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  1. June 3rd, 2006, 12:35 AM #1
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    Differ Of Yous

    Differ Of Yous


    As if my lungs are in war B,since my words make bodies retreat
    I leave no trace of compation or sympathy....
    ...........................................thas why my pen bleeds for me
    if 'thoughts' compared to 'rain',our mouths are ships w/letters haul'd
    as our lips move at a steady pace...........................
    ........................................our minds 'cascade' let'n the 'waterfall'
    people's actions 'range' from highs&lows like 'mathematic equations'
    but when u begin2 'change ur values'.....................................
    .......u 'add' hatred,'multiply' it by envy,lead'n 2'subtraction' of faces
    we are all equal individuals with a pulse an blood in our vains
    then again u dont think when ur patience 'boils'......
    ........................until the 'steam' is restrain'd from the 'flame'
    most seek refuge, most give life to the used, others let life pass through
    some hide behind lies, an hide the truth....................................
    ..............................there is no riddle,no need 4 clues
    ..............................what kind of being are U?

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  2. June 3rd, 2006, 12:45 AM #2
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  3. June 3rd, 2006, 01:01 AM #3
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  4. June 3rd, 2006, 01:04 AM #4
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    Alright. Man Your structure, the dots, I hate it. Brah you can fill that up with some decent metaphors or adjectives or something, not dots, dots limiting your creativity in your words and a reader (me) Don't want to see that. This was a good short piece, emotion was good and the choice of words (wordplay) was good. I kinda lost interested in your verse once I saw those dots man. Anyway's the flow was kinda smooth, relaxing, not forced, that's good. Keep writing brah.

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  5. June 3rd, 2006, 01:07 AM #5
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    ima fix my flaws fam....thanks 4 the feed

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  6. June 3rd, 2006, 04:48 PM #6
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  7. June 3rd, 2006, 05:01 PM #7
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    yea i wasn't feelin the dots either...but other than that this was pretty alright....this was pretty short kinda simple...topic was cool...flow was descent...rhymes were good....could use more elevation though...just keep at it man.....peace
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  8. June 4th, 2006, 01:46 AM #8
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