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youre out my klass, hands will put the heat to all ya metal and title shots
cause if u presented him a match ..then i must be striking while the irons hot
should be in the HOF for writers block, pummel this pulizter prize fighter
but you aint built for rings, and u'll never strike me as that type writer
just a lime lighter, probably write i'm a whiner n chat flips this dude is usin
so i dunno whats worse, that you'll still use them or you losing to him
have ya fluids oozin, give u a box of shots, not the type to spar with ya
put one in the chamber and cap this jew before 10 ..happy early barmitzva
u aint a hard hitter, and i'll put all my bread and cheese that u fold cuz...
only time u seen hands on ice ...is when im fist feeding you with cold cuts
sorry for rush, no time today
U get fuk’d when I slide on the glove and aim the snub
Have ya fam Watch me practice with Hands like a virgin who aint waiting for love
Bombz took u out like a cheap date, left that eye painted
Way Hands was left speechless, you’d think he was learning sign language
Or uppercuts will lift you, don’t need the 40 to help me
Soo when I make your back drop, wont be no one posing for selfies
Kimbo slice punch u in the nose while yo fans is watchin
One shot will have ya eyes bulging out without the snap chat option
Show up to ya door like jimmy johns for what you say bro
But The sub that I pull out the bag wont come with extra pickles and mayo
Slowhands - firstly I can tell you're an older head, you actually flow as well as punch, which is rare these days it seems. Wordplay was decent throughout, I think you coulda worded some of your concepts better to help the delivery. Some of these bars coulda been haymakers but lost a little impact like the Barmitzva punch. Couple of misses for me in there. Favourite punch was definitely the closer which I really liked, opener just behind that one. This was tight, I'd like to see you when you're not rushed for time.
KnowP - Flow is awkward tbh, I've seen the short-long, short-long thing before and it only really works if you maintain the rhythm with the pause and I think you miss that a couple places here. A lot of people don't feel weaponry/gun bars, but for me I kinda like them - takes me back to years ago when that was 80% of what you saw online, and I like your closer for that. Again, delivery could be better on some of the punches but in general it was solid. I dig the sign language, snap chat option too was nice.
Overall - Slowhands raps better, but I think some of his punches missed a lil here. KnowP has poorer technique, but for me the punches were more direct and he landed a couple more. This was the closest battle I've seen so far, but for me KnowP's punches just edged it so my vote - [b]KnowP[/p] Props to both dudes though I enjoyed this one.
youre out my klass, hands will put the heat to all ya metal and title shots
cause if u presented him a match ..then i must be striking while the irons hot
>> Okay opener.
should be in the HOF for writers block, pummel this pulizter prize fighter
but you aint built for rings, and u'll never strike me as that type writer
>> Decent.
just a lime lighter, probably write i'm a whiner n chat flips this dude is usin
so i dunno whats worse, that you'll still use them or you losing to him
>>wasnt feelin it
have ya fluids oozin, give u a box of shots, not the type to spar with ya
put one in the chamber and cap this jew before 10 ..happy early barmitzva
>>Dope!
u aint a hard hitter, and i'll put all my bread and cheese that u fold cuz...
only time u seen hands on ice ...is when im fist feeding you with cold cuts
>>Okay closer
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U get fuk’d when I slide on the glove and aim the snub
Have ya fam Watch me practice with Hands like a virgin who aint waiting for love
>>Fiiiiiiire opener!!!!
Bombz took u out like a cheap date, left that eye painted
Way Hands was left speechless, you’d think he was learning sign language
>>DOPE nameplay!!!
Or uppercuts will lift you, don’t need the 40 to help me
Soo when I make your back drop, wont be no one posing for selfies
>>Or nah
Kimbo slice punch u in the nose while yo fans is watchin
One shot will have ya eyes bulging out without the snap chat option
>>Wack punch
Show up to ya door like jimmy johns for what you say bro
But The sub that I pull out the bag wont come with extra pickles and mayo
>> Weak closer!
