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  1. April 3rd, 2006, 08:13 PM #1
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    all alone

    hook (girl)
    boy you know you my boo, an you know i love you
    but i'm tired of bein all alone
    if you leave i'll be gone, when you get back home
    cause i'm tired of bein all alone
    i call you on ya phone, but you just turn it off
    boo i'm tired of bein all alone

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    you knew what you was gettin in, befor you git in it
    you knew i had friends, an i would never quit em
    it's bro's over hoes, an thats the way it's gonna be
    been down for so long, but now you wanna leave
    i like you a lot, but my friends been loyal
    we been through a lot, so i'm a stay loyal
    i give you respect, but you feel neglect
    girl i don't see why, let you get what you wanna buy
    credit cardz wit no ends, drive the 07 Benz
    wit 20 inch rims, stop the rim still spins
    i know i'm not there as much as you would like
    but i'm out gettin bread so we a have a better life
    you think i'm out cheatin, you think i'm out creepin
    you best believin, i damn sure ain't cheatin
    you the one i love, an you the one i need
    them other hoes are sluts, an crack head pheins
    but if you wanna leave, right there's the door
    an if you do leave, don't come back no more
    but before you go, i gotta get some thangs
    keys to the rose, an all ya diamond rangs

    hook (girl)
    boy you know you my boo, an you know i love you
    but i'm tired of bein all alone
    if you leave i'll be gone, when you get back home
    cause i'm tired of bein all alone
    i call you on ya phone, but you just turn it off
    boo i'm tired of bein all alone

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  2. April 3rd, 2006, 08:14 PM #2
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    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=281966
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  3. April 3rd, 2006, 10:06 PM #3
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    uppin. i need feed an if you leave a link i will return the favor so please give feed

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  4. April 4th, 2006, 12:24 AM #4
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    hm...reminds me of a couple of songs...

    Ok, nice hook to begin with...

    Wordplay was a little simple...Nice Multis, but lines seemed stretched some time...
    Good structure, nice rhyme scheme...keep it up...also, where in TN you from??

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  5. April 4th, 2006, 12:34 AM #5
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    sevierville dawg thanks for lookin out an check out my new om i'm bout to put on here it's called drug money

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  6. April 4th, 2006, 11:56 AM #6
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    uppin this need feed

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  7. April 4th, 2006, 02:10 PM #7
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    damn no feed just one person left feed thats fucked up. ya'll need to get that fuckin bitch shit an leave feed

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  8. April 4th, 2006, 02:29 PM #8
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    yo nice structure n flo f'sho......mos def poured some heart into this piece.. which came thru from the chorus....u u gave me couple jokes bout those other chix is crack fien.lolz.
    yeah u hooked sum character into this ... would make a cool audio....

    keep em poppin dun
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  9. April 4th, 2006, 02:44 PM #9
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    .. this was like someone trying to remake 21 questions, which started out as a garbage song. Stop talking about 'making ends and buying ice and cars' and blah blah blah. Your the type of people that give hip-hop and rap culture a stereotype because you have no lyrical talent and only talk about the same shit over, and over, and over.

    That said - it was decent at best.
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  10. April 17th, 2006, 02:05 AM #10
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    thanks for the feed ya'll uppin

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  11. April 17th, 2006, 11:22 AM #11
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    this was like someone trying to remake 21 questions, which started out as a garbage song. Stop talking about 'making ends and buying ice and cars' and blah blah blah. Your the type of people that give hip-hop and rap culture a stereotype because you have no lyrical talent and only talk about the same shit over, and over, and over.

    That said - it was decent at best.

    A Song is About Real Shit not bout ice and cars- lma0- but u had good hooks and vocab to me and good flow just concept wise it wasnt suppose to be this wack.. work on stickin to topic of the matter nice verse all in all
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