...:::Purge Night - GOW, E.L., Illunatic, & Jukon:::...

[Nohbody]

"Blessed be the New Founding Fathers for
letting us Purge and cleanse our souls,
Blessed be America, a nation reborn

...:::God Of War:::...
Sordid thoughts, swords n glocks, can’t ignore its cost
ready to purge, heavy words, create enormous loss
war is boss, shit ignited when, the lions den, inside this pen
exploded, to show it,. Was really a fucking leviathan
wont compromise again, I is sin, no rest for the dreary
toxic gasses, cloths n matches, take a breath for the weary
its wreckless engineering, if you start to lose grip
hard now, when u got a smart mouth, saying stupid shit
ive been here doing this, never had a fear of the worst
bodies nicely, put behind me welcome to the year of the purge

...:::Enoch Light:::...
Tinted visions parked beneath the dark of my eyelids
Iris sparked explosions; my heart ignited like fire pits
I admire it, yet fear the hate inside that requires it
This violent cultures a vile vulture flying over silent
Compliance stitched to an upper lip can’t spit the truth
Been a grip since I’ve spent a few minutes in the booth
Chipped a tooth chewing words with a forked tongue
Purge sirens thumping through the air like a war drum
My cores numb, blood pumping through the chest
Sweat pouring from my skin pores like its burning flesh
Confessions of a maniac who needs his hunger fed
Voices filling up my head getting heckled by the dead
Poison lead, tonight I Purge to get my mind stifled
A portrait of a poet trading his golden mic for a rifle

...:::ILLunatic:::...
Evil tendencies inside of me, crying for actions so violently
As I feign the taste of blood; I hold it in so privately
These explicit visions of someone wishing forbiddance
And then I notice the one wishing, the victim; it isn't
Internal soul, pleading forgiveness. But the cynical grin, relentless
Then I realize, all the years of living in fear was clearly pretentious
Cearly a message, voices I've heard were really obsession
Unwilling to live in contention, just unholy wrath will be my affection
Consumed in darkness, never knew I could be so heartless
Rage being conveyed in my veins in the creative way of an artist
As I plot my next act, it's a fact this high is comparative to crack
Never to retract; the Good Samaritan will never be back

...:::Jukon:::...
my soul matches the sky, dark and unforgiving,
hardly benefitting from the life that I've been living.
dreaming for months, scars from biting my tongue,
the pressure is intense as the night has just begun.
a few more minutes and I can unleash,
the demons inside of me, as I paint the street.
death is euphoric, this pain; we've endorsed it,
cutting corners to find loopholes as the angst begins forming.
alarm bells ring and the road floods with screams,
wading through the waves is where I find my peace.
I trudge, deep into Armageddon, hell is where I'm headed,
the final stand, fighting my motives, trapped at a dead end.
strapped with my weapon of choice, a fully loaded needle,
I'd have to be unaware, and numb from every feeling.

The truth is, I'm not ruthless and it's no secret,
I'd rather binge into oblivion, than purge on the weaker.

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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...74-RIP-America
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...702-Underneath

[OG Maestro]

Great to see all of you respectable writers come together, but there was a severe lack of action taking place in each of these 4 verses.
I could quote lines for rhyme schemes but nothing really reached out to me and I think it'd serve no real purpose. But there are nice technical shit put into some of this. I liked bits of Kayge's verse and ILL's. GOW's was the weakest for me based off of the low amount of content -- as far as progressive ideas and things put into motion -- he did his thing for a comeback verse tho. Jukon had a average showing, and it's not reflective of his true ability as a writer so I won't be too harsh on how I judge him; however...BOYY, aint no way in hell you finna get away with rhyming "screams" and "peace", or "needle" and "feeling", AND HOW YOU GON END THE WHOLE OM WITH A "secret" and "weaker" rhyme.

Mannnn, remember... i'm just the ole 2013 rookie. aint like my opinion matters, right? but if I'm honest and think there's one last impression this piece leaves me with, it's this: I think this is the most wasteful collaborative OM I've ever seen on here. Yall are champions, and this isn't a quadruple-champion-level collab to me. And tbh, I could probably write something by myself, in 4 different verses better than this. Dev and Truth Iscariot could tag team and beat this.
Like I said, the writing is decent to good, but it's how there's a lack of progression in the action. Basically each person described, nearly, the same character in 4 different ways. (or 4 different but similar characters). Yo. This OM looks like 4 sweaty psychopaths huffin and puffin and talking to themselves while preparing to run down the street. Kinda creepy lol, but I DO appreciate it for what it is.

I only say this to hopefully inspire yall old asses to do this again, because it's nice to see yall pick the pen back up. Especially ILL LAZY ASS. Granted, most of yall(if not all?) have wives and children so I'm not really hatin on the lack of material I see from yall but I'mma put the pressure on yall necks so we can get more. So yeah, give us more of this.

This is looking like a solid 6.5/10. hmu if yall want a lengthy point rating for theme/plot/story, rhythm, rhyme scheme, etc. i doubt yall need that tho.

[Soule]

This was pretty fucking dope. If you guys decide to do a Part II, hit me up for sure. Everyone involved came to the table with Aquafina for flow. So smooth. The pace never fell short and kept consistent from start to finish because all of you complimented each other's styles. The concept was cool, especially since I seen the new Purge film on 4th of July and loved it. Overall, I have nothing negative to say so I'll just quote my favorite bars and nominate this bitch...

exploded, to show it,. Was really a fucking leviathan

Confessions of a maniac who needs his hunger fed
Voices filling up my head getting heckled by the dead

Consumed in darkness, never knew I could be so heartless
Rage being conveyed in my veins in the creative way of an artist

alarm bells ring and the road floods with screams,
wading through the waves is where I find my peace.

[The Law]

GOW - Real dope start. Multi packed and still managed to make it flow smooth was nice in its own because most text heads fail to do that. Liked that leviathan bar. Real nice way to start the collab off and make an impact for readers to want to continue on.

Enoch - You fuckin' killed it man. I loved that verse top to bottom. Imagery was pin point in painting the picture. forked tongue/war drum bar was my favorite.

ILL - Nice way to keep it going. Crisp flow, them closing 4 lines in your verse was dope.

Jukon - Great way to close off a great collab. Final bar put that finishing touch on the whole the drop too.

I dig the Purge concept. Actually haven't seen the last two movies for it. This definitely was ill collab together and all four of you mesh well with each others styles. I definitely wouldn't mind reading more collabs from you four.