Black Rainbows .. Ft Orikle, Nahlidge, Speek EZ & Brixton..

[Sandy]

Black Rainbows ..


Orikle
They fought wars on the shores of the Euphrates...
Every soldier walked cautiously like ‘Who made me?’
These new babies are baptized by the ocean of the dollar..
& The sailor’s should capsize - but they’ll murder every option..
Support the President? The votes were the evidence,
That the population don’t understand their thirst for Sediments..
They let the soldiers march aimlessly for this substance…
& claim that their religiously aided with Jesus as their Accomplice..
You’ve taken the colours out of the Skies…
On the Natural fruits of Earth, Its simple - You outbid your own Price.
No longer look for beauty – These rainbows are now dead.
Coz whenever it rains, the Oil stains have caved our quests.

Nahlidge
Every black man carries a gun, and if broke, known to stick up
Right? But bein` half white, doesn`t make me less of a nigga
Figures, nigger, spade, jungle bunnies and spear chuckers
Usin` guns and drugs to give the public a reason to fear brothers
Colored? So why do you symbolize black as my heritage
"Go home nigger", but technically I`m a African American?
Ameri...can`t judge me, and racism won`t budge me
Any further than I wanna walk...So don`t rush me
And my legs are fine, no need for help, so don`t crutch me
But still I`m seen as a lesser man, and you don`t trust me
Stuck me in a 3rd world, between poverty, killin` eachother
I talk black, walk black? But still I`m a colored...nigger
living under those rainbows...

Speek EZ
Murder, murder people killing each other over color of skin
None of us will win but its hard, our prejudices are sunk in
I fucking hate those n…. sp… ch… it doesn’t matter to me
Prejudices are based on misconceptions that don’t directly
Affect me, or people I know just what I was taught to think
Like a blink the world changes in a second but we can’t link
Together our feelings and attitudes just live in a dismal division
But what I envision is we stop seeing colors with our visions
No discrimination just black and white is the way it should be
Or eventually our hate will encompass the universe completely
And all we will be left with is remnants of what we once had
A black rainbow to remind us of our woes and indiscretions

Brixton
What do black rainbows mean to me? Or what I deem to see?
I see, a black crescent of hope with dreams that cease
To live in peace, or just general sut from the middle East
Covering colours of nature that no longer need to be
The appocalypse has taken heed, which is breaking seeds
Of the kids that look at their dead parents as a vacancy
This isn't make believe..
Even for strong stomachs, the stench'll make you heave.
For we'll still watch from our T.V's, and document with D.V.D's
& only recently - do we care..
cuz now the conflict we caused brought our own country warfare
So look at a Black Rainbow & tell me life isn't fair?

Edicius
the worlds visions on truth remained unsighted,lost souls benighted
eye for an eye, leaving us all blinded..
..people being slighted for those answers unrequited
and whatever struggle we come across, we handle it and we fight it
so dont act suprised if you trow us the papers, that we ignited..
anguished by the goverments nuisance..boxing us in; unequal
destroying us mentally, this life of sin upto 25 without a sequel
what caused it, who did it?? ..that is todays question...
asked by the people that are growing the roots of our oppression
end of session, case closed.. obliterated our thoughts
imperceptible puzzles trown at us..
with obscuring definitions portrayed in a blurry way
putting us on guard` sharp and in a state of dismay..
..yet strong and fearless` ..ready for whatever.

We’re living under a Black Rainbow..the strings pulled from above
just open up..try to live as one,
...with all those colors united.

[Edicius]

thanks hun, i coulndt post this shit!

replyed too dev & nique

[~SILENT~]

this was real nice i liked the structure and the mad complexity it was greatly worded and the emotion?!...WOW! thats all ima say is wOW! great collb. i lved the details and the mad story telling aswell keep it up peeps!

nice work
RTF on the links in my sig

[Malicious.]

Orikle- your part was pretty ill man u had a good structure rhyme scheme was'nt to complex but it still worked well with the words you used and I also liked the direction you took with this piece i would have never thought to do that.


Nahlidge- this was also good it had alot of imagery and your structure was good i really felt where u were comin from with being half white cuz i know ppl who ar half white and im just plain old black lol i think i've seen a little better from but overrall still a dope piece



speek E.Z- same as orikle pretty much, nice piece i must say decent structure but as we all know structure does'nt mean much when doing an om, u had alot of imagery within those lines overrall pretty dope


Eddy- pretty damn dope bro i like the direction you took this in, it was diff from everyone else it was more political i probabaly would have tried that same path but it would'nt have been executed as well lol, but on a serious note it had alot of imagery and seemed to be well thought out before u even began writing, overrall dope piece

Toghether- this was an extremely nice poece all together because you all wrote nice and their were no sub-par verses ya know i only wish i could have seen u all write a little more but it would have been to much for some people to read, i geuss u guys already knew that though lol but good piece yall

overrall-dope!

