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Thread: A friendly Blunt (ill short)

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    A friendly Blunt (ill short)

    Times passin me by as im gettin in through my passenger side
    Once Im feelin the blunt Im passin the vibe to darken the red in my passenger's eyes
    Askin the skies if God's graspin' my cries or is he busy tryin to think slow
    His days a thousand years so I'd think so
    Im tryin to win n then let it sink slow ashin' the blunt out my window
    Keepin my daily sins low or atleast for the moment
    Then Im tryin to hold it but damn my hands are folded
    Thats when the whole hits n the bullshit takes grasp
    Seein through the fake laughs when I break cash
    Buyin great hash that I need to make last so Im about to try
    Disgusted at how my mouth can lie cuz I cant go 12 hours without a high

    ...

    holla back yougn's

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    yo this piece makes me want to smoke a blunt......real nice flow though i thought it was poetic and will written but i think u were high when u wrote this i just got this feeling u were but anyway tight work on it but one thing though come wit a tighter vocab next time it might make it a lil deeper than what it is but overall i liked it...........now im gonna go smoke me one!!

    illest line in this piece:

    "Times passin me by as im gettin in through my passenger side
    Once Im feelin the blunt Im passin the vibe to darken the red in my passenger's eyes"

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    this subject is played as hell-o. but this was actually ok. write about better topics and ull elevate and get more respect.@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@ @@@@@@@@@

    overall good.

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    thanks for the love...

    topic is never played if u can perfect it...

    holla

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    there is only so many topics, so of course some will be "played out". this was dope man, i like verses short anyway

    8/10

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    It wasnt the best ive ever seen. He is right though, the topic is played. BUT, that has nothin to deal with your skillz. It was a good rap, you kept a steady flow. You kinda made me wanna smoke a blunt. I think detail would have been better. But good drop homie, be more descriptive.

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