User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 11 of 11

Thread: Infection - Def Poets

  1. #1
    All Things Must Pass. Issue's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2005
    Location
    Looprevil.
    Age
    36
    Posts
    3,541
    Battle Record
    1-0

    Infection - Def Poets

    INFECTION
    .
    Johnny 6-Feet
    Achilles Research Lab- 7.40am
    I stagger blindly through the corridors, choking on tears
    Behind me, with inhuman moans, my focus of fear
    “God help us!” I’m bleeding heavily now “What have we done?”
    Human greed has murdered us all, our work’s worth seems none
    Peter had tried to steal the virus, a cosmetic creation
    Meant to reverse aging with geometric equations
    But the process wasn’t finished, the vial was untested
    And as it shattered from his foolish grab, bystanders stood breathless
    Tom vomited uncontrollably and fell to his knees
    And you could tell how he bleeds that he’d caught the disease
    Violence erupted, one man snatched a wrench from a desk
    Cracked Peter across the skull, scraped the edge on his chest
    He fell just as Tom rose with a glaze in his eyes
    Not even malice on his features but Satanic pride
    He sank his teeth into another and the process began
    The outbreak of the infection, its was hopeless, I ran
    I slump against a locker, whimpering at the bite marks
    I know I’m dead already, losing my life spark
    I twist the combination, take out my berretta, go figure
    Say a final apology and set off the trigger
    .
    FanTa Zee
    13 Mulberry Drive, 2 Miles East Of The Lab: 11:15
    Beads of sweat still lap my forehead, pillow soaked in perspiration,
    Night of passion left behind us, awake to a new day with a sense of elation,
    Hear a tapping on the window, the frosted glass gives way to day,
    As the curtains are blown backwards, revealing a warped and twisted face,
    He stares with malice in his eyes as he discovers a thirst for blood,
    Frantically scrabbles at the windowsill digging his fingernails into the wood,
    With frenzied fear in my stomach I lean over to shake the wife,
    Thrust her sideways out of the bedroom door, and tell her to run and hide,
    I grab the first thing I can find, tearing the telephone reciever from the wall,
    Hurling it through the glazing, as shards shatter all over the floor,
    He seems to feel no pain, doesn't even flinch as I shout and swear,
    But mumbles incoherently, as if he believed I wasn't there,
    He squeezes himself through the opening, glistening splinters pierce his skin,
    The wind whistling around the bedclothes, whipping my dressing gown about my limbs,
    I shudder with delusion, unable to believe until I hear a scream,
    That hurtles through my body, cold and chilling, from within,
    I hurry down the mottled stairs and through the kitchen door,
    To find my wife in horror, strewn bleeding across the lino floor,
    Three or four of these creatures paw at her as she struggles to escape,
    All breathing hard and heavy, with a sense of foul enjoyment on their face,
    I break my way through the swarm, but can't get to her in time,
    Her blood has run, her time is done, and now there after mine.
    .
    Issue
    Feels Like Home: 21:47
    My legs are limp and lazy, my vision is dim and dazy.
    My mind is going crazy, hazed thoughts overtake me...
    I'm running hastely away from these crazed savages that chase me,
    But running faster into the arms of the amazing pain that awaits me.
    My stomach's turning and burning, spurning volatile vomit...
    My tongue is turning blue and churning suicidal sonnets.
    My larynx is blood red onyx but my eyes are strangely honest,
    My time is like a comets; So strong, so quick. Thick within demonics...
    I rip my lips away with screams at non-existant beings,
    I stutter only verbally, meaning I'm shuddering internally.
    I'm bleeding with such a certainty that energy is so rare to me.
    I'm carefully edging towards shadows that followed...
    Feeling hollow and redeeming sorrow, honestly afraid of tomorrow.
    In this horror I'm weakening and in this torture I'm deepening.
    My soul is seeping and leaking away from my grasp.
    I clasp my hands with meaning to the moments that are my last....
    I am infected.
    .
    .
    .
    .