[Atti]

This was a nice piece, was this the A.I. collab? I'm not sure cuz I don't know if Orikle and Speek are even on A.I. But ya, I'll start with the things I didn't like so I can end on a possitive tip.

Speek's piece to me was just very off. It would be concicered slightly above average individually but in comparison to what everyone else brought to the table his stanza was just kind there, but didn't say nearly as much. Kind of seemed like it may have been more of an audio friendly piece.

Orikle... Although I fucking loooooooooved all of your content, I felt like your flow was forced alot of the time. You had nice internals and stuff, but you still used that ending rhyme scheme but the final rhymes often felt like they just didn't work as well as they should. It really sucked too becuase like I said, I loved your section and it was probally my favorite contectually due to the more poetic styling of it.

Ok, on to the good stuff...

Eddy, great job, your verse was very casual and low key yet packed alot of punch to it in the sense that everything was very understandable. Coupled with a steady flow, switched up a few times, but overall very consistant and the content which is the most important part... Was so far beyond point so great job. I really liked this section.

Nahl, best of the piece I think. I felt like you had the strongest and most creative rhyming coupled with some of the more powerfull statements. Overall it was just everything that a great piece needs. Like Ed you kept it casual aswell, having everything very understandable to a wide range of audience. So, great job from you, my favorite of the piece.

Overall, dope drop. All of the verses flowed into eachother nicely and had similar styles with the exception of Speek E.Z. I didn't really feel like his verse was up to par with everyone elses. But, aside from that great job overall. Lol, I thought I was going to see Bebe rapping when I first came in *shrug* maybe another time. Later guys.

[Edicius]

thanks for the indepth reply, appreciated.. people should take that as an example..

bump

[Atti]

Check out "Hearts aren't Made for Tin-Men" if you get a chance man.

[Bounce]

Well, I thought for the most part this was a real nice read. Different styles came to gether well wove a real nice peice. Strong, direct and powerful in parts. I will say that Nah, eddy and orikle shined here. I really like orikles verse, eddy and nah were the strongest here. In all honesty, sppek ez verse really hurt this collab. It did not fit and was completly out shinned here. It made for an awkward transition in the read. It was beeter that his verse didn't open or close the peice, because by the time you got passed it the next made up for it. Brix came solid as always, and helped anchor down the drop, always nice to read you guys, even more so on a collab like this. Good shit people.

Very nice guys, sorry I missed out on this. I've been really busy, next one?

[Nique.]

AI IS IN THE BUILDING.

Good shit, fellas.

Edit: This was pretty dope fellas. All of you brought your own unique writing ability to the table. I opening and closing was perfect because the beginning set us up for something special, and the end left us with a lot to think about. Based on emotion alone, the strongest based on that one mechanic was Nahlidge's verse. I liked the pain and aggression that you portrayed in your piece with your diction. Very vivid, yet historically insightful. Orikle's I liked yours also because you seemed to always have this different perspective and outlook on certain subjects and concepts and it always keeps me interested. As usual, Brix's imagery usually upholds his entire piece, but both his flow and imagery were on point here. And Mike, it's amazing how you rarely write, but when you do, it's like you post an Open Mic everyday. Speek, it's obvious you haven't written in awhile, but I don't think imperfection is a downfall. Imperfection is apart of human nature, so this piece should character as well as positive vulnerability. Good shit, AI.

[Throwaway123]

Sorry guys, first thing I wrote for a long time. Next one I'll come correct on.

[B.I.Detained.]

Thanks peeps, and sorry to Myself and Malicious.. my verse was edited in after your replies as I forgot about the collab'. Had to key like a mad man. & Speek don't worry about it dude, we've all been rusty. & we all know how dope you can drop.

[Edicius]

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[Orikle]

Jeah! This was damn tight man. Some fucking iLL lines here man.

Nah - "Ameri...can`t judge me, and racism won`t budge me
Any further than I wanna walk...So don`t rush me"

^ Niiicceee.

Eddy - "eye for an eye, leaving us all blinded.."

^ werd up son.

Enjoyed this fam. Bumpity Bump.

[Edicius]

word

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[Nahlidge]

This shit came out nice. Good looks on the replies.