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    Jesus Undergraduate

    Under oaks I pick roses
    always getting the short end
    of the stem. I suppose It's
    clever these clovers aren't
    four leafed, or my luck would
    be underoath before I could
    pluck the buttons from white
    clouds wearing genes; bare feet
    reaching toward blue skies.

    It's imposed in my mayhem,
    concealed to show the worth
    that backwoods will still speak
    to the mystics and talk back
    in splintered words with no
    concern for the atrocity split
    across foreign countries.

    I turned stones into Marijuana
    and sent it to five thousand
    starving children in Ghana.
    Only a quarter of the world was
    attentive when I bagged black magic
    to make a River out of Styx.
    I was taught by trees to intercede
    with boondock prophets
    treading logs untill it was said
    I could walk on fire.

    The saints were all marching
    in stride, when the rope came
    to tie their hopeless stains to the
    train tracks; waiting to collide
    with the messiah as self-
    sacrifice came steam-rolling in...

    Such a sight for suicide to pay
    back it's debtor. We higher free
    men to mason each red desire.
    Praying in acoustics, these
    grown folk lure sin to use us.
    But we chagrin and bare it all
    cause we're drugged on miracles.
    A ruthless
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    yea
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    I didn't really understand parts of this. Either because the language was a bit cryptic, or because I'm not being perceptive enough. Or a bit of both. For instance, the sticks/stones wordplay was a nice idea, but what does marijuana have to do with the messiah or black magic or the River Styx? I didn't get that stanza, or a few other bits.

    What I got from this was, if you will, an excuse for why the world (or just the west, or the US maybe) is getting more secular. I can understand that .. this was a good attempt at tackling this topic without being hypocritical and preaching.

    Last line was cool, 'chagrin and bear it'. Overall nice work, but I was expecting a bit more.
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    This was a great piece. I'm not really going to pick it apart because I already broke it down in my RBM section, but I loved this. Much like everything you write this was just very creative and witty.
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    Thanks Jek. You're the man. I'll pm a few explanations if it helps.

    Atticus whats RBM?
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    The RB Mag is back and going on it's 4th week; I did this weeks PS column, it's in the Mag stickied to the top of the lounge.
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    Dude. You're on something.

    You are an awesome poet. Quite frankly one of the best around on RB. I love your work. Just the sheer cleverness, and creative abstract ideas behind it. Just the way you write. Awesome metaphors. Awesome everything.

    Good job.

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