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    in God you trust.





    a cold December
    I'm sleepwalking, coma locution
    clenched fist wrapped with the holy grail &
    ensuing the blood of several a gentleman.
    44. shots to the diaphragm
    & you bleed out mulled wine
    - I allow you to be free so I can conduct a mass in these streets.
    carousing your intestines
    - around and round we go
    your sinew grinding opposite my molars
    - they become last weeks nightmare.


    it's the glitter quiver, the disco-ball in the background
    providing the hapless filler to the ballet
    of this city.
    It's lavender perfume at nights peak, it's twist of fortune
    august white.
    this city is my conception.
    it's in my blood and I'll entice it
    love it,
    make out with its very existence.
    it's the reason I'm here tonight wearing batik
    a tie, dense to my throat
    stood here sporting mistletoe cufflinks with curly toed slippers & antlers
    and a smile to mock-up soft furnishings
    on wet pavements.
    - I sit viewing Christmas eve
    and it's on fire.


    It's like I'm scaling the world
    a balloon tugging my heartstring
    - idle within the radius of your heart
    every electrical pep shows a footprint
    I hold close.
    It's a point to prove
    a transition that I father, your name under my breast for a logic greater than acclaim.
    The earth constantly revolves, and so on some eve
    we shall be close
    expose your heart
    and your mind
    so I can unearth
    you.


    walking, talking, spitting, fucking
    specimen of cowardice
    might I be...
    Standing tall on a snow angels bisected wings.
    I'm chained to an anchor,
    it's bolt, implanted through my Adams apple
    scratching like spiders trailing on church windows passed midnight.
    I walk underneath the bridge
    hiding, from his light.




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    Re: in God you trust.

    I could quote a lot of this. I find your writing lovely Memoir.
    I especially like how you blend words I don’t expect, and the way
    the effect is streamline and soft, not harsh or choppy.

    “…44. shots to the diaphragm
    & you bleed out mulled wine
    - I allow you to be free so I can conduct a mass in these streets.
    carousing your intestines
    - around and round we go
    your sinew grinding opposite my molars
    - they become last weeks nightmare…”

    “…this city is my conception.
    it's in my blood and I'll entice it
    love it,
    make out with its very existence.
    it's the reason I'm here tonight wearing batik…”


    "... - I sit viewing Christmas eve
    and it's on fire...."

    "... we shall be close
    expose your heart
    and your mind
    so I can unearth
    you..."

    "... I'm chained to an anchor,
    it's bolt, implanted through my Adams apple
    scratching like spiders trailing on church windows passed midnight..."



    I like the flow of this piece. The imagery is beautiful.
    You have a real talent for poetry memoir.
    There isn’t anything I could say I didn’t like
    so imo, this is a great read with awesome descriptions and
    great story backing it up.

    Great Read.

    Thank you.


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    Re: in God you trust.

    Thanks Emily. A bit of a different style for me.

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