The Curtain, Torn

[Moniker]

I stand
alone in this chapel
a mere man
before your altar.
Lord, I'm lost.
and you've found me
but this time
this time will you be
there, again?

The candles
burn in amber silence
a silhouette of prayer
laments the darkness
but here Lord,
here there are no shadows
no sorrow and no pain
just the innocence
of Jesus.

Speak... please
I wan't to hear you God,
to see your hands molding
the cold figure lying before you
I wan't to touch the very air
and know that it's you.
I wan't faith that moves,
mountains to crumble
waters to part because
of your presence.
humble me, make me
a servant to your word
so I can write again..
be myself again.
I'm asking for your help,
again.

Release the chains
break my boundaries
rend the heavens
rekindle my ashes,
free the fire burning inside.
Untill all I speak is you.
All I seek is you.
All I breathe is you.
All I need...
is you.

tear the curtain
thats blinding my soul
to re-thread the needle
and sow together
the patches of hope
held by my heart.

I believe.
so don't leave me.
grow with me and guide me
stand beside me
always.

[Beauties Breath]

This is what I want too.... and a new best friend...

[Thrust]

mindless, this is what i like to see from you. this style, you and only a couple others on this site seem like they like to express. i do it myself sometimes, but to see it done so nicely from you it's really enjoyable. i liked the wording and the writer's voice that you really got across well. half way through i'm thinking "damn, another 'god isn't there for me' shit". you kept it real and didn't take the easy way out like everyone else does. very well done. nice meaningful piece. the emotion was great. you know what...you're a great writer! honestly, i love the style and everying. keep it up.

[kwik_trigger]

great piece... very enjoyable to read... not a religious person myself but nonetheless the poem was inspirational... keep it up

[Prince Escobar]

This was dope, your expression was on point and your elegance with a pen has again recaptured me as a fan. your structure (i know its frowned upon to discuss) but your structure was good and the way it was read was very well recieved, your message was good i suppose though i am far from religous but that is besides the point, the way you came across was again well recievedm a delight from start to finish, 1luv.

[bigdumbelephant]

stand beside me, always
my mind wanders leaving I alone
the sand with my footprints is cold
the stone I placed my faith upon
is not the rock you broke my pain upon
the fuel within my desires runs thin
my legs are young and strong
but my knees wont bend
I've many more years unfinished
but my will is at its end
but just a word from you
will push me forward again
just a word from you
will push me forward again
fill my mouth with your flaming tonuge
that I might speak your name again . . .

(feeling you, mindless.)

[In.Fa.Red]

This was nice, your emotions were on point but your structure was good and the way it was read was very well recieved and easy to enjoy, your imagery was very nice the way you came across was again well recievedm a delight from start to finish, i really liked the vocab you used for this piece also...it was very touching and emotional...keep it up

!..Best part..!

Speak... please
I wan't to hear you God,
to see your hands molding
the cold figure lying before you
I wan't to touch the very air
and know that it's you.
I wan't faith that moves,
mountains to crumble
waters to part because
of your presence.
humble me, make me
a servant to your word
so I can write again..
be myself again.
I'm asking for your help,
again.

[Foreshadow]

Different style same old mindless dropping a nice piece you did a good job I hope to see you on more.

[Chris Black]

This is probably my favorite piece from you. It's probably the best I've read in a while. It was really smooth and the imagery was just ill. Good shit, fam.

[Moniker]

I appreciate all the replies. this was mainly just a venting piece for myself but i'm glad to see that it was so well recieved.

thanks again.

-Mind.