Topical -OG Maestro vs. Witty [og wins by dq ]

[OG Maestro]

Can me & Witty get votes on this guys
@Art. @Joe Boston @Smog @Tim... @A.T.

[A.T.]

I'll try to hit it up on my break today b

[Nigma]

Witty. It's been a minute since I've read your work but I was instantly reminded of why you're respected. That verse had a terrific mix of a lot of good things. First off, I commend you on your angle to this. The whole rise and fall aspect and behind the scenes look of glitz and glamor really meshed that topic in a strong yet abstract way. Additives such as that lullaby really added to the depth. Mechanically it came off care free yet very technical. Freedom of mind while writing. Very impressive verse.

OG. I feel youre intro wasn't very reader friendly. It's often a good idea to start out with a simplistic version to the more advanced rhymescheme you set to achieve to influence how the reader reads it. Aside from that, I have very little to critique about this verse. I feel Witty's verse was easier to follow but that yours has more substance. You had some sections that stood out to me. One of my favs
"With cotton fleece from head to toe, that reaped what they sowed
His heart in tune with the beat of his soul; a sheep in a reaper's clothes
Irony.
The same fabrics of his mind & habits of his grind made what he wore
Mastered tactics of Sun Tzu but remained engorged as a slave to the war
He gained and matured, flowing like water within a Leviathan's calms
He saw those that reside in the palms & fuse together like hydrogen bombs"

just building momentum and hammering it home. The visuals you closed the verse out on left it at a strong note. Really nice verse.


After reading Witty's verse I didn't think there was much of a chance I'd vote against it, and after OG's intro that notion was reinforced, but Frost got back on track and strung together some powerful sections in a verse packed with obscure, yet alluring references. I'm sitting here stumped on who to vote for. Literally just typing words right now hoping the mindless motion will help me think. It isn't. After a reglance through the verses I believe I have reached a verdict. Frost came with a lot of passion. I feel the energy emmited from Witty's verse was more contained, and that it was used in a more controlled matter. Sucks that either verse has to get voted against but I feel Wittys verse was a bit easier to follow, better incorporated the theme, and was a cunt hair above his opponent here.

Frost, congrats and making this such a close battle. One of the better verse lyrically I've read from you.

+1 Witty

[OG Maestro]

@Witty
You have till mid night to provide 2 voting links!!!!!

I wanted this voting to conclude but I want to battle other people and it's taking way too long. a full month tho? wow
I'm ready for this to be closed dawg.

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Witty. It's been a minute since I've read your work but I was instantly reminded of why you're respected. That verse had a terrific mix of a lot of good things. First off, I commend you on your angle to this. The whole rise and fall aspect and behind the scenes look of glitz and glamor really meshed that topic in a strong yet abstract way. Additives such as that lullaby really added to the depth. Mechanically it came off care free yet very technical. Freedom of mind while writing. Very impressive verse.

OG. I feel youre intro wasn't very reader friendly. It's often a good idea to start out with a simplistic version to the more advanced rhymescheme you set to achieve to influence how the reader reads it. Aside from that, I have very little to critique about this verse. I feel Witty's verse was easier to follow but that yours has more substance. You had some sections that stood out to me. One of my favs
"With cotton fleece from head to toe, that reaped what they sowed
His heart in tune with the beat of his soul; a sheep in a reaper's clothes
Irony.
The same fabrics of his mind & habits of his grind made what he wore
Mastered tactics of Sun Tzu but remained engorged as a slave to the war
He gained and matured, flowing like water within a Leviathan's calms
He saw those that reside in the palms & fuse together like hydrogen bombs"

just building momentum and hammering it home. The visuals you closed the verse out on left it at a strong note. Really nice verse.


After reading Witty's verse I didn't think there was much of a chance I'd vote against it, and after OG's intro that notion was reinforced, but Frost got back on track and strung together some powerful sections in a verse packed with obscure, yet alluring references. I'm sitting here stumped on who to vote for. Literally just typing words right now hoping the mindless motion will help me think. It isn't. After a reglance through the verses I believe I have reached a verdict. Frost came with a lot of passion. I feel the energy emmited from Witty's verse was more contained, and that it was used in a more controlled matter. Sucks that either verse has to get voted against but I feel Wittys verse was a bit easier to follow, better incorporated the theme, and was a cunt hair above his opponent here.

Frost, congrats and making this such a close battle. One of the better verse lyrically I've read from you.

+1 Witty

Btw thank you so much for voting. It's like the whole fucking site scanned over this and said "fuck it" smh.

[Spree]

Closed