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Thread: A Second Chance

  1. May 8th, 2006, 02:31 PM #1
    Innovative Mind
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    A Second Chance(Innovative Mind and Lady Dip )

    Last thing i Recall........ Cars was Crashing,,
    I remember glass breaking,, and sirens flashing..
    Somehow ....it was a head on collision......
    trapped inside facing death ..i'm just embrace my Religion..
    I said " Lord above I know i'm not Living Right.....
    But please give me a second Chance at Life.
    Too young to die, still so much to see,,
    So please help me,, Make it threw this Tragedy..
    Then all of of Sudden i Heard My Father,,
    He Said ''Believe In me'' and your life will Prosper,,,
    So I just closed my Eyes and Contiued To Pray..
    Lord please let me Live to See another Day...
    Next thing I Hear THe doctors screaming she made it ,,
    as i woke up dazed in amazement...
    Now i realize God ,,got the worlds in his Hands,,
    i'm living proof he gave me a second chance.........




    Lady Dip
    still on this earth wishing that my life would end
    waking up from a deep sleep guess i'm back again
    cats don't believe me, on fams I don't depend
    so I discuss my pain in rap, do you feel my torment
    second chances spose to be about moving forward
    but my past so deep it got me going backwards
    reacting violent, my grams aint raise me this way
    its like my love for her totally went astray
    surguries only reason why im here today
    then i think...what if the doctors made one mistake
    tryna calculate all the breaks god given me
    he dont want me, yet i hold my hand out constantly
    on a different page but the theme still the same
    all the mistakes i made, no regrets, theres no shame
    shit its hard to maintain im back at the bottom
    everyday the skys gray my name equal problems
    wit these memories on my back like a t shirt
    it aint difficult to realize that i been hurt
    but im still living, chances im still giving
    maybe because im here for a reason
    yeah im here for a reason
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=289902
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=290980
    be right back with the links
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  2. May 8th, 2006, 03:01 PM #2
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    yo homie need 2 links of OM's you left feed with. Or else this get's closed.
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  3. May 8th, 2006, 03:05 PM #3
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    jay thank you but i already know that
    don't freepost in our thread unless you giving some feed back
    you not a fucking mod*

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  4. May 8th, 2006, 03:08 PM #4
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    Lol ok but umm CALM THE FUCK DOWN!.

    This was a nice peice. I liked the flow and wordplay. The structre was meh but the plot was great. 9-10 peice and hit up one of my two OM's.
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  5. May 8th, 2006, 03:13 PM #5
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    thanks for the feed
    uppin this piece ,................................................. ............

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  6. May 8th, 2006, 05:17 PM #6
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    okay this was a pretty nice piece
    innnovative mind i could kinda of picture what you
    was saying the structure was kinda off but nice
    vocab .and wordplay .Lady Dip your verse was
    okay.Just both of you ladies need to work on ya structure.
    Battle needs Closing

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  7. May 8th, 2006, 06:53 PM #7
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    uppin this shit for yall ladies...................................
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  8. May 8th, 2006, 06:57 PM #8
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    yo this was an aight piece creative and wordplay was aught
    stucture was good overall good shit holla back

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    check this its da movement baby

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  9. May 8th, 2006, 07:03 PM #9
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    Mmm... Second chance poems, gotta love em. But I craved a twist in the story. I think it would have made the piece more memorable. I think you could have used the collab more effiecently like telling one half of the same story playing different characters and still portray the story of a second chance. Overall rhyme was good just up complexity.

    RTF please:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250742

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  10. May 9th, 2006, 01:10 PM #10
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    thanks for tha feed
    upping............................................ ......................................

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  11. May 9th, 2006, 02:27 PM #11
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    it was aight..to me it was kinda boring...
    structure was good..flow was nice..
    rhymes were good and multies were nice
    overall this was a pretty descent peice..
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  13. May 9th, 2006, 08:07 PM #13
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    I Was Feeling This Piece.. I Got Really Into It Like I Was You. Like Syk.iLL Said I Was Craving A Twsit Well So Was I. I Felt It Was To Short Though As I Was Getting Into It, It Finished. And I Think You Both Lacked Creativity

    No Hate Though.

    Both Of Yall Should Do A Collab Again But This Time Make It Longer.
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  14. May 9th, 2006, 11:32 PM #14
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    upping this for more feed .................................................. .
    holla at cha girl.........

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    this was a really nice drop!...
    i loved your emotion and multies that was combined and blended VERY WELL...
    i like your imagery and vocab too it made a great asset!.

    RTF on the OM in my sig please!.
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