10 LINES
DUE: TOMMOROW 3:30
NO FEEDING
HATE VOTES
ALL THAT OTHER BULLSHIT.........
...LET'S BLAZE!...
Kwizikz
~BrOoK*BuRnS~
10 LINES
DUE: TOMMOROW 3:30
NO FEEDING
HATE VOTES
ALL THAT OTHER BULLSHIT.........
...LET'S BLAZE!...
" Have you ever danced with the devil under the pale moonlight?"
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aight let's blaze........
//...show ya face on boards...disgrace ya CREW AND SH!T...
leaving BRUISED, U B!TCH...paranoid...like "misplacing murderous clowns" Kwizikz is "LOSING IT"...
//...deface ya mucous membranes till you're SLAIN AND BATTERED...
yeah ya NAME IS SHATTERED...this kid's punches "swing and miss" like "AIMLESS BATTERS"...
//...its anonymous hits to your organs, result is drained fluids,
ya brains foolish,battlin me? i guess u didnt know any better like foreign exchange students...
//...test the schemes my text is mean and this kid's not ready for the LABOR of my DELIVERY like PREGNANT TEENS
//...killing is business watch as i quickly slap on a suit,ur raps trash..honest dude only MC's you ever ate is floating in Alphabet Soups...
//...kwizik's a fighter leaves from boxing standing hard-
marks landing scars and he's not "ALL MON" like jamaican faggots to milk chocolate candy bars!!!-(*all mon=almond*)-
" Have you ever danced with the devil under the pale moonlight?"
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ha ha ha....did I agree to this battle? Dude's confused..
Oh well..
Brooke Burns? Nice name…Respect to anyone who can live
Wit that name & not get beat up *cough*…Check….
Brooke? never heard of him so this guy must be at least half weak,
So let K be the first in the line to start of this herb’s losin streak.
Dude is aimless, Punches are brainless, Why the fuck don’t U learn
“Brooke” Versus a REAL Mc leaves this chump completely “Burned”
Cos basically this site is for Mc’s, Sorry mate, U just don’t fit
Your punches are plain weak, while mine cut Brooke to bits
Droppin hopeless verses? Ha Ha, check how this guy fell & bombed
He’s confused, calls me Daddy..cos he’s completely been sonned
So basically, U finish second place in a helpless 2 horse Race
Dude thinks he’s John Travolta, How I leave him “De-faced”
(Face-off film..duh)
G'luck partner...
Boom tick its Brix!
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uppin for the 1st tim e U crazyzee Mo Fo......
Yee hah...I eat squirrels
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Vote = Kwizikz
Pretty decent verse.. personal an to the point.. most punches were effective enuff.. flowed ok.. structure made it easy to follow..
Brook.. get rid of the //'s an seperatin ya bars like that.. an stickin 'Kwizikz' once or twice in the verse DID NOT make this personal.. alot of played concepts made for a vague diss every few lines but u looked lost.. dont jus stick random punches together.. get a flow goin.. blah.. ignore this advice at ur peril.
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Yo i got to go wit Kwiziks cuz his punches and flow and i don't have to explain cuz it ain't in the rules
uppin 4 a 2nd time...
drop a link & I'll retyrn tha
vote.
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Brook-I enjoyed ur verse alot better the second time I read it but it still had some blah lines, they jus didnt make sense to me. Structure was pretty bad, flow not bad, I did quite enjoy ur verse though, u had some witty lines in there. Also some played in there though. Work on structure (stretched lines), flow and consistency wiv punches. Also more personals.
Kwiz- yeah I enjoyed this verse, witty lines. especially liked the first an last lines.U came original which I liked. I think u had a few fillers in there, but still fewer than Brook. Good structure and flow, this was the big difference between u two.This was the best line in ur verse, probably of the battle actually:
So basically, U finish second place in a helpless 2 horse Race
Dude thinks he’s John Travolta, How I leave him “De-faced
vote=Kwiz
Cuz flow an structure were better, also more original
Jus my opp guys
aiight......nice battle..
brook-nice verse....ur flow was good, punches hit but not hard, strucuture was fucked a lil but it still flowed n read well, n nice multies...the only flaws u had was the "//" thing, it makes ur verse look sloppy n the lengthy bars threw off ur flow a lil..but beside that, had a nice verse n lines that made me laugh..
fav line from brook-//...killing is business watch as i quickly slap on a suit,ur raps trash..honest dude only MC's you ever ate is floating in Alphabet Soups...made me laugh^^
kwiz-also had a nice verse, a nice flow, punchlines hit harder than brooks, n came original........i dont think they were any flaws in your verse except for the fillers...but beside that...homie had a nice verse
fav line from k-So basically, U finish second place in a helpless 2 horse Race
Dude thinks he’s John Travolta, How I leave him “De-faced
line made me go ohh n laugh a lil^^
overall-good battle but since i enjoyed kwizs more n saw he had harder hits n more originality........my vote go to kwiz
v/kwiz
If yall can hit up my sig n vote on those 2 battles cuz i wanna close em..jus need like 2-3 more votes...be much appreciated;thanx
Peace
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uppin for a 4th time.......
as i SED LEAVE A LINK & U'll get a reply
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Alright battle.
BrookBurns - you streached your lines a little bit. Your Flow was alright. I couldent understand what you where trying to get across some of the time. Work on landing you punches, just saying his name dosent mean you threw in personals. No multies.
Kwizikz - I liked your wordplay, very creative and original verse, i was feeling your verse more your punches landed harder and you had a lil better flow than brook. Nice verse just work on making it a bit more enoyfull like add some humour.
Kwizikz had all around Better Structure, was more original, I loved the wordplay... all around nice battle
vote = Kwizikz
Jus my opp guys[/QUOTE]
Return the favour check out one of the battles in my sig and drop an honest vote
Umm...Kwizikz won this with better punches
BrookBurns...Not a bad verse actually...but your lines are mad stretched..even them out...Don't space your bars...and get riff of the // after your lines...Also the "" and CAPS are unecessary. You had some nice concepts but your wording was off which mad the punches weak
Kwizikz....not bad man...you had some OK lines...cut back on the filler..try and make every line a punch.....You showed flashes of wittiness....keep it up...maybe add more creativeness and originality to your punches, metas, personals to give them more emphasis...but the ones you had hit good
Vote=Kwizikz
Please drop an honest vote here..thanks http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=120685
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final uppin for all u crazy bastards....
Gerard said no...
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ok
brook = ya had some ok punches man, i was impressed for a newbie!! but ya lacked hard hittin punches. flow was good and also structure!1 vocab was ok!!
k = you had better punches than, brook and better structure, flow was the same. i thought ya lack in vocab tho!!!
vote= my vote goes to k for the simple fact that he had stronger punches!!
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