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    Impeachment,Political Correctness,-N- Hiprocracy produced

    I'd say it's time for impeachment N political correctness
    N ma main objective, to see they don't get re-elected
    so check it, operation cleanse tha world is ready to begin
    no worry about what god thinks, he's in favor of these sins
    coz crooked governments are tha real terrorists no doubt
    murderring tha mass of people, they pretend they helping out
    N tha United Nations, ain't done shit ta improve relations
    Im losing ma patience, wit all tha precious time that they wasting
    its our own fuckn governments, that we need ta be crushing
    But when tha pressure is applied, they quickly end tha discussion
    its fuckn disgusting, my president is the first one I ain't trusting
    wit his selfish Prime, partner in crime, got me feeling like busting
    they use tha media to paint a picture of confusion
    using force N discarding any form of resolution
    whether signed, or adopted, by administrations
    urging other nations ta offer their own participation
    in what, tha destruction of people they call a homeland threat
    changing federal reserve, into a daily growing debt
    at a rate thats alarming, plus innocent that theyre harming
    sending thousands into battle like bees swarming
    while publicly they seem charming, soft spoken N warm hearted
    are they really that arrogant or just think that were retarded
    yes its time for a change, but fuck peaceful negotiations
    assasination is tha best solution, it creates less complications
    coz this madness will not cease, no peace will be in tha middle east
    violence will only increase, until the evil leaders are deceased
    N hipocracy produced by this so called democracy
    taxes be increasingly costing me, that is why of ma animosity
    the fight be exhausting me, do they wonder why I got hostility
    probably because the cops I pay for don't let me live in tranquility
    they prohibit my ability to provide for my family, are yall feelin me
    Im tired of tha fucked up cards that life just keeps on dealing me
    meanwhile a lifestyle of crime, this time, is appealing N tempting
    don't really want ta cheat or steal, but still my pockets stay empty
    N forty percent of my total paycheck, is to much ta be taxed
    thats no exaggeration at all nigga, those are tha actual facts
    they subtract N extract, from tha wages that I work for, to earn
    but when its time for tax returns, they don't seem all too concerned
    oh yeah they're quick to collect but very slow to cut a check
    N with this kinda standard treatment, what tha fuck they expect?
    respect?

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=151706

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    Uppin..dayum niggas i put effort into this shit

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    okay..uppin

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    i'm goin to try this once more

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    fight the power! lol

    i can see you put effort into this, i can also see that you're at a point now where you're starting to get good at this rap thing. now for the piece...

    the concepts a good ol' fashioned one but it never gets boring. i definately caught the anger in this, especially as you talked about different areas the goverment is fucking us on, you got a few multis in this and they were well-placed, your vocab was basic but it made the piece easier to read. the images were solid as well. a respectable open mic man.

    my only real critiscism is your use of "N" in a big capital instead of and or a small letter, it draws attention from the rest of piece and makes you looks like you're using it a lot.

    keep posting and elavating. and please rep one of my pieces. pzz

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    Thanx man...Uppin

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    Alright Please Give me feedback...Dayum take ya time on sumthin and Nobody pays attention...do a keystyle and everyones a critic

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    It was nice, you clearly meant what you said with that verse. So it was powerful, but it wasn't quite, it didn't have something. It wasn't descriptive enough I think. Things like, 'They pretend they helping' out didn't help either. It might be rap, but you still have to use proper grammar.
    But overall, it was good, it was a nice open mic, keep elevatin

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    ^^^LOL...Okay...Uppin for Critism

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