    Def Poets
    .
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221164
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221336

  2. #2
    TreaZoN sILLable's Avatar
    Join Date
    May 2003
    Location
    Houston, Texas
    Age
    38
    Posts
    5,316
    Battle Record
    15-10
    i feel priviledged to be the first to reply to tha illness.....this piece was remarkable...i am somewhat tired of the zombie craze that has swept tha nation...but this piece was very dope...i loved tha three different views....i think this could have been a little more complete if maybe..djb or K9 put in a fourth verse...having the point of view of the infected..but the infected thats already turned...that point of view i think would have complete this better seein as you had these points of views already...ever yaspect was dope...so i dont really have to go into that...every verse was ill....and this is mos def a dope drop...keep droppin tha hottness as usual..if you havent done so..check out tha link in my sig titled When the Sky Falls..and be on tha look out for my new topical piece titled...God has a Gun....~1~


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.



    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


  3. #3
    NuM-WuN
    Guest
    Johnny 6 Feet - your verse was excellent, good imagery shown, a great storyline, flow was good, nice vocabulary-just enough to set emotions yet not get people lost..overall verse was dope, you ended your verse in a great way.

    Fanta Zee - your verse was dope as well...like the first verse - excellent imagery, storyline flowed well, vocab was outstanding, had emotion and a nice flow, by the time i ended this verse i was hooked with the story

    Issue - your verse, like the first too, was ill as hell, you did a good job with your imagery when you realize your infected and you begin changing, your rhyme scheme flow and structure really stuck out in this verse, your story-telling also flowed well with a good way to end the whole piece

    ...overall, you 3 made an outstanding piece filled with imagery, detail, and emotion...the whole storyline kinda reminded me of resident evil kinda shit, i'd really enjoy seeing more collabs from you like this...keep it up

  4. #4
    All Things Must Pass. Issue's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2005
    Location
    Looprevil.
    Age
    36
    Posts
    3,541
    Battle Record
    1-0
    Thanks for the replies, and feel free to nominate it.

    Oh and Treason, I was meant to reply to your piece las nyte, I will do after work tonight if I can man, im sorry.

    Upp'n this?!

  5. #5
    Still in the grave Johnny 6-feet's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2002
    Location
    England, Liverpool
    Posts
    5,123
    Battle Record
    8-1
    **volleys this piece to the top again** UUUUHHHHHWAAAHHHH!!!

    Thanks for the nomination Treazon.

    SS League Record 31-8
    SS HW Champ
    14 x OM HoF



    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  6. #6
    Still in the grave Johnny 6-feet's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2002
    Location
    England, Liverpool
    Posts
    5,123
    Battle Record
    8-1
    This is like playing slow-motion keepy ups. Quit sleeping rb!

    SS League Record 31-8
    SS HW Champ
    14 x OM HoF



    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  7. #7
    sayword.
    Join Date
    Nov 2004
    Location
    Ny
    Age
    33
    Posts
    3,358
    Battle Record
    4-0
    this was great the best ive read all day superb all three verses were emotional the vocab was great multies ill flow unbearable im glad i had a chance to read this it was emotional very im be nominating you for the month of augest
    Just Dope.

  8. #8
    All Things Must Pass. Issue's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2005
    Location
    Looprevil.
    Age
    36
    Posts
    3,541
    Battle Record
    1-0
    Thanks a lot for the nomination,


    Uppppp

  9. #9
    Sammy B
    Guest
    Really good, I always love reading the verses you guys put out, but this one realy held my interest. Great vocab and the story lines were gripping and descriptive. It kinda reminded me of the Resedent Evil games. Really good drop here guys as usual keep it up.

  10. #10
    :.There will be Blood.:
    Join Date
    Aug 2005
    Location
    :.My Mama.:
    Age
    36
    Posts
    460
    Battle Record
    3-0
    dope peice.... i liked the flow and structure.......
    :.Apollo .:

  11. #11
    Evolve FanTa ZeE's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2003
    Age
    35
    Posts
    1,419
    Battle Record
    9-6
    uppin this for my fellows and me
    Def Poets

Similar Threads

  1. Def Poets Society.
    By Issue in forum Closed Battles
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: December 16th, 2005, 10:31 PM
  2. Def Poets Presents: Meditation (ft. Djb)
    By Johnny 6-feet in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 10
    Last Post: August 29th, 2005, 06:03 AM
  3. Def Poets: Wiggarifficly Speaking
    By Johnny 6-feet in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 7
    Last Post: August 16th, 2005, 04:47 PM
  4. Def Poets: 230 In 30
    By Violent. in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 12
    Last Post: August 15th, 2005, 02:38 AM
  5. Swords and the Soul-Less (Def Poets)
    By Issue in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 19
    Last Post: August 9th, 2005, 12:35 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •