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    One Love.. The World's End - SS Piece



    One love was the first hate-crime against the individual,
    Upon the eve of lime-lit overglorified impromptu ritual.
    Smiles swarmed the streets precariously, leaning over their death,
    For now emotion is the hallmark, the symptom, of those soon left.
    The best of the worst's best, the worst of the best's worst, lost,
    A chilling frost encases miles of inorganic tombs, the revolution's cost.
    Looking into a mirror and seeing a grey figure, scarce hair,
    Shriveled skin, drooping cheeks, before it fades leaving it bare.
    A skeleton peers back, the destiny of those who care to care?
    A flair of torn nostrels as flicks of blood embrace the dirty air.
    Looking out of a partially shattered window, past the iron bars,
    Calling to the mercy of Venus, Saturn, and the blood covered Mars.
    The planets circle 'One Love' on the flickering plasma above,
    A twitch in his side, a twinge of disgust, an empty notion of love.
    Blank remenitions of lust amidst the cavernous depths of tears,
    Yet, emotion is forbidden, questioning is the very torment of fears.

    Never once has the new state been questioned, of course,
    Indeed, in comparison, his voice appears horse, quiet discourse.
    Remebering what happened? Or does he? Documentation says otherwise?
    History rewritten under the flickeringly unnatural bomb-shelter lights.
    Impervious to the screams and plights that bury individual frights,
    Perfection's nice, but the truth is better, ONE LOVE is their days and nights.
    Vehemently his brain pumps euphoric understanding, cracking the cipher,
    "One Love... L..ove..One.. Another.." he spat, as if to spite her...
    Peering up at the statuesque figure of a Party member smiling at all,
    An unending enthusiasm from the ignorant cannot do harm, but enthrall.
    Exactly the same as every single other human being in this disgusting world,
    "IF I.. IF I HAD SEEN THIS BEFORE.. BEFORE NOW" his heart whirled..
    "BEFORE THE REVOLUTION.." his heart gaining pace, a smile gathering,
    "I WOULD'VE BEEN.. been.. SICK!" he said with frothy spit lathering.

    'Exists' is an odd word today, in fact, it does not even exist today,
    The very fact that it does not exist, confirms it exists, yet not in the slightest way.
    Pure contradiction like this has mastered society, preventing individualism,
    The thought of a deviation from collectivism, well, it's mere cynicism.
    For me, the fact that our protagonist, whom I shall refer to as John, once existed,
    Yet does not now, thus never existed, yet he is still mentally listed.
    This denial of memory, of knowledge itself, CONCIOUSLY by a human being?
    It disgusts me, I'm merely as sincere as you, except I'M STILL SEEING.
    John carried off into the vast chambers merely grasped at history,
    I'm still here, stopped by none so far, or am I now just a memory?
    The contradictions of the many ensure individuality, yet they deny it,
    ONE LOVE should be LOVE ONE ANOTHER.. Despite this empty shit!

    Despite these words, true reality shall never be known, lost to One Love,
    The maniacal party, taking power for the people, then laughing from above.
    The very essence of One Love cannot exist, yet it does, in fact it is God,
    Yet they say God does not exist, so ...

    Silenced by a bullet through his head he utters.. "One Never Exists."


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    Jesus Christ... That was rediculous man. Seriously, from start to finish everything was just, wow. The concept seemed like it had some fimiliarity to it, but I can garentee I've never seen in done so masterfully before, so you definately did well with concept and creativity. The overall flow in rhyming was flawless and very unique while even the content had very nice fluency through the transitioning of lines. Vocabulary was crealy just... Ya, lol I need not comment. Uuum, emotion was very strong... Alot of times when artists achieve so much through flow concept and imagery they kind of forget about emotion which in my eyes is one of the most important aspects; but you really were on point with that aswell. Uuum, only complaint was how a few lines wrapped the page, but I mean, being as the flow never fell off that's kind of whatever. Great job man, loved the piece.

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    hmmmm

    I don't really no what to say.......I mean its obvious just by your choice of words and the way you constructed your ideas that you are without question an exceptional writer, but on the other hand you, much like myself, seem to have a problem expressing your complex thoughts in a simplistic process. though i found a lot of what you had to say to be interesting and insightful, there still were however, points and places where i thought you struggled/went beyond the scope of what it is you were really trying to say.......i'd dunno, maybe i'm just stupid....lol

    anyways this piece was a brillantly written piece, even if it was a little to abstract at times
    Last edited by LedgenZ; April 23rd, 2006 at 11:57 AM

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