she had serious spite
like it was his fault, he spent various nights on the couch in a curious plight
He loved her to death and was there, day light through gray skies
She loved him too, hormonal as her weight rise, she sees him paint lies
about her being not fat, through lots of spats, he never fought back
He just smiled and brought back, A Big Mac which she gnawed at
She couldn't be happier, she has a man who loves her,a soon to be child
Though her vag will be loose for awhile, she can't wait to spoon and be wild
she misses there bodies entwined like poppies and vines
in her amazon jungle...soon she'll be able to drink coffee and wines
the fat would go away and stop showing her veins and start going away
she was fertilized like farmers sowing her plains, now come the growing pains
the next day, She laid still in bed, her underwear was filled with red
They willed ahead to the ER, an array of thoughts killed his head
Doctors rushed in to the room as the blood gushed from her womb
His mind is brushed full of doom, he waited emotional, crushed with gloom
He was pacing in the waiting room, wondering what all this would cost him
Then the Doctor said with a glower "we lost him, you're love's flower won't blossom

[Nohbody]

iight. . . . . so

First up is frost.

Once i put all the fragments together, you actually illustrated a nice story here. The vocabulary was really well done. The strongest point to this piece was that it kept me curious and sort of led me in from one section to the next. But i have my dislikes as well. Starting with the flow. In some areas, i got it.... in some areas I didn't, in some areas, i think the format made it hard to get, and some areas, i think the flow was shaky. Especially in smaller sections where you tried sneaking in these odd long bar formats such as

"I come before you NOT serving multitudes of life sentences, but lives I sentenced & ruined"

I didn't particularly like the presentation of how everything was scattered about. Im sure in your mind, it was to give it that movie slide feel, but I simply found it distracting. I like being challenged in understanding things like metaphors, and twists. . . but leaving a paragraph style like the section at the end could really hinder your work depending on whos reading. The first time through, i thought it was a small paragraph, more of a dialogue that wrapped the story up, then at second glance I realized the lines were actually a verse in paragraph format.

To throw what im saying into better perspective, I really enjoyed the content. I liked the wording a lot, I loved the depth of the story. . really strong areas there . . my issue was more about aesthetics and how it was structured. Almost feels like you put as much time into trying to figure out how to place everything (change color formats, place the extra image, resize this section, bold this, italic that ). . . as you put into simply writing the verse and giving it to us. In the end of the day, its not the appearance we are judging, its the verse we are judging.

illuminate -

Another emotional verse this week. An o.k. story. . I wasn't overly excited about it. A much easier to follow structure, and had a much less sporadic pace then Frosts verse did. The flow good, very consistent, and weaved through a really clean rhyme scheme. My issue with this verse would be more the wording. You gave us emotional lines, but the wording just didn't lift those impactful lines to where they really needed to be.

You made the comment that you wasn't really feeling the concept, And honestly, i think this verse is evidence that you struggled with it. Seems like the story was a bit of a reach toward the actual topic. Everything was good, but never did i get the sense that you were completely there with your piece this week.

I have to give my vote to Frost

Better execution the topic, more creative, more entertaining. . .

[The Great Father]

The Great Father Speaks!

This was truly a clash of titanic verses. This transcended "championship". It has ascended into the air of all-time greatness.

The Great Father's official vote...

Hall of Fame

[Soule]

Yeah, I dunno, frost, I really wasn't feeling this after a second (and fully awake) read. The structure, first and foremost. I've tried using structures/styles similar to this and it always backfired on me in battles too. Which is why I stick with the simple stanza style. It's all over the place, if you're going to tell a story or background info on the situation then you should do it in a stanza instead of a short story paragraph. That's how I look at it on a personal level at least. Quotations isn't an issue, I do it a lot. Your actual stanza were pretty basic. Not a very creative (or entertaining) rhyme scheme. Wording was simple and smooth. Felt like the second stanza kinda dragged on a little too much. I dunno man. Wasn't a fan of the concept / direction either. Don't think this verse is as great as some are claiming it is. From a personal and experience perspective at least. I'm sorry man.

Illuminated, first verse starts off. I feel like you kinda jumped around instead of keeping a smooth story which is a big no no for storytelling. Wording fell apart a couple times and your rhyme scheme dumbed down a few times. But overall you kept a decent rhyme scheme and pretty good wording. Just had weak moments. Breakdown was a nice addition. Felt it was worded near perfection, second verse comes in and I felt like it kept the story a little better but the wording and rhyme scheme was weaker because you went straight from the heart and pain rather than polishing it up. I'm a much bigger fan of the structure and style you used than I am if your opponents and I felt your story was more emotional as well. Just on a technical aspect, weaker than I am used to from you.

Overall, both guys tried. I'm glad Illuminate showed after everything he's going through. I decided everybody is right and the show must go on. So. With that being said. I've got to give it to illuminate for the more emotional / easier to follow read.

