Changing World

[EvOLuTioN]

Whats going on wit the world today/
everyday something goes wrong and i have to pray/
So many people getting shot/
So many bodies laying around ready to rot/
Destruction scars our "modern" earth/
War has begun its re-birth/
Evolution is ongoing/
Right now hurricanes are brewing/
Tornadoes rip the mid-west/
Bullets tare thru thugz chests/
Earthquakes roar thru california/
Although to late, the weather channel tries to warn ya/
Nuclear weopons are being designed/
The govornment was formed to control ya mind/
Global warming is near in the future/
aerosol cans are still a popular feature (cuase of global warming)/
Not a thing we can do/
All these statements are true/

YouRs Truly, Evolution

[Baby-Smile'z]

i like this good flow

[EvOLuTioN]

Thank you very much

[ChaChing]

this piece was weak, weak structure, no multis, bad flow.....4/10

[Baby-Smile'z]

ppl have different oppions

[EvOLuTioN]

Cha-ching where u comin from? the structure was flawless, wat did u not understand? and what multis are you talking about, you dont need multis to have a good piece, and you prolly don even kno how to make anything flow cuz i found this easy to flow wit and obviously baby did too, but thanks for the feedbak anyway

[MISTA GRIM]

yah i liked it. the flow was cool and the structure didn't seem to have nuttin wrong wit it. Nice shit. keep it cummin'

[MISTA GRIM]

{*_nice_*}

[CrazyCarl]

Lines could have been longer on the whole. The rhyming was basic for text. The other reviewer mentioned multis because that can help it to stand out and be more complex as a written. For future topics, try to think smaller. You were real general, could have went into more description in certain areas.

[EvOLuTioN]

tyvm guyz and carl that was very helpfull feedback, now i kno what i have to work on, unlike the other dude he didn't help nothing out. thanx again guyz

[mcl]

nice i liked the message behind it the flow n the rhymes were all 9/10

[EvOLuTioN]

Thanx Mcl nice rating :yes:

[~ladie_streetz~]

this wouldve been more interesting if you wouldve had more aggressive vocabualry to it, and more decent shit liked more described things that happen.. you had basic shit in this though. you had a good flow, your topic was hot but jus needs to be explained more drastically.. good

[Moral Insight]

The Flow to me was off, but the rhymes were
ok, i understood what u were saying, but it took
some time to understand, you have plenty poteintal
and u i think u can live up to ur name (Evolution)
keep dropin open mics and you'll get their

[EvOLuTioN]

Thanx moral that was useful feedback, although only the composer knows how to flow wit it, but i get wat ya sayin, thanks alot