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    My help

    And again im voted the insanely, easily the very best
    I rap like a veteran and wouldnt expect any less
    I control the mic, it fights back but its hopeless
    No one knows my next rhyme, dont even try to guess
    My lyrics slip out like an uncontrollable serpents tongue
    My lyrics can be angry, savage or proffesionally run
    Im indeed proffesional, second best to no one
    I dont need a gun, to refresh my lyrical sincerety
    All i need is my mouth, my rhymes and the feelings that direct me
    I got every other rapper, who dont know me tryin to battle me
    They may put me down but they dont know my writin capability
    Im showin so they cant rush me, im a lyrical mastermind in my own right
    You're the darkness that was succeeded by incoming bright light
    Im the light straight from the fair G.O.D
    Iv become rappin with my flows helped by Masta C
    Before i got logged in nobody knew that my spirit was free
    But when i got connected i became the exclusive RT
    Not right tackle but Rural Thug, not you, my dad, just me
    Im the only muthafucker wit a rap attitude and its still so easy
    These lyrics just flow like water down the hoover dam
    Im as elusive as the terrorist Osama Bin Laden
    I wont get caught like the dirty and stinkin Saddam
    Im a controller but dont play those war games that Dubya plays
    Bring back the exciting and crazy Clinton days
    When him and Monica was the latest craze
    But these days, its all about rappin and feeling good
    Being sexy, fit , successful, hip, creatin new tunes
    But no matter what i try there is no beating the creation of ego
    My views of myself go to fast and slip though the grasp of a speedo
    I keep to my speed limit, just keepin it legal
    Im still explosive, better than your lyrics that expose your evil
    I leave this time, keepin your options feeble
    I'll rap back later, talk to you tomorow
    Rural

    Like the french say...todays MERCredi!

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    thought this had a nice flow going for most.... the content didnt really stick out,,, but some of ya vocab was good... the scheme was ok, but places could be better,,,even it out a bit... and work on multis...but,,, ok....pZ...
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    It was okay. Topic was something I've read before a lot, but you had some good wordplay. You need to work on making it more complex though. Keep up.

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    Start replying to other open mics or yours will get closed, Thanks.

    Iv become rappin with my flows helped by Masta C
    ^I dont remember helping you but oh well lol

    But this was ok....your structure in this was alright, it could use some work on some lines though, some of them were kinda stretched out, just watch that stuff....you had some good vocab through out this....try adding some multies to make this better...but overall this was alright..keep at it.

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    help?....lol...
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