Vote illuminate

[Fresh]

Frost - Good job at attacking the topic bro, you told a decent story that kept me wanting to read more. Although the structure was weird, I didn't have trouble finding the flow for the most part. Decent use of multi's and technical's though, thats for sure. Nothing astounding, but decent.

illuminate - I'd hate to say it but I wasn't feeling this verse, I've seen you attack topics alot harder than this. Obviously if this is a true story, you've gone through some fucked up shit so I'm sorry to hear that. Maybe that was affecting you, because I felt your use of wording was sub par and your rhyme scheme didn't make me lift my head at all until the very last 3 - 4 bars.

Creativity - Frost
Imagery - illuminate
technical's - Frost
Metaphors - Frost I felt frost used more complex metaphor, and they were also more abundant
Structure - illuminate
Rhyme - Frost Frost had some sick multi's and some decent internals

I have to go with frost on this, he created a more original, enjoyable concept and he took it for a ride. Decent battle here, but frost just edged on a few more categories than illuminate.

v/Frost

[Stranger]

@Professor Frost
Tear this freeverse's biology, because this platinum and gold soil never came cheap
Their lip’s reverse psychology -- is when they told us innocents had to be slain and to sow what we reap
The majority never could control the elite, whenever they patrolled we would just uphold & retreat
Our child lives were a lease, they cajoled it to crease, when we were the ones that should hold the receipt
Shit...Might as well slumber in silence with heaters to throw a spark
A couple llamas & eagles. That in emergencies, inspire Noah’s Arc

I'm definately suprised here, I heard you didn't have much experience in topicals, and this doesn't show that hear, and even then your verse didn't seem like you had limited experience, my only complaints was that your structure was all over the place at times and it was hard to keep a definate flow when reading your verse, one paragraph was short, the other was long, some was stretched beyond legible at times, but despite that your verse was a solid read from beginning to end


@Illuminate
She was new in school picked on, he gave her flack for her brace
he attacked her and chased, she turned slapped him in his face
they fit like a glove, though there was noone above her glow
she said lets move to a farm upstate, so our love will grow
in an erotic way...they tangle there bodies in a quixotic fray
Addicted like narcotic, they are lost in eachother hypnotic gaze
she would keep a furious fight, she was in pain, she had serious spite
like it was his fault, he spent various nights on the couch in a curious plight
she misses there bodies entwined like poppies and vines
in her amazon jungle...soon she'll be able to drink coffee and wines
He was pacing in the waiting room, wondering what all this would cost him
Then the Doctor said with a glower "we lost him, you're love's flower won't blossom

[b]This was a dope verse here, the farm upstate / love will grow wordplay was the best bar in you verse, you also had an emotional twist at the end that captured this topic nicely IMO, your verse was also a comfortable read, I like to see that[b]

Overall:

This was a close battle here, on one hand you had professor frost who had a nice verse but at times didn't seem to confortable with the topic, in the other hand you had illuminate that captured the topic more times that once, and seemed really confortable writing about it, its rare to see a topical with a real emotional twist like Illuminate had, and I think thats what this is going to come down to, I got Illuminate taking this for having a more powerful verse

V/Illuminate

[143]

Fuck

PF
Drop was ill content wise. The way you came at the topic was definitely different. I mean you made little hues of it shine brighter that the meat of the topic which gave this undertone that pushed the envelope of the verse. Not taking account of the structure of it all because even though some of it was hard to catch the rhythm of it, the word choices felt like it was of a poetical statement by the abstractness and the misdirected representation that you had. Quotes and question in the drop further pushed that feeling. A cool feeling but not one that wasn't distracting.

Ill
Yes, emotion. it was there and I was wanting to get into it. You have a uncanny skill of storytelling because you use it to paint these pictures that are vivid as fuck. Artistry is definitely highlighted here along with a strong base of technical applications. The emotional strings were pulled but felt that some parts let go of them which didn't give me a breather to recoup but more of a push pull to find the inner source of the emotional arms in this. This needed to keep up the tension to that build up where the emotional strings snap. You had it there but once it got close I felt that the writing took a turn and let go.

I got to give this to PF

[OG Maestro]

Let's get some votes in here guys
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[PTheBeast]

i dont wanna be takin the wrong way on this. i really liked both drops. but from a judges standpoint, for me it was a landslide. frost outmatched him all across the board except for emotion and imagery (two of my favorite aspects). not sayin i was overly excited by frost subject, i felt he made a much more creative, yet still legit use of the topic. another aspect is flow. i felt illuminate's verse was a little more cleanly written i enjoyed reading frost verse more from a techincal aspect. i had to slow down a little more than i did for illuminate but once i caught on that helped set the tone even more. it felt llke the speaker was projecting himself in the manor of making a speech. this is where i felt he started to pull away because his straight foward approach and lack of emotion helped his piece just as much as illuminat's emotion did his. if not more. goin back to the topic. besides crativity, i felt frost's verse had more of an overall clinching use of the topic whereas illuminate's was more of a recurring theme. not that it was necessarily a bad thing. just went with my personal preference. aside from that the only clear area i can give it to illuminate would be imagery. he kept the scene vivid in my head the entire time.

again. i didnt mean landside as in it wasnt a close battle i just feel frost edged it out in mutiple areas to where it made my overall scoring much easier than individual areas

[PTheBeast]

didnt want to edit v frost

[OG Maestro]

@Split Eight @Tropical

We need more votes in here guys