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    "Vietnano-Tech."

    1960-1977
    In 1976 several of the same engineers who had designed the Atari VCS were already laying out plans for a new set of chips with so much power and abilities for graphics and sounds that Atari's next game console would far overshadow its first creation, the VCS.




    Player 1: 3 Lives

    Round 1: Pong
    Score: 500

    between bars of candicane - paddles passing stars
    balance these late majestries -blip- saddle bashing arms
    between Viet.conflict and scars - whittled by charm,
    ...................... sickles hammers and battle arms.
    sorry's in the -blip- boarded closet, we're whored by Mcarthy.
    board games to war play on play dates for foreplay -
    importing tv's to Kennedy's, resting in Atari scores saved.

    X X X X X X X
    -100


    Player 1: 2 Lives

    Round 1: Pong
    Score: 400

    we'll kick -blip- cannon balls with a sable sanded boys limbs;
    napalm Niagara fall-outs along a single handed joy stick. + 200
    between a rock and a grid blip we've got a lot to compete with;
    beeps in a data stream bread limbs in a weathered sequence.
    scene destruction is -blip- on the breach of reconstruction,
    graphic custom in the peoples eyes of vietna-geo-sumption;
    our country rest solely on -blip- cartridge tongue holes,
    and hours of pong: in technology we march, a carpal tunnel.



    Player 1: 2 Lives

    Round 2: Tank
    Score: 600

    The fields been leveled up again - level 2 yields republicans
    as steel tanks take the maze of semi-full metal subsiquence.
    artificial incognito - NATO digital tape starts to mark the fiscal
    in hearts of tech elite ... enemy in sight start the lists roll:
    enlist all able hands and greater fingers, play war little gamers -
    wined the maze in brazen time, sifting multi-mines to single craters.

    X X X X X X X
    -100


    Player 1: 2 Lives

    Round 2: Tank
    Score: 500

    passing musket fat packs for chattering red tap pads;
    bayonets replaced by ravonettes along a generals last pass. +200
    techno-anti seldom, as radio control fancies well-done
    under napalm handy upper hand and we hum their antebellum.
    the toggle wobbles across the wheat grass valley reach
    reaching civilian city street ways and wayward alley sheep.
    killing on synthetic latex with prosthetic pace legs tilling,
    we walked before they learned to crawl away with haydays willing.



    Player 1: 2 Lives

    Final Round: Pacman
    Score: 700

    kicking rocks across a broken hot box, hope it's dead.
    i hope this top wont blow across my open head. -400
    with a joystick bound in each little boys grip we comb vietnow
    with remote controlled trolls, sweeping city coves we prowl
    skipping TNT and bleeding stones, a rebel ghost moves in ...
    searching trebled homes through thin settled scopes of tin - -200
    i need an outpost! screams the yellow bellied sweep,
    the rebels are gaining speed he needs a fellow allied team! -100





    GAME OVER!




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    Wow i liked this piece ...a lot.!!! I love the way you used the vietnam war and gave it a sense of a videogame...nice .very creative concept..the way you wrote it was a little confusing but i caught on midway through...nice multies were used here and there...vocab was on point...wow what more can i say but this piece was one of the best i've read in a long while...good job..looking forward to seeing more drops from you...
    plz rtf on battle in sig...thank you.

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    Wow. This has got to be one of the most unique OM's I've seen, so unique in fact, that I almost found myself lost in the story.

    This was a nice piece, you brought everything to the table, an easy to follow flow, a wide and pleasing range of vocabulary, artistic metaphors, and crystal clear imagery.

    I applaud this piece, it was worth the long read. Well done sir.

    Looking forward to your future pieces. Cheers

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    tis this yo ss piece you dropped.why you drop out tho....??.w/e


    did you add some ish to this joint or something and some more pictures... t'wood seem so....whole concept thing was spaced out.yeah t'was cool how you added the point score into the mix.yeah we done played those pacman shits like crazy...........

    vocab was quite forwardly advanced for the most part......rythym was crafted well..........

