Edicius Ft. Brixton, Nahlidge & Brandon Heat - Casket Closure.

[Artist.]

Brixton.

This was a extremly good peice, the structure was off but i could care less yr flow was illy, ur imagery and emotion was over the top, ur style is kinda extreme but i like it, but the 3 bar lines in topical is kinda corny but overall really nice peice.

Nahlidge.

Wow ur metaphors were allover the place, ur peice was one of the most imagery filled peice ive seen in a while, but the quotations really annoyed me, Ur emotion was kinda falling off but i dont care u made up for it in imagery, Illy peice

Brandon Heat.

Really nice flow, it was full of imagery and emotiong but the periods everywhere made my eye start twitching, u should use comma's or keep the periods to only a couple in a bar, other then that ur structure was really nice which made it eisier to read and better flow.

Edicius.

Jesus Christ @ The Vocab!, i dont even know half those words, but nice flow due to the fact ur structure was nice, u stuck to the topic and u made it your own. i like how u put, Life .. darkness .. suffering .. pain.., @ the begining of ur verse to make the readers picture stuff before we even read ur verse, Dope peice

All.

If i had to give u guys any advice, it would be do more collabs together.

[Edicius]

Brixton.

This was a extremly good peice, the structure was off but i could care less yr flow was illy, ur imagery and emotion was over the top, ur style is kinda extreme but i like it, but the 3 bar lines in topical is kinda corny but overall really nice peice.

Nahlidge.

Wow ur metaphors were allover the place, ur peice was one of the most imagery filled peice ive seen in a while, but the quotations really annoyed me, Ur emotion was kinda falling off but i dont care u made up for it in imagery, Illy peice

Brandon Heat.

Really nice flow, it was full of imagery and emotiong but the periods everywhere made my eye start twitching, u should use comma's or keep the periods to only a couple in a bar, other then that ur structure was really nice which made it eisier to read and better flow.

Edicius.

Jesus Christ @ The Vocab!, i dont even know half those words, but nice flow due to the fact ur structure was nice, u stuck to the topic and u made it your own. i like how u put, Life .. darkness .. suffering .. pain.., @ the begining of ur verse to make the readers picture stuff before we even read ur verse, Dope peice

All.

If i had to give u guys any advice, it would be do more collabs together.

LOL

thanks for the feedback man

[Artist.]

No Thank U For Making My Brain Hurt.

[E s c]

What a feed back whore....Weres my thank you and weres my feedback n where my collab!

[Edicius]

rofl

*slaps*

[Bounce]

This was a dope read guys. I just wish you could have incorperated your names into the write at the beginning of each verse. It would have gave it a real nice interweaving of the verses. I'm at work so I'll have to stop back in here later. This was a nice read gentlemen...

[Johnny 6-feet]

Closed. Next time leave the links, i aint chasing up your replies for you.

[Edicius]

seriously, stop touching this thread.. i posted this at work and didnt have the time yet to get links, i replyed to more than 2 other open mics.. i stated the 2 latest i replyed to.. you should take that as an ok` cause to put it in a simple way, i am an smod on RB.. and that is for a reason and i try to make things better in area's i can.. you as a simple mod has no right to just close shit up without any ''whats up with your OM'' typ of reply .. a pm or a IM could do wonders to know whats up.. cause if i say i replyed to other OM's as the OM rules stating, i DID.. taking that in doubt makes you really an arrogant individual plus i am putting my effort together to be active in the OM section with several others that are labeled topical vets or legends on RB.. so instead of being suck a prick try finding out whats up before you come in here thinking you are all that.

Its simple, rules are there to be followed.. no exceptions` agreed.

BUT.. dont ever look at my ''i replyed too'' replys as a quik way of avoiding the rules, because i am not, plus i am not looking at OM like ''oh im a dope writer plus an SMOD fuck the rules i post my shit n fuck whoever'' nah i even take the time and effort to tutor some kids so the level of SHIT is being reduced here in a drastic way, why? because i have been a MOD for OM since 2002 and i did more for this forum than you ever did for RB.. so in the future fuck off if you dont see links within a milli second because even though its hard for you to understand, i do this in between my real life so sometimes i cant do it the same second i posted something ie links

fuck off

ps, i am hopping next to bounce now to watch over the OM forum again.

[E s c]

Sorry to fuck up your thread but can you leave some feed on my om in my sig to return the favour. cheers.