MY VOTE: KNOWP (hands had 1 haymaker and KP had 2 haymakers that were the strongest in this battle)
Bombz took u out like a cheap date, left that eye painted
Way Hands was left speechless, you’d think he was learning sign language
Or uppercuts will lift you, don’t need the 40 to help me
Soo when I make your back drop, wont be no one posing for selfies
Kimbo slice punch u in the nose while yo fans is watchin
One shot will have ya eyes bulging out without the snap chat option
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youre out my klass, hands will put the heat to all ya metal and title shots
cause if u presented him a match ..then i must be striking while the irons hot
should be in the HOF for writers block, pummel this pulizter prize fighter
but you aint built for rings, and u'll never strike me as that type writer
close battle both had bars i thought were tough and hit, but i got to go wit know
his verse hit a little harder and he had line of the battle with the snap bar, liked both verses tho
could go either way. good read.
SLOWHANDS:
have ya fluids oozin, give u a box of shots, not the type to spar with ya
put one in the chamber and cap this jew before 10 ..happy early barmitzva
THIS WAS AN OK LINE, BUT INDIRECT AND A FALSE PERSONAL
u aint a hard hitter, and i'll put all my bread and cheese that u fold cuz...
only time u seen hands on ice ...is when im fist feeding you with cold cuts
THIS WAS DECENT
Vs
KNOW P:
U get fuk’d when I slide on the glove and aim the snub
Have ya fam Watch me practice with Hands like a virgin who aint waiting for love
THIS READS AWKWARDLY, BUTITS OK.
Bombz took u out like a cheap date, left that eye painted
Way Hands was left speechless, you’d think he was learning sign language
DECENT NAMEPLAY
average battle here. Two Ok bars a piece. KNOW P had the strongest material overall IMO.
Vote know p
Kill a bitch and kill her kid
all depends what her nigga did
-herbo
youre out my klass, hands will put the heat to all ya metal and title shots
cause if u presented him a match ..then i must be striking while the irons hot
Light opener
should be in the HOF for writers block, pummel this pulizter prize fighter
but you aint built for rings, and u'll never strike me as that type writer
not feelin this
just a lime lighter, probably write i'm a whiner n chat flips this dude is usin
so i dunno whats worse, that you'll still use them or you losing to him
no
have ya fluids oozin, give u a box of shots, not the type to spar with ya
put one in the chamber and cap this jew before 10 ..happy early barmitzva
cool
u aint a hard hitter, and i'll put all my bread and cheese that u fold cuz...
only time u seen hands on ice ...is when im fist feeding you with cold cuts
light jab @ best
vs
U get fuk’d when I slide on the glove and aim the snub
Have ya fam Watch me practice with Hands like a virgin who aint waiting for love
why you practice with him? get the job done. miss
Bombz took u out like a cheap date, left that eye painted
Way Hands was left speechless, you’d think he was learning sign language
dope
Or uppercuts will lift you, don’t need the 40 to help me
Soo when I make your back drop, wont be no one posing for selfies
jab @ best
Kimbo slice punch u in the nose while yo fans is watchin
One shot will have ya eyes bulging out without the snap chat option
not a fan of this. set up didnt tie in at all and this seemed lazy
Show up to ya door like jimmy johns for what you say bro
But The sub that I pull out the bag wont come with extra pickles and mayo
lol, basic bar here. light jab
Overall - nto a good battle. felt both rushed. both had potential concepts just rushed their shit. got both tied in quotes knowp had the harder misses.
v/knowp
P
Bombz took u out like a cheap date, left that eye painted
Way Hands was left speechless, you’d think he was learning sign language
Or uppercuts will lift you, don’t need the 40 to help me
Soo when I make your back drop, wont be no one posing for selfies
Kimbo slice punch u in the nose while yo fans is watchin
One shot will have ya eyes bulging out without the snap chat option
Show up to ya door like jimmy johns for what you say bro
But The sub that I pull out the bag wont come with extra pickles and mayo
Pretty consistent nice similies creativity
Slow
Like the opener and i feel u have general ideas choosing concepts just displaying them wording wise is hurting you here.
V/KnowP pretty comfortable win just overall better verse impact as far as concepts go
@KnowP wins with a hard ko
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