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    Nigga'z Ambitions

    As I sit here, I contemplate;
    About one day eating from a golden plate;
    A plate so beautiful, I cannot conceive;
    But I have faith in my ambition, and I know she shall achieve.

    I owe my God who pumped ambitious blood into my veins;
    All that I've had, have and will ever attain;
    I owe the people who made me back home;
    A glorious throne to sit on and marvel at how their son has grown;
    I owe my baby yet unborn;
    A life unplagued by Underachievement`s prickly thorne;
    I owe each and every person I have ever met;
    For they have each woven a thread in my ambition`s net;
    I owe my brethren for they have dutifully played their part;
    And I will always unconditionally hold them close to my heart;
    To my enemies I owe a standing ovation;
    For they have fueled and nourished my ambition;
    To me, I owe a glorious life after I take my ambitious life to completion;
    For I have not forgotten my fundamental ambition whose thirst will be quenched by my salvation.


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    You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

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    I'm the diamond in the dirt, that ain't been found
    I'm the underground king and I ain't been crowned


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    Good Piece, Good Effort...Only Problem is The Uneven Lines, Other Then This, It was Basically a Close To Perfect Piece With Good Vocabulary and Flow

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    quite a nice piece, dedication..i thought vocab stood out here..flow was spot on..maybe shorten some of the lines..that would make it gel together..
    Def Poets

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    It was really good. I thought structure was off, but keep the fuck at it.

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    Re: Nigga'z Ambitions

    Originally posted by Magnificent T


    I owe my God who pumped ambitious blood into my veins;


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    ..I like this piece..I think this line stood out..your vocab,wordplay,content..it was all there..a little short?..maybe not...A nice 'Piece...

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