Keep a Razor Under My Tongue

[spokenoh]

Keep a Razor Under My Tongue

Pursed lips;
Your language is cursive
You know the ABCs of ADHD

My English?
Purely cunninlingus
The best in me conveys ecstasy

I wrote this poem twice before
It's humble beginning wrapped in linen
I treated every inch as integers
until I found your number
My cursive came off the lines
to the inside of your thighs
where my initials were signed

I can't displace that taste

Conglomerate spit -
The words I evict
leave a bitter-suite taste
that I can't displace

Binge-
there's a tinge of sarcasm in your orgasm
I can't displace it
keeping a razor under my tongue
so you can't fake it

Here's my sigh to love

Saliva slut, alive in touch
My English spoken from pursed lips
idiosyncratic
I'll cut you up
this razor is orgasmic

[D. Josey]

please, write more often. this was the most awesome and real piece I've seen in a while. This was original, and just an old approach to the style that you brought it with. I loved t he wordplay and the vocabulary used in this one, and everything was just very cool man. Nice piece.

[Wyte]

^ i agree with exact on this one, you are very talented yo. kee up this good work and u will make it big in life. this is a nice piece and u had good imagery and everything.

[Atti]

damn, where have you been lately? we've still got to get that collab off the backburner. this piece was amazing, loved every bit from the fluency to the contectual values. just as seemless as your old work... no break in anything, everything- fits. the word placement and diction both were nothing short of perfect. great job, i'm hoping you're actually back for a bit.

[spokenoh]

Yeah, I'm undecided. My life is in disarray at the moment so I'm just trying to find a balance if vous comprehende. Good thing I write in English, right? Right Right. Anyways, thanks for the comments.

[Atti]

well, if you get a chance...

"Crucifixion of the Paper Tiger"

[Mo'nique]

good poem here.
you came real creative with this poem
you stayed on topic also
the vocab was decent in this poem,
and you came with some visual images from your poem

[Spoken]

nice poem here multie emotion rhyming was just definate and percise man real smooth in this short yet sweet yet it meant alot ...the vocab use in this was just nicely assorted and dominant nothing fell off what so ever ya know!...this was a nice clean read and very emotional...the use of also your metaphors to break down certain areas and barriers was just nicely doen with finesse man nice shit here great piece and i enjoyed the read!

[Whisper']

This was a good piece. You should keep writin like for real because this is a.. I cant even think of the word but this is a real good piece. I think that if you keep writing pieces like this then you will hit it big in the real world. Good piece. Cant wait to read more.

[Freeman]

A brilliant poem. Very deep and meaningful. Excellent metaphors.

"a tinge of sarcasm in your orgasm" - excellent line.

Keep writing.

[Neruda II]

you fucking make me jealous

[oneLOCA]

i'm speechless

[gémeaux]

I like this. I like it because it's not completely understandable to me, the more I read it, the more I feel I'm not getting all of it, so I keep coming back to it. You have some great phrases.

I do have a problem, your punctuation is on the verge of not existing, so why even bother with something like a semi-colon? If you're going to punctuate, puctuate. If not, then don't.