    Atari sit f'sho was the pop... tank .ha.shit is crazed


    nice piece


    check this


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=315291

    or dont like ery 1 else



    ha


    peace

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    I think I left feed on this in the SS battle, but I surely voted for it if I didn't give you the feedback the piece deserved. I hope everyone knows he took this weird ass picture and produced a hell of a story twisted around the topic, i loved the storytelling aspect of the points scored and the "blip" sounds, you did such a good job putting those in subtly and not letting it interfere with what I thought was an outstanding flow... I could see how a lot of people would get very lost in how your rhymescheme is going here and not even realize the effort you put into the meter alone.

    Really my favorite piece of the week out of everyone's I read in SS, you'd of beaten any other verse anyone else submitted had you battled anyone in my eyes, for both originality and story and a deceptively good flow. Just keep it up, I want to see you as the contender soon, I hope you enjoy the piece I'll be posting tonight for my battle vs Nahlidge, I'm kind of saving it for the curtain call so he can't react... it's written and done and I'm very happy with it.

    Peep it later around 8 or 9, if you can tonight, or whenever. But again, props on this piece, just a damned nice job and one of the few OMs I really enjoyed reading, rather than just kind of forced myself to read just to try and give someone some feedback.

    A.I.

    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."


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    Really appreciate that feed man- and I'm concidering going back into SS, not entirely sure yet though.
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    Atticus, atticus, atticus. My weird, white, poetry writing, Napoleon pass-off skateboarder friend. This was a dope piece man, you went up and over dude. I loved the comical sense of this piece, and it was pretty practical also man. Just a nice an 'politcally' correct piece man. I loved the way this was put together, just nice visuals and all man. I liked this, kid. Good job.

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    Thanks for all of the feedback- don't forget to concider an HOF nom if you see fit.
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    damm...this is a nice peice, ambiguous and definitely unique
    where do i start, well it seemed to me that you were
    actually staging the matches to correlate to certain
    periods in history sequentially, if you wernt thats the
    effect it had on me, i could go on about ya flow, vocab etc
    but tbh i think you covered all the cats and added some
    i mean the outstanding parts of this peice are numerous,
    though most def, its the originality, just fresh fam,
    won of the better ones ive read so far, nice technique

    keep rippin those scripts...

    if you got time here is a link to one of minez...peace

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=316236

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    Dude, I've slowly become a fan of yours. In the past I was always put off by you over-shadowing your pieces with constant use of metaphors.. but you now build your pieces with a specific theme of originality. & you never let up with it. This topic was hard as fuck to write, and I don't think anybody writing to it could have topped it. I remember putting up the pacman pic and was pondering withdrawing it due to it being too hard. But your use of relation between war and gaming was just dope. I'm also liking your inclusion of poetic/rap feel to all of your pieces.. I read this in your battle but had no time to vote. Glad you posted this up. Dope job, and this is a definate for OM HOF. Check out my latest.
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    haha this was a dope piece. i liked how u used actually video games n not just names like Alien Snatcher 7 or sumthin. ur rhyming was dopeyo. the topic was original i didnt get the title at first i thought it was gunna b about techno musik or sumthin but nah it turned out 2 be real dope. overall this was a dope piece
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    yep, sorry it took me so long to get to this one dude. Anyway, I liekd this a lot, I read this in SS and I'm pretty sure I commented on it too, but I can't remember, so fuck it I'll do it now. This was some real creative wacky shit dude, for real, I can imagine andything more perfect being wrote on this topic. I liked your message, it was striahgt up dope,and it was put across very well and was felt. You did dope with the whole video game/war thing you had going on, I could never think of something like that but when i see someone else do it, it makes me be like 'damn, why couldn't I have thought of that?' lol. Nice shit dude, you know I love your work and this was no exception, dope, props dude.

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