[Edicius]

i was on it allready


bump

[B.I.Detained.]

Thanks for the feed. Yea, this turned out pretty dope. Props to Eddy for organising it.
& to Nah' and Av' for dropping too.

[Nostradomus.]

Brixton
"Store it in a dark place & keep it"..
.. my secret, was the only deep shit that recognised a weakness.
Due to sleepless - nights, & tensions tight..
.. my guilt was kept in check and defeatless.

Nice job man really, i loved the multies you had in your first couple bars. Everything was on point: the flow, your beautiful imagery, the way you described what was going on to you, was so sick, i pictured everything in my head. you had a moving piece, and i enjoyed it, great contribution man, really.

Nahlidge
i hate silent nights, so i`m tryna fight
my mind, and light the path that i`m tryna ignite
hear china, think white, but call `em a chink
fall on the sink, throwin` up, 2 many bottles to drink
still drinkin`, a bottle a day keeps the problems away
or is it, a bottle a day to keep the doctor away?
locked in a cage, slaved, but my spirit runs free
cried a river, built a bridge, hope the river`ll run clean

Yo Nah, you're shit was short, but you sure put some work into it. The content of the verse was so original, and your flow was dope. you added alot of multies throughout your verse, and that was wow. your peice sounded like it could be a great recorded verse, i could tell by the flow. good read.

Brandon Heat
blame murder on rap, it's harder to cope,
put suicide on rock... we started them both...
now... they choke respect, it's harder to claim,
over came necro, so they gave me it's name...
so... I move... over, started to think it
buy a new rover... n' started to sink in...
my new motor comes in... plus my new motion,
just pop guns n'... shuck n' jive for em...

Holy fuckcakes. metaphors were straight up sick. i havent seen you write a who lot in OM, i actually havent seen any of your work if you ask me. but after reading this, you made me search for more Open Mic's lol. i couldnt find them, but maybe you could direct me to some of your best peices sometime. great flow too man, for realz.

Edicius
Life .. darkness .. suffering .. pain..
The only thing i could taste was this repentance
hidden from the masses with an ecliptic visual sentence
and this devastation of ultimate doom was apocalyptic
it was over a done deal as life as entities transcripted..

Again, holy fuckcakes. i enjoyed the intro, it had a poetic sensation to it. your vocab was unbelievable, and your flow was practically flawless. your verses wake me up sometimes, like once i read it a couple times, i get the message you're trying to send out here, and i love it. great job too...

Overall - Everyone did a fantastic job seriously, i'm looking forward to seeing many more collabs from you folks, and alot more shit like this. i loved the topic too, the fucking title was very unpredictable, and all the drops were approached in different views. very good, very very good. pz. feel free to RTF on the top OM in my sig, if you like some of my work, please try and hit the others. i have a variety of styles depending on the topic. thanks for the good read guys, and hopefully i get some respectable feedback too. pz.

[topher]

Ed.
Amazing storyline.I honestly thought it was really good.The detail in every bar was very emotional and had alot of imagery.The multies were there and counting ths yllables you had a right amout evened out in each bar.That was good.The vocab. was a simple but good choice of words because it made the piece more emotional like that.
Brix.
You had some really good flow.The coice of vocab. was did it to me though.I think your focus here was mainly the flow and great imagery you had here.I enjoyed also reading the easy read,since it had some many multies and the storyline was pretty good continuing from E.
Nah.
I never knew you did topicals,but this was pretty coool.You had some smooth and very nice rhymne scheme and that was pretty good especially the vocab you had in there,cause it was pretty unqiue and i barely see anyone use a type of style like that.Pretty much i think you did real good at the rhyme scheme using different words.
B h.
Wow nice wqay to end it.Seriously.You had a real good ending that was un-suspecting to me,and the concept you pulled here really executed well,and i think based upon the poetic vocab and storyline it tottally surprised me alot.
Over all.
Nice piece.I've though seen better collabs but this was pretty good,im not yet sure of nominating it though for Hof,but ima rethink and read it again.But nice job on this again.

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[big j da fat boy]

yo this was some hot shit. you guys a pretty good collab. you should do it more offten. the flow was great. wordplay was great. an vocab was aight. just keep doin ya thang ya'll are pretty good. i liked the way you used your words. peace out

[G.Lord]

FUCK THIS SHIT WAS DOPE AS FUCK DAMN but Nahlidge had the best shit that made me be like damn shit was ill no doubt nothen else to say